tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post5584278093744870293..comments2024-03-28T21:52:15.546-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Questions And Answers, Once Upon A TimeFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger24125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-18899095862671722182011-01-20T10:22:51.850-05:002011-01-20T10:22:51.850-05:00stopped in for a visit; haven't been around mu...stopped in for a visit; haven't been around much. this made my day; I loved this piece, the first stanza and the line "has a mouth but does not speak" are absolutely perfectCatyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13203872150946002183noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-10548070398028595952011-01-19T22:08:42.497-05:002011-01-19T22:08:42.497-05:00Beautiful poem, and lovely photo to match !Beautiful poem, and lovely photo to match !Senoritahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13075972193214414769noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-39209493635708487922011-01-18T14:45:23.815-05:002011-01-18T14:45:23.815-05:00Um...ow! This one hurts so good. I loved that damn...Um...ow! This one hurts so good. I loved that damn bottle once too, but I decided I liked walking too much to keep kissing it.<br /><br />Your opening is perfect. And a "thousand overcoats"...get outta here; it's soooo good!<br /><br />Totally feeling this. Thanks for sharing!Ami Mattisonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12391930163467566669noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52264230614960537922011-01-18T14:44:30.901-05:002011-01-18T14:44:30.901-05:00Great images and effective notions - exemplary.Great images and effective notions - exemplary.Steve Isaakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07162341357622058518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-2596570467221753572011-01-18T14:05:26.488-05:002011-01-18T14:05:26.488-05:00"Carried by clouds"
Thanks!
Aloha fro..."Carried by clouds"<br /><br />Thanks!<br /><br /><br />Aloha from Waikiki<br /><br /><a href="http://comfortspiral.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Comfort Spiral</a><br /><br />><}}(°>Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-32395628537604681112011-01-18T11:57:12.383-05:002011-01-18T11:57:12.383-05:00Shay
If the overcoats could insulate we would
Well...Shay<br />If the overcoats could insulate we would<br />Well maybe not ...<br />We put up with the shards<br /><br />Knowing smile from the moonmoondustwriterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09848554806751678968noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-50815069148445137052011-01-18T10:39:02.162-05:002011-01-18T10:39:02.162-05:00Ouch...this one cuts, Shay.Ouch...this one cuts, Shay.TALONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-89365081609524345512011-01-18T07:54:55.607-05:002011-01-18T07:54:55.607-05:00fark this is hot shay...your opening grabs us...th...fark this is hot shay...your opening grabs us...then the kisses...i am swooning...keep questioning...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-90587887466565729272011-01-18T03:02:00.746-05:002011-01-18T03:02:00.746-05:00too many questions.... let me breathe!!!!!too many questions.... let me breathe!!!!!Shadowhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05999801833389058410noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-22643910952357738262011-01-18T00:52:04.010-05:002011-01-18T00:52:04.010-05:00to have a mouth, but do not speak... love your bot...to have a mouth, but do not speak... love your bottle friend... <br /><br />wouldn't it just be easier to be stupid?<br /><br />To have a brain, but not to think??? <br /><br />mmm hmmm... that would be oddly refreshing actually....Kayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17353317664100788614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63834291852982194922011-01-17T21:33:14.640-05:002011-01-17T21:33:14.640-05:00Talk about a "hook" to end all hooks, yo...Talk about a "hook" to end all hooks, your opening lines just grab the reader.......carrying your heart in a bag of broken glass........and the thousand overcoats?????? oh my god!!!!!<br />Fantastic and powerful poem, important topic.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-38013232959111969202011-01-17T21:27:02.063-05:002011-01-17T21:27:02.063-05:00That particular mouth is sweet but deadly...if kis...That particular mouth is sweet but deadly...if kissed too often. I get it and I love it...the poetry, that is.Ileanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11200869126695231050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-4644894427612806672011-01-17T21:24:04.038-05:002011-01-17T21:24:04.038-05:00I loved the three middle lines the best as well. H...I loved the three middle lines the best as well. However, the whole piece--as usual--is brilliant.<br /><br />Why haven't you published these pieces in an anthology? They're wicked good.Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66295646638091368012011-01-17T21:19:56.903-05:002011-01-17T21:19:56.903-05:00We all wind up dead, do we not?
Until then . . . ...We all wind up dead, do we not?<br /><br />Until then . . . unicorns!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-59506395234401570052011-01-17T18:55:19.837-05:002011-01-17T18:55:19.837-05:00Right you are, Hannah. Done. :-)Right you are, Hannah. Done. :-)Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-28278881979651519062011-01-17T18:49:06.961-05:002011-01-17T18:49:06.961-05:00"Please shut up" is quite fun...
One su..."Please shut up" is quite fun...<br /><br />One suggestion for you--would you consider cutting the first line, "It's like"? Then it would begin with "Carrying your heart" which is a really strong opening. Just something to consider, perhaps...Hannah Stephensonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15792203070774504501noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-9739840788022564642011-01-17T18:09:18.336-05:002011-01-17T18:09:18.336-05:00and we kiss til I can't walk......wow! Excell...and we kiss til I can't walk......wow! Excellent poem!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04526666908406849762noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-65664189221224351702011-01-17T17:18:34.326-05:002011-01-17T17:18:34.326-05:00The bottle with the mouth that kisses and never ta...The bottle with the mouth that kisses and never talks, yea. I know her well. she wanted me for herself, but I told her no. There were things I wanted to say and people I wanted to say them to. She couldn't have me. Not then. Not today.<br /><br />Your poetry rocks. you know that, right?Tabitha Birdhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08196816108272065974noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-73471248634305176462011-01-17T15:44:45.726-05:002011-01-17T15:44:45.726-05:00That bottle used to be my friend. The fucker cause...That bottle used to be my friend. The fucker caused me nothing but trouble.<br /><br />Well, we all wind up dead.<br />I passed the time where I could have left a pretty corpse long ago ;-)<br /><br /><br />.machttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04073782907747032366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-20410776818507018682011-01-17T15:07:07.209-05:002011-01-17T15:07:07.209-05:00Shielding feelings with a thousand overcoats. Wow...Shielding feelings with a thousand overcoats. Wow - that is wonderful imagery.Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-56158047553193596102011-01-17T12:25:22.774-05:002011-01-17T12:25:22.774-05:00no...you shut up :)
this is so annoyingly wonderf...no...you shut up :)<br /><br />this is so annoyingly wonderfulAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-70132412023245183902011-01-17T12:06:13.466-05:002011-01-17T12:06:13.466-05:00Okay, it's official. You are not from this pl...Okay, it's official. You are not from this planet. Mere Earth People cannot string such words in succession.<br /><br />WOW~<br /><br />xoxoJannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-2569979662961582942011-01-17T11:15:53.087-05:002011-01-17T11:15:53.087-05:00Love the contrast between the neat rhymed stanzas ...Love the contrast between the neat rhymed stanzas and the formless, prodding, annoying questions with no right answers...middle rhyme is my fave---sometimes stopping all the talk is best, however you get there.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-71191187207652360142011-01-17T11:11:24.360-05:002011-01-17T11:11:24.360-05:00Perfect pairing ~ image and words.Perfect pairing ~ image and words.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.com