tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post1776627044068268864..comments2024-03-28T15:32:26.808-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Paris, Au RevoirFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger37125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-87879314546655580982012-06-09T04:26:59.750-04:002012-06-09T04:26:59.750-04:00Thanks to your reading this months later I did not...Thanks to your reading this months later I did not miss out on reading this piece of genius. I think it is interesting to read Claudia's comment at the top of this chain....how she mentions "the softness of the voice" which is fitting for your having actually given it voice tonight. Loved it.Lydiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11135393270656573516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-35324373181400974352012-06-09T02:27:12.897-04:002012-06-09T02:27:12.897-04:00I wonder how I could have missed this poem back in...I wonder how I could have missed this poem back in August!? I've never read a "break up" poem so filled with compassion and understanding, even of the weaknesses of the one who must be left behind, the vanity of focusing always on her own reflection. To hear you read it doubled the emotional factor, and placed the farewell firmly in reality.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-19542045637817450472012-06-08T22:45:05.343-04:002012-06-08T22:45:05.343-04:00Brilliant writing, kiddo, and if you wrote a novel...Brilliant writing, kiddo, and if you wrote a novel like this, in this tone, it would likely be a NYT best seller. Wowzers!!!!!!!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-25674280032024438892011-08-23T09:10:05.087-04:002011-08-23T09:10:05.087-04:00Nice...!Nice...!Willy Landscapehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02527638182132244115noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-74814451568411661612011-08-23T07:26:58.611-04:002011-08-23T07:26:58.611-04:00it is so difficult to leave me with nothing else t...it is so difficult to leave me with nothing else to say, to add<br />yet that is what you have done<br />Brava!Diannehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02946500110072411468noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-48981685079522338782011-08-23T06:52:46.511-04:002011-08-23T06:52:46.511-04:00The gentle control of the razor...a crucifixion of...The gentle control of the razor...a crucifixion of inner treasures and soft sensitivities without ever slipping into melodramatic mayhem! A master painter paints the invisible and lets the identity evolve! Stunning!Gemma Wisemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17466540188839321484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44554146416854492522011-08-22T17:51:58.294-04:002011-08-22T17:51:58.294-04:00You had me at bonjour....only you could make a sad...You had me at bonjour....only you could make a sad goodbye...captivating....love this Shay! :-)Carrie Van Hornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11715648073882529202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16398500418935758082011-08-22T15:33:55.041-04:002011-08-22T15:33:55.041-04:00Wow!!! Glad you are back to the poetry, FB.Wow!!! Glad you are back to the poetry, FB.Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-50263257345860508042011-08-22T15:17:57.958-04:002011-08-22T15:17:57.958-04:00Hold Me Closer Crazy Dancer...Hold Me Closer Crazy Dancer...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-65290023330404480822011-08-22T14:11:50.845-04:002011-08-22T14:11:50.845-04:00The thoughts conveyed by your words in this piece ...The thoughts conveyed by your words in this piece pierced my heart. Not with that fatal piercing that would cause it to cease from beating again but in a prickly manner that heightened my love of words and those that use them well. More importantly, this piece with some of it's reflecting and referenced nuances affected me<br />profoundly. Thank you for being that 'gag fly' that Socrates made reference to.<br /><br />This piece affected me like Shelley and Byron. It spoke to me with the passion in my language of birth, Spanish. Gracias!Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10713672589582754484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-72706836950805090692011-08-22T11:37:08.706-04:002011-08-22T11:37:08.706-04:00Wow ... I am catching up .. reading, re-reading .....Wow ... I am catching up .. reading, re-reading .. loving that you're BACK!Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-26319914064377342922011-08-22T08:23:51.198-04:002011-08-22T08:23:51.198-04:00Opium silence....those words are powerful. I think...Opium silence....those words are powerful. I think about Neruda's poem about quietness and lovers, "I Like for You to Be Still."Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-56388258304431010602011-08-22T00:17:54.111-04:002011-08-22T00:17:54.111-04:00what they said!
only you can top yourself, Shay, ...what they said!<br /><br />only you can top yourself, Shay, and you've done it brilliantly!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-26097223700114841082011-08-21T22:57:21.467-04:002011-08-21T22:57:21.467-04:00Shay, there are so many adjectives tripping throug...Shay, there are so many adjectives tripping through my mind as I read this. The almost matter-of-fact voice that's ready to explode, iciness, scathing, powerful. Wow. As assortment of emotions and determination. Sad, but in a sense freeing if someone has been held captive in an abusive or unhealthy relationship. VictoriaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-56793623408460929252011-08-21T22:47:26.612-04:002011-08-21T22:47:26.612-04:00"So quiet, like monsters of the deep, slumber..."So quiet, like monsters of the deep, slumbering."<br /><br />"No, I won't be back this time<br />With my sad smile and sigh, and my<br />Prescriptions<br />Like small officious doctors themselves."<br /><br />Woohoo! Man, now this is what I call poetry. This piece stung so deep it hurt *me*.HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-81659218250415448122011-08-21T21:35:29.526-04:002011-08-21T21:35:29.526-04:00Don't know what I can add to the other comment...Don't know what I can add to the other comments except to say that it must've hurt to go wherever you went to write this piece, and it was very brave of you. The imagery was gorgeous and scary all at once. Each word was picked like the perfect flower and arranged just so. You are amazing.Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-11852074908230180452011-08-21T20:54:47.717-04:002011-08-21T20:54:47.717-04:00Powerful, icy... rippled muscles of self worth and...Powerful, icy... rippled muscles of self worth and self loathing wrapped tightly within, without... beautifully shared.Reflectionshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09655163868990155242noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-15851380791578890142011-08-21T20:15:57.314-04:002011-08-21T20:15:57.314-04:00Like everyone ese, I'm moved, enthralled, ench...Like everyone ese, I'm moved, enthralled, enchanted. <br />'This opium peace in silence', 'Prescriptions / like small officious doctors themselves'. Bu tit's hard to select any one piece of this deceptively gentle, cumulative tale. It's a delight in so many ways ...and sad and scary too. It's practically a novel in one poem!Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-18160503775075415832011-08-21T19:33:34.171-04:002011-08-21T19:33:34.171-04:00I think you've done something miraculous here,...I think you've done something miraculous here, bear with me while I try to explain it: "The special advantage of literature is that it doesn't (like people) dodge around and make a lot of noise and then vanish from view. Literature, on paper in dried ink marks, is made of assertions that stay put, fairly to be examined, lying open to the play of the eye... The miracle of the grammatical sentence is that it can be shared - that it can thump softly through the wall of the lonely self." - Louis B. Jones While you clearly have connected with us through the medium of language I would assert that your piece of literature is not fixed on this page. That in its honesty and complexity it has transcended the confines of its existence and come alive. Great art does this, allows us to come back again and again and gain something new, as if the object we're interacting with is alive. This is masterful, artful, and shockingly alive.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-81067175734173799282011-08-21T18:05:19.070-04:002011-08-21T18:05:19.070-04:00It worked me up. The feelings and the tie seemed m...It worked me up. The feelings and the tie seemed made in heaven but somehow he must go. How hurting to abandon a relationship in such manner. Very beautiful poetry!kaykualahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03240206222973305395noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44581249961127369542011-08-21T17:27:15.055-04:002011-08-21T17:27:15.055-04:00This is like a good boxer. It sways before you, t...This is like a good boxer. It sways before you, tantalizingly out of reach, then it breaks your nose. Brilliant, Shay.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-88187192098446887812011-08-21T16:36:23.901-04:002011-08-21T16:36:23.901-04:00I can't give you praise higher than what other...I can't give you praise higher than what others have offered here - all so well deserved.<br /><br />I read this several times trying to wrap my mind around its images and it took me through a veil piercing a mind that had clung to shreds of sanity, then finally relinquished it. Actions pierced the other side of order while keeping precise observations of both sides.<br /><br />In this way it is both shocking and satisfying. WOW!Beachannyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08638256396472533685noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-29764232486396151242011-08-21T15:58:22.372-04:002011-08-21T15:58:22.372-04:00Ooooh Shay, you are brilliant!Ooooh Shay, you are brilliant!Susannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09581993763700327953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-78369821194762220722011-08-21T15:20:18.432-04:002011-08-21T15:20:18.432-04:00Your muse is back!
Lovely imagery!Your muse is back!<br /><br />Lovely imagery!Jennyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12462124067637610359noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-64475982585657216032011-08-21T14:25:00.261-04:002011-08-21T14:25:00.261-04:00This piece is SO powerful! This is my favorite lin...This piece is SO powerful! This is my favorite line: "It was just the outward radiance Of the cauldron I carried" ... and these descriptions as well: "So quiet, like monsters of the deep," "opium peace," "Prescriptions Like small officious doctors themselves," and "Where its perch is peaceful,<br />Sane And still" ... You made me feel it, Shay. And that is the mark of a great poem. ~safehousepoetry.wordpress.com✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.com