tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post32040537448789273..comments2024-03-28T19:48:05.247-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): HomecomingFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger23125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-49186836158576295552011-06-17T02:52:13.936-04:002011-06-17T02:52:13.936-04:00It is a beautifully crafted poem, one that would m...It is a beautifully crafted poem, one that would make a perfect centerpieceAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16567470494995213573noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-82420306069227269662011-06-13T13:03:19.553-04:002011-06-13T13:03:19.553-04:00It seems like a scene in a movie - I can just see ...It seems like a scene in a movie - I can just see it.Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-41514735799701489242011-06-13T10:37:22.756-04:002011-06-13T10:37:22.756-04:00I wouldnt want to wake up ....I wouldnt want to wake up ....Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-40699487863743872942011-06-13T01:06:56.576-04:002011-06-13T01:06:56.576-04:00Your dreamscape reminds me of Gone With the Wind. ...Your dreamscape reminds me of Gone With the Wind. The photo is unreal, I think, and the poem captures some of that in the swirling mysterious elements that one cannot quite get one's arms around.Ann Grenierhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13501522748426995035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66955222879839288712011-06-13T00:36:49.326-04:002011-06-13T00:36:49.326-04:00Fantastic narrative! If Stephen King wrote poetry...Fantastic narrative! If Stephen King wrote poetry it would sound like this :-)HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-48692709737457010592011-06-13T00:33:25.294-04:002011-06-13T00:33:25.294-04:00You made me think of a Lost and Found. You had me...You made me think of a Lost and Found. You had me from the start and I found relief at the end. I loved your analagous words pouring out ... the dentist, the tin sheriff star, the cat, and you should see my out of control rose bush right now! You just kept delivering! Wonderful.Patriciahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00991524097486901864noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44954129796159749312011-06-13T00:10:42.651-04:002011-06-13T00:10:42.651-04:00Love the story line, but best of all loved the spi...Love the story line, but best of all loved the spill of fresh word dances ... like healing water gushing from a new spring! Wonderful!Gemma Wisemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17466540188839321484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-5527748474344604382011-06-12T22:54:01.665-04:002011-06-12T22:54:01.665-04:00"I felt my heart spread out like a rose bush ..."I felt my heart spread out like a rose bush in June--" - there's always a line in your poems (though all the lines are wonderful) that just sets the tone and wraps it up completely, Shay.TALONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-22066253295184778862011-06-12T22:50:05.031-04:002011-06-12T22:50:05.031-04:00"My heart spread out like a rose bush in June..."My heart spread out like a rose bush in June." I love that line! Is the Ruined Dentist of Fremont St. anything like the Demon Barber of Fleet St.?Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-62860515098807842482011-06-12T22:31:12.278-04:002011-06-12T22:31:12.278-04:00Fantastic imagery weaved in your words.The journey...Fantastic imagery weaved in your words.The journey of emotion is really felt in the read, great write! ~ RoseAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09988016086874324471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-72463320632583191112011-06-12T20:53:02.320-04:002011-06-12T20:53:02.320-04:00I adore the image of the weather changing like an ...I adore the image of the weather changing like an old cat in a rocking chair.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-59464545243242599352011-06-12T18:54:45.034-04:002011-06-12T18:54:45.034-04:00I loved the line about the ruined dentist...and if...I loved the line about the ruined dentist...and if only I hadn't cared so much about not ruining my white dresses when I was a kid...I would've experienced more happy tears. This is a sweet one, my friend. Glad I stopped by on this beautiful Sunday to read it. Hugs, Scarlet xoIleanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11200869126695231050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-91322633222494881972011-06-12T17:22:55.374-04:002011-06-12T17:22:55.374-04:00The voice in this piece is superb. As writer you ...The voice in this piece is superb. As writer you took on the persona and allowed her to drive the narrative. It's simply beautiful. <br /><br />Check out this prompt site if you're interested. I'd love it if you played along.<br /><a href="http://sundaywhirl.wordpress.com/" rel="nofollow">The Sunday Whirl</a>brenda whttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00846306414656375463noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-10715095814629881462011-06-12T15:55:40.894-04:002011-06-12T15:55:40.894-04:00I'm about to leave mine so this was a bit of a...I'm about to leave mine so this was a bit of a tearful read. I'll come back one day maybeAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-70137498117772735002011-06-12T15:11:43.367-04:002011-06-12T15:11:43.367-04:00Simply brilliant.Simply brilliant.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-8181249431247780192011-06-12T12:08:43.848-04:002011-06-12T12:08:43.848-04:00carefree times and the heart speaking of love in w...carefree times and the heart speaking of love in whispers to small to deny.all combines to showcase a piece dripping with memories all have experienced.loved it.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08660545422931632039noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-72483878189516406202011-06-12T11:59:48.003-04:002011-06-12T11:59:48.003-04:00This takes the lush but somewhat brittle too-good-...This takes the lush but somewhat brittle too-good-to-be-true stageset of the photo, puts it in the dreamscape refuge, and peoples it with all the brilliantly-garbed mummers of the psyche. An extraordinary narrative of missiles and milestones whirring by us in the night, wrapped in cinematic flickering light and secrets we don't know how to tell. Just amazing, Shay. The second stanza is something only you could write..and "To them, we are the ghosts.." "tree blossoms like cherub faces..." just excellent. profoundly real stuff.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-75049479546280092202011-06-12T11:51:58.890-04:002011-06-12T11:51:58.890-04:00When love spreads indiscriminately among blooms an...When love spreads indiscriminately among blooms and thorn... a very beautiful thought.dustushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07796500077556153584noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63819171272730673212011-06-12T11:40:24.657-04:002011-06-12T11:40:24.657-04:00This is stunningly beautiful and you have one awes...This is stunningly beautiful and you have one awesome talent!<br /><br />Wow!Louise Gallagherhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522775693728655487noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-8159801431422697292011-06-12T11:20:03.418-04:002011-06-12T11:20:03.418-04:00this sounds like someone - a couple most probably ...this sounds like someone - a couple most probably but for me it speaks of a teenager losing his/her way and even if she/he is still "at home" it's miles from home....maybe it's just me but this sounded so familiar and hit me like a rocket..and then the moment ..just when i thought i belonged nowhere..we spot something or someone familiar and know we're home again and the relief..the rose bush spreading in june (great pic) ...honestly...tears...Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-72708242490359184952011-06-12T10:10:48.856-04:002011-06-12T10:10:48.856-04:00An absolutely beautiful poem to accopany the beaut...An absolutely beautiful poem to accopany the beautiful picture. I wish I would have dreams like that!Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-79845839386864361022011-06-12T09:08:54.233-04:002011-06-12T09:08:54.233-04:00You have a most extraordinary talent - what a recr...You have a most extraordinary talent - what a recreation of time and place, with all the remembered emotion to go with it. Simply stunning.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-87543080196680168482011-06-12T08:27:10.949-04:002011-06-12T08:27:10.949-04:00it still rings sorrowful, having to wake up from g...it still rings sorrowful, having to wake up from going home...love the small touches, the sea shells and cherry blossoms that set the scene of home for one that misses it would truly think of these...and all the analogous imagery in the begining..pip pip miss shay, well played.Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.com