tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post1840478715148735362..comments2024-03-28T21:52:15.546-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Chamber DuetFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44994475437174173842012-01-21T01:54:37.360-05:002012-01-21T01:54:37.360-05:00i would NEVER have guessed that you wrote this usi...i would NEVER have guessed that you wrote this using a word list, SP! it's so brilliant... so evocative... so full of striking imagery... so SHAY!<br /><br />i'm going to stop calling what i write poetry...<br /><br />{sigh}<br />♥Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-81546152792382033762012-01-20T18:38:47.663-05:002012-01-20T18:38:47.663-05:00Did you read Glenn's poem "Jambalaya,&quo...Did you read Glenn's poem "Jambalaya," written using the word list? I think you'll like it.<br /><br />http://bibliosity.blogspot.com/2012/01/jambalaya.html<br /><br />~Shawna<br />rosemarymint.wordpress.com✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16930365831502997802012-01-19T13:57:25.318-05:002012-01-19T13:57:25.318-05:00First of all, great use of the words. I had to loo...First of all, great use of the words. I had to look some of them up:~)<br /><br />The lines that got me were these:<br /><br />"Now, if I move you at all,<br />It is with the edge of a cypress branch,<br />To roll you like a dismal log in a fire of rot."<br /><br />Oh, that's chilling.Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-28092794500676764932012-01-18T12:44:33.607-05:002012-01-18T12:44:33.607-05:00I bow to your greatness. That was amazing.
xo jjI bow to your greatness. That was amazing.<br />xo jjJoanna Jenkinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10836376588710862173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85478820731169603692012-01-18T10:54:07.066-05:002012-01-18T10:54:07.066-05:00You deserve each and every accolade!You deserve each and every accolade!Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-45368223243355837802012-01-17T22:41:52.070-05:002012-01-17T22:41:52.070-05:00Such an angry piece, but this line was beautiful:
...Such an angry piece, but this line was beautiful:<br /><br />"I will use tiny silver clippers to trim the soulful timbre from the cello,<br />Rendering it a balsa fiddle"<br /><br />Very well done!HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-45348265342464782622012-01-17T21:41:37.622-05:002012-01-17T21:41:37.622-05:00Once again, I find myself saying, "How does s...Once again, I find myself saying, "How does she come up with that?!!" It reads so effortlessly on the page. You are just amazing, girl!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16114314710911597132012-01-17T20:19:47.229-05:002012-01-17T20:19:47.229-05:00You are a 'songstress' in my mind and hear...You are a 'songstress' in my mind and heart. Your voice, your pitch, your verses are quite soothing. Don't wake me, let me sleep in this bed of melifluous bed springs. thank you for singing to me.Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10713672589582754484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-24506292307498736912012-01-17T20:14:07.222-05:002012-01-17T20:14:07.222-05:00Wow, this is great. I love the first stanza. An...Wow, this is great. I love the first stanza. And "a repostiory of false notes and refined choking."<br />Great job with the words!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-82131189698378565192012-01-17T19:34:59.789-05:002012-01-17T19:34:59.789-05:00"...char the moon's pale edges". Lov..."...char the moon's pale edges". Love it!<br /><br />Pat<br />Critter AlleyPat Wahlerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01138619912065680084noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-45800077167964892272012-01-17T13:43:51.471-05:002012-01-17T13:43:51.471-05:00I was enchanted as soon as I came across your blog...I was enchanted as soon as I came across your blog this morning - am following and will be back to read and explore more.<br /><br />I also wanted to let you know that I have presented you with the Leibster Blog award - please visit my blog for more details. Congratulations! I hope you enjoy your award! ~ JulieJulie Catherine Vignahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06943746493490913991noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44575397141575726432012-01-17T12:23:08.908-05:002012-01-17T12:23:08.908-05:00I look at the word list and go: "Impossible!&...I look at the word list and go: "Impossible!" and wander away to make a cup of coffee. And look what you did with it. But you're just clever that way. Great writing, Shay - and the cool thing about you having time off is we get to read more of your wonderful poems. Who needs to write? I think I'll just sit here a while and wait for your next one? hee hee.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-35892505480803410992012-01-17T11:56:54.677-05:002012-01-17T11:56:54.677-05:00And, with a word list no less! I'm off to bur...And, with a word list no less! I'm off to burn my hair and writing materials . . .Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44746392864224815762012-01-17T10:45:01.315-05:002012-01-17T10:45:01.315-05:00and you used them well .. now cool them down and ...and you used them well .. now cool them down and let them rest ...Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-62077938086009749032012-01-17T08:50:04.799-05:002012-01-17T08:50:04.799-05:00This tastes bitter sweet - the fall from grace and...This tastes bitter sweet - the fall from grace and love, and the longing to go back to times shared in joy.<br />So many excellent motifs, among them the sailor's bones and the moon's pale edge.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-24141179575165060732012-01-17T05:55:48.641-05:002012-01-17T05:55:48.641-05:00You rose to the challenge and conquered it. Very ...You rose to the challenge and conquered it. Very cool, Shay.Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-92142957049368126522012-01-17T05:41:47.460-05:002012-01-17T05:41:47.460-05:00"I will use tiny silver clippers to trim the ..."I will use tiny silver clippers to trim the soulful timbre from the cello,<br />Rendering it a balsa fiddle;<br />A repository of false notes and refined choking,<br />A waterside abomination,<br />Our love song evermore" <br /><br />The last stanza is my favorite, but like everyone else, my mind is boggled. You took that weird list of words, and created THAT?<br /><br />(Shay must be stopped. ;)Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-69736199368154765472012-01-16T22:35:23.607-05:002012-01-16T22:35:23.607-05:00Nothing like a well-placed curse word, I always sa...Nothing like a well-placed curse word, I always say :).<br /><br />I really enjoyed this one.Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-72177114506733532492012-01-16T22:06:21.232-05:002012-01-16T22:06:21.232-05:00you ARE a poetic goddess!
Aloha from Waikiki
Com...you ARE a poetic goddess!<br /><br /><br />Aloha from Waikiki<br /><a href="http://comfortspiral.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Comfort Spiral</a><br /> <br /> > < } } ( ° >Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-84343816390023074572012-01-16T21:50:55.839-05:002012-01-16T21:50:55.839-05:00Ditto to what everyone's said and I especially...Ditto to what everyone's said and I especially like the tone.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-8613401297762793572012-01-16T21:49:02.323-05:002012-01-16T21:49:02.323-05:00I agree with Brian--someone has to tie you down an...I agree with Brian--someone has to tie you down and stop you before the rest of us start burning our writing materials and/or hair off. Yeesh. I really like the word list--and your poem kind of rocks and rolls all over it. I love the swamp witch mood of this one--a lot. So the past becomes interred, never shaken and rarely stirred, and then only at arm's length, <i>de rigeur</i> That last stanza is some bitter chicory brew to wash it all down with, too.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-53886522619899726862012-01-16T21:47:59.052-05:002012-01-16T21:47:59.052-05:00You are a poetic goddess ... as we've all said...You are a poetic goddess ... as we've all said many times before. And yes, perhaps the tiniest bit of a show-off. And I'm so glad you are. Someone should be. :)<br /><br />Love these:<br /><br />"they float their bones up from salt water"<br /><br />"There was a time when you could char the moon's pale edges simply by looking up"<br /><br />"Everything must be de rigueur and scripted to within an inch of its life."<br /><br />Thank you, Shay, for raising the bar at the Monday Melting.<br /><br />~Shawna<br />(rosemarymint.wordpress.com)✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-84243947920326489272012-01-16T21:22:21.891-05:002012-01-16T21:22:21.891-05:00seriously...this is like the 15 poem you posted in...seriously...this is like the 15 poem you posted in two days...you are putting others to shame...ok so maybe you just make me feel bad...smiles. you deserve an award or something. where is my glitter...<br /><br />Now, if I move you at all,<br />It is with the edge of a cypress branch,<br />To roll you like a dismal log in a fire of rot.<br /><br />nice. emotive...<br /><br /><br />and the abomination...our love song...nice...<br /><br />now i will go catch a rabbit and glue glitter on it just for you...<br /><br />it may be a long night.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com