tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post5728872814206374329..comments2024-03-29T07:11:54.743-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): By An IdiotFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-91841389649992587532013-06-09T17:02:10.551-04:002013-06-09T17:02:10.551-04:00I really enjoyed the layers of imagery you invoke ...I really enjoyed the layers of imagery you invoke here. Much like Hedgey, you really nailed Kerry's request for lyrical language. I found the idiot seamstress, the pinched stars, and the hyena mouth harbor intriguing and abstract enough not to inundate the reader. <br /><br />In my readings, I am picking up on an increasing abstraction. THe first stanza is a bit more concrete: moon stars, skin. The second builds in complexity (even the words are a little more difficult, ie confabulating) which flows straight into the last line, which is a bit of riddle of meaning. The effect on me as a read is like experiencing a dream while wide awake. What a ride! <br />Well done and viva laIsadora Gruyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036782300945079952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63835720732973627892013-06-07T13:58:12.628-04:002013-06-07T13:58:12.628-04:00Definitely stunning and unexpected use of imagery....Definitely stunning and unexpected use of imagery. Wow.Maggie Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13044824920398442496noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-1745293143992013962013-06-07T08:15:04.899-04:002013-06-07T08:15:04.899-04:00Wow! I love the harbour of the hyena's mouth.Wow! I love the harbour of the hyena's mouth. Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-61684367393308063732013-06-07T00:04:40.065-04:002013-06-07T00:04:40.065-04:00Perfect.Perfect.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-74769828549379559072013-06-06T21:59:37.518-04:002013-06-06T21:59:37.518-04:00I got excited there for a moment. I saw the title...I got excited there for a moment. I saw the title and thought you had dedicated a poem to me. Heh..<br /><br />But reading your poem I found it quite complicated for a short piece. Had to read it a few times to let it soak in, enjoying it more and more with each reading!HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-37918840653743966072013-06-06T19:28:03.407-04:002013-06-06T19:28:03.407-04:00Fireblossom, this is beautiful and the minute I sa...Fireblossom, this is beautiful and the minute I saw the word hyena I heard the laugh. :)Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-18116444726706356552013-06-06T18:27:11.441-04:002013-06-06T18:27:11.441-04:00Note to those who asked about the hyena: a hyena, ...Note to those who asked about the hyena: a hyena, because of the mocking laugh.Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16916123252266685692013-06-06T16:53:15.384-04:002013-06-06T16:53:15.384-04:00This comment has been removed by the author.Alicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09212391351233448784noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63140975783800094572013-06-06T16:46:25.510-04:002013-06-06T16:46:25.510-04:00Love the opening...the idea of being stitched... E...Love the opening...the idea of being stitched... Excellent.Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66646004085780954732013-06-06T15:43:53.171-04:002013-06-06T15:43:53.171-04:00You don't often do works this short, but when ...You don't often do works this short, but when one happens, I always get a shiver, because they are a true gift of the poetic imagination, the spirit and soul. I am amazed, always at how well and simply you can say the most difficult and complex things. Nocturne indeed--this is reverberant with night.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-37340383945386993562013-06-06T14:30:22.144-04:002013-06-06T14:30:22.144-04:00I agree, the hyena was a surprise, but over all th...I agree, the hyena was a surprise, but over all the poem carries that style and grace which is uniquely yours, Shay.<br />KKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-21790761658200041132013-06-06T12:28:11.172-04:002013-06-06T12:28:11.172-04:00I love it all... but a hyena? I swore you were go...I love it all... but a hyena? I swore you were going to say a tiger! Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-17046841703348463512013-06-06T11:49:45.620-04:002013-06-06T11:49:45.620-04:00Yes, wow! That was my reaction to. Even in few lin...Yes, wow! That was my reaction to. Even in few lines, you come up with images no one would ever think of that are just totally amazing.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-11133593852058288752013-06-06T11:36:14.452-04:002013-06-06T11:36:14.452-04:00Wow!Wow!Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-61586586266264367212013-06-06T08:28:01.723-04:002013-06-06T08:28:01.723-04:00The end is quite a twist and it reflects on the pr...The end is quite a twist and it reflects on the previous para so well.TCPChttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01735466017293465064noreply@blogger.com