tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post3500051081153590828..comments2024-03-29T07:11:54.743-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): The Dime PriestFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger36125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-23853510134716987572014-12-01T08:35:16.566-05:002014-12-01T08:35:16.566-05:00My curiosity pulled me here.. and when the dime pr...My curiosity pulled me here.. and when the dime priest becomes a dollar priest it's so much more than inflation... Quite a gem to keep hidden like that. :-)brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-72836931985969629312012-07-13T23:49:50.357-04:002012-07-13T23:49:50.357-04:00"He looks down and laughs, his broad shoulder..."He looks down and laughs, his broad shoulders shaking.<br />"I may as well take it from a cat. You don't know what 'no' is" ... Ha! Love this.<br /><br />"I would make sure his vestments were always clean and mended.<br />He would make sure never to let me fall into the deep end of my heart." ... What an exchange.<br /><br />"I am a spill, spreading." ... Mmmm. This is so good.<br /><br />"She is out of reach, like God.<br />She is funny and crazy, like the commandments.<br />She rides inside of something else, like Jonah." ... Superb.<br /><br />My very favorite parts of this brilliant work are your references to the change in tense, almost like you are hovering above yourself, and also the ending:<br /><br />"And then he will be<br />The dollar priest<br />And I will be<br />Scattered change." ... Scattered change. Your double-play with "change" and "tense" (earlier) ... you have a quick mind, Shay. I'm so impressed with you.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-67414540377293421082011-07-25T01:49:11.652-04:002011-07-25T01:49:11.652-04:00I love how you deal with the issue of identity in ...I love how you deal with the issue of identity in this poem. It dissolves, shifts, reforms, and is scattered. The priest acts as a stabilizing force, a man capable of securing the smile from 'some god somewhere'. 'I am a spill, spreading.' This is such a potent and beautiful line, so full of yearning and sadness. The sense of the beloved as another liminal being 'rides inside of something else, like Jonah.' is heartbreaking. The complexities of relationships: to the self, the lover, the emissary, the divine are so well captured here. I'm so glad I found this excellent poem through your interview on Poets United.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-7573131606755131002010-12-03T19:11:56.485-05:002010-12-03T19:11:56.485-05:00I love this...filmed in black and white..fifties e...I love this...filmed in black and white..fifties early sixties<br /><br />Holden Caulfield meets LolitaAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16896678791387928152010-12-02T15:27:54.145-05:002010-12-02T15:27:54.145-05:00excellent and original...as always...cheers peteexcellent and original...as always...cheers peteMarshyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08029232967141290634noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52315052378828391702010-12-02T10:05:57.552-05:002010-12-02T10:05:57.552-05:00I think I really like that dime priest. seems hum...I think I really like that dime priest. seems humble, friendly, and un-judging. Great write!Catyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13203872150946002183noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-74185811206718487552010-12-02T05:23:31.063-05:002010-12-02T05:23:31.063-05:00Its wonderful piece of writing ...I enjoyed every ...Its wonderful piece of writing ...I enjoyed every bit of it. Thanks for sharing..<br /><br />ॐ नमः शिवाय<br />Om Namah Shivaya<br />Twitter: @VerseEveryDay<br />Blog: http://shadowdancingwithmind.blogspot.comShashidhar Sharmahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10752054354309206121noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-5962558674951490182010-12-02T01:09:51.312-05:002010-12-02T01:09:51.312-05:00Nice, nice, nice....
Cheers, jjNice, nice, nice....<br />Cheers, jjJoanna Jenkinshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10836376588710862173noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16905344806327235152010-12-01T23:15:24.483-05:002010-12-01T23:15:24.483-05:00Brilliant. I think I need to read this again.
Yeah...Brilliant. I think I need to read this again.<br />Yeah, so much here. LovelyKatherine Krigehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00737873330498032718noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-70677213902852390122010-12-01T16:12:25.591-05:002010-12-01T16:12:25.591-05:00Yes, Yes, Yes!
I echo what Sherry Blue Sky says.....Yes, Yes, Yes!<br /><br />I echo what Sherry Blue Sky says....you are brilliant Shay, I love it! :-)Susannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09581993763700327953noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-3611669289090274582010-12-01T14:58:08.014-05:002010-12-01T14:58:08.014-05:00This would be pretty good if it rhymed . . .
Sorr...This would be pretty good if it rhymed . . .<br /><br />Sorry, couldn't help myself. This blows me away. Honest to God art. Beautifully crafted art.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-23340256056740600082010-12-01T11:26:44.234-05:002010-12-01T11:26:44.234-05:00Matinee idol eyes - can just see that. :)Matinee idol eyes - can just see that. :)Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-68102343705648982192010-12-01T10:01:25.015-05:002010-12-01T10:01:25.015-05:00TREMENDOUS piece. Just great. Wonderful One Shot. ...TREMENDOUS piece. Just great. Wonderful One Shot. Love and Light, SenderAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-86837827733879494792010-12-01T09:35:16.781-05:002010-12-01T09:35:16.781-05:00wow - just wow - so many fantastic lines in this.....wow - just wow - so many fantastic lines in this...most of all i think i love the scattered change..Claudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03011763027311966186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-21728921169354466852010-12-01T02:26:45.948-05:002010-12-01T02:26:45.948-05:00Such vivid imagery in your words and more to read ...Such vivid imagery in your words and more to read between the lines, profound, expressed so uniquely. <br /><br />Anita.Anita Magdalenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17759774477028333590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-49508508499377525242010-12-01T01:25:38.372-05:002010-12-01T01:25:38.372-05:00great write Shay, the dime priest - think I talked...great write Shay, the dime priest - think I talked to one or two of them in my life...to young to understand..that they new nothing about girls...absolutely nothing...if it wasn't for reading...I would be insane ....bkmsigned...bkmhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03558304976280070986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-17053804825981440522010-12-01T01:16:17.088-05:002010-12-01T01:16:17.088-05:00very original, sure touch, open-hearted and cool! ...very original, sure touch, open-hearted and cool! Unexpected turns and images...xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-14455904536532958232010-12-01T01:09:36.558-05:002010-12-01T01:09:36.558-05:00from someone who only uses images
Awesome!!!from someone who only uses images<br /><br />Awesome!!!PJ van Zylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13922371328963962120noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-6921554596268884052010-11-30T23:35:08.311-05:002010-11-30T23:35:08.311-05:00Of course you won't have sex, he's a pries...Of course you won't have sex, he's a priest. The don't do that sort of thing.machttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04073782907747032366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52477592146711490262010-11-30T22:29:34.830-05:002010-11-30T22:29:34.830-05:00I just love coming here to read your poems. They ...I just love coming here to read your poems. They have such a reality to them. "He would make sure never to let me fall into the deep end of my heart." That line is just so great!<br /><br />TeresaAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-50979323236512965342010-11-30T21:56:42.946-05:002010-11-30T21:56:42.946-05:00A gem
moving tooA gem<br /><br />moving tooCloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-26458114541458688932010-11-30T21:37:33.711-05:002010-11-30T21:37:33.711-05:00The tense is always changing
you really do cover ...The tense is always changing<br /><br />you really do cover the gamut from 10 cents to one dollar<br /><br />Wowza for One Shot<br /><br />moonie smilesmoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-64114521573665884752010-11-30T21:06:05.782-05:002010-11-30T21:06:05.782-05:00Shay...This Rocked!!
(But where was White Fang an...Shay...This Rocked!!<br /><br />(But where was White Fang and Black Tooth?)G-Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14968807697181554781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-14245691779647276022010-11-30T20:18:34.375-05:002010-11-30T20:18:34.375-05:00Shay, you have portrayed with such clarity the ten...Shay, you have portrayed with such clarity the tension between religion and sexuality...between -self-acceptance and self-condemnation. Remarkable poem.<br /><br />http://liv2write2day.wordpress.com/2010/12/01/one-shot-wednesday-monotone/Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-56655665807004813472010-11-30T19:43:11.272-05:002010-11-30T19:43:11.272-05:00Fun, whimsical work.Fun, whimsical work.Steve Isaakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07162341357622058518noreply@blogger.com