tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post2944402503075523876..comments2024-03-28T21:52:15.546-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Ode For A Young BeautyFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-73180321410427272172012-10-26T23:42:44.340-04:002012-10-26T23:42:44.340-04:00My mother always said .. beauty is as beauty does....My mother always said .. beauty is as beauty does.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-73744415108187351562012-10-16T19:09:29.235-04:002012-10-16T19:09:29.235-04:00I was surprised by the hollow stem, after all of t...I was surprised by the hollow stem, after all of the beautiful lines. Got a cackle out of "bitter old hags unite". Hee hee. You are a caution. I managed to walk out of the SPCA today withOUT a puppy. (They locked them all up when they saw me coming, hee hee.)Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-65808555318231049772012-10-16T16:03:47.798-04:002012-10-16T16:03:47.798-04:00I think that's my favourite poem so far, I lov...I think that's my favourite poem so far, I loved the first verse especially...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11213895832127088168noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-46590799173647553032012-10-16T11:06:04.336-04:002012-10-16T11:06:04.336-04:00Thank you, shay for your condolences. It means a l...Thank you, shay for your condolences. It means a lot to me. ayalahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13243362803799877014noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66357490565794393222012-10-16T10:38:51.783-04:002012-10-16T10:38:51.783-04:00Love this Fireblossom
Love what Cloudia said. Wis...Love this Fireblossom<br /><br />Love what Cloudia said. Wish I could release myself from the torment of lust and pride but I'm a man made of animal skin.<br /><br /> Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10713672589582754484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-64825211774694422502012-10-16T10:13:16.001-04:002012-10-16T10:13:16.001-04:00she's obviously a Republican ... she types, du...she's obviously a Republican ... she types, ducking and running .. Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-70115733286266696912012-10-16T10:11:27.831-04:002012-10-16T10:11:27.831-04:00Love your opening two lines, Shay and the flowers ...Love your opening two lines, Shay and the flowers face an asterisk...nicely worded. :)Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-90930969709477769182012-10-16T10:05:51.719-04:002012-10-16T10:05:51.719-04:00Ha! An envelope quatrain... I see what you have do...Ha! An envelope quatrain... I see what you have done here... and I like the result very much :)Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-3400417733552503502012-10-16T10:00:01.636-04:002012-10-16T10:00:01.636-04:00This is freaking incredible, Shay.This is freaking incredible, Shay.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66860638867785281962012-10-16T09:55:56.509-04:002012-10-16T09:55:56.509-04:00P.S. "asterisk" = "aster risk"...P.S. "asterisk" = "aster risk" ... You don't want to mess with this girl. She's unpredictable and dangerous, particularly because she has no clue who she is (or maybe she really isn't anything at all). So you'll certainly never figure her out. Only the reaper really sees.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-7485963730725571392012-10-16T08:01:07.223-04:002012-10-16T08:01:07.223-04:00Sounds like most of the girls I went to high schoo...Sounds like most of the girls I went to high school with!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-15967184742730308222012-10-16T05:50:40.211-04:002012-10-16T05:50:40.211-04:00Bitter old hags unite! Ha! Bitter old hags unite! Ha! Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16427265090942567482012-10-16T05:16:44.300-04:002012-10-16T05:16:44.300-04:00I appreciate how you went from "precocious, p...I appreciate how you went from "precocious, prideful, pretty elf.." to "your thin, deceiving, hollow stem." I could see this coming. I liked the flow and echoes of image, the alliteration and the snap at the end. Carol Steel https://www.blogger.com/profile/01331628292567383426noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-2685612127907108392012-10-16T00:59:58.001-04:002012-10-16T00:59:58.001-04:00Exquisite. I found this gripping and painful to re...Exquisite. I found this gripping and painful to read:<br /><br />"your flower's face an asterisk--<br />the reaper's scythe exposes quick<br />your thin, deceiving, hollow stem"<br /><br />I love the way you played with "asters" and "asterisk." What a gorgeous image--petals presented as an outburst of asterisk. This is a clue that the poem is about a writer.<br /><br />If she is swan-necked, she holds her head high. But we quickly find out she comes from the streets and has turned herself into "something" from "nothing." But it's all trickery. She hasn't really grown; she's only figured out how to fluff up her petals so that she look beautiful; this gets her what she wants. But really, she's empty.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-65679461045931356692012-10-16T00:06:42.564-04:002012-10-16T00:06:42.564-04:00You surprised me with the "thin, deceiving, h...You surprised me with the "thin, deceiving, hollow stem." in this "Ode for a young beauty". . . "my swan-necked sylph." You eithe r have more characters in here than I spotted (I think the Gamin and elf are the same as the sylph)--or, beauty is truly only skin deep! I enjoyed the surprise. a haggish praise indeed. Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-62962538141655408362012-10-15T23:43:06.530-04:002012-10-15T23:43:06.530-04:00Too many of them big words in this here poem. I do...Too many of them big words in this here poem. I don't have much book-learnin' so I'll just shuffle off...Seriously, what kind of skillful sphincter did you pull this out of?<br /><br />Shay, you always shine.Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-36248325928761797992012-10-15T21:58:32.671-04:002012-10-15T21:58:32.671-04:00Congrats on making me look up the word "diade...Congrats on making me look up the word "diadem". I'm now that much smarter...HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-59439371849957343352012-10-15T21:47:27.048-04:002012-10-15T21:47:27.048-04:00A gamin grown where asters bloom~i love that line!...A gamin grown where asters bloom~i love that line!<br />And agree with hedge(of course)<br />Pride? I shucked that long ago<br />Enough falls will do that to yaFar Beyond The Ridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05854741339081490896noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-8499110888802884752012-10-15T21:39:24.590-04:002012-10-15T21:39:24.590-04:00You make every poetic device work overtime for you...You make every poetic device work overtime for you here, from alliteration to meter, to the form itself, which seems to open like an envelope, or a milkweed pod, and show an unexpected woman inside. (The asterisk line cost me a double handful of hair.)Just exquisitely neat stuff, Shay.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-86994375405199143032012-10-15T21:31:23.199-04:002012-10-15T21:31:23.199-04:00I feared being bitter, but I'm kinda happy to ...I feared being bitter, but I'm kinda happy to be childlike and wandering again liberated from the aweful longings and torments of lust...pride...fashion sense...<br /><br /><br />Aloha from Honolulu<br /><a href="http://comfortspiral.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Comfort Spiral</a><br /> <br /> > < } } ( ° ><br />Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-10602753628082083422012-10-15T21:24:29.958-04:002012-10-15T21:24:29.958-04:00i like your tag 'bitter old hags unite' wh...i like your tag 'bitter old hags unite' where do i sign up?TexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13641962051044162710noreply@blogger.com