tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post6079623844293013814..comments2024-03-28T09:11:04.513-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Come OnFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-5005863746541323532013-03-03T16:44:10.574-05:002013-03-03T16:44:10.574-05:00I really like your matter-of-fact style of voice i...I really like your matter-of-fact style of voice in this. 'the nights have gone molasses black for me' oh that's good. And 'do that strut, like you used to do'...ha, I like that. I find that final stanza to be stirring and quite relatable too. Jennifer Wagnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-62283919502591649412013-03-02T22:56:29.357-05:002013-03-02T22:56:29.357-05:00I love the second stanza, especially these lines:
...I love the second stanza, especially these lines:<br /><br />"but the nights have gone molasses black for me"<br /><br />"I need so little, and you possess so much--<br />every toss of your hair moves the planets."Alicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09212391351233448784noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-31907101960449255922013-03-02T14:29:14.582-05:002013-03-02T14:29:14.582-05:00Did you do away with the other blog? I loved it.
...Did you do away with the other blog? I loved it.<br /><br />GF Cleo did kill a brother & a sister, ya know, just in passing, so...<br /><br />The catalysts & inhibitors in life are many. ~MaryAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-9997851680615936582013-03-01T23:38:29.389-05:002013-03-01T23:38:29.389-05:00Oh, I love this. Every line. Every damn one! You...Oh, I love this. Every line. Every damn one! You rock!Other Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09189646933597252108noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-91232467134152710072013-03-01T12:33:52.550-05:002013-03-01T12:33:52.550-05:00Very poignant, in spite of the crocodiles:-) Love ...Very poignant, in spite of the crocodiles:-) Love the hair-toss line and your closing lines especially much.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-79152166755502610332013-03-01T11:17:25.257-05:002013-03-01T11:17:25.257-05:00shake it ... do the crocodile rock .. come on baby...shake it ... do the crocodile rock .. come on baby shake it off .. shake it out ... Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-64234518540511907972013-03-01T08:58:34.768-05:002013-03-01T08:58:34.768-05:00I love the Nile crocodile exes, the hair that shak...I love the Nile crocodile exes, the hair that shakes planets and the familiar sad ol' song..Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-23964400718252931582013-03-01T07:45:16.163-05:002013-03-01T07:45:16.163-05:00Love it. The best lines were easily the couplet ab...Love it. The best lines were easily the couplet about molasses black nights not half as sweet, and the line "every toss of your hair moves the planets." The first is a delightful double comparison/contrast, which carries through the thought nicely, and second does what poetry does so well, which is condense all the gravity of an idea into a pinprick black hole of thought. Unlike this comment, which is rambling, long, and over now. :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-40758795995368971132013-02-28T22:32:18.300-05:002013-02-28T22:32:18.300-05:00C'monC'monRastamanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17578419674801014606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-77215021900836852122013-02-28T22:06:35.474-05:002013-02-28T22:06:35.474-05:00She sounds a bit too dangerous to love. Keep her a...She sounds a bit too dangerous to love. Keep her at arms length. ;)Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-83398623610683483272013-02-28T22:01:52.475-05:002013-02-28T22:01:52.475-05:00Finding love reaching out while in the midst of de...Finding love reaching out while in the midst of despair...like a lifeline being thrown to a drowning wo/man. Great one! HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-53026845178223078502013-02-28T21:01:26.154-05:002013-02-28T21:01:26.154-05:00"every toss of your hair moves the planets.&q..."every toss of your hair moves the planets."<br /><br />Wow.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-32678980744857265872013-02-28T20:45:16.686-05:002013-02-28T20:45:16.686-05:00So hard to lose the programming that love can be e...So hard to lose the programming that love can be earned, begged for, made to be where it isn't. This poem is a heartbreaker.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-8445218384574958502013-02-28T17:53:02.968-05:002013-02-28T17:53:02.968-05:00Ah, the longing... such sweet despair. Ah, the longing... such sweet despair. Buddah Moskowitzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06839068145732552328noreply@blogger.com