tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post6482730389853175379..comments2024-03-29T07:11:54.743-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Bill's RailroadFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger21125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-47857699539841926202015-08-11T14:48:55.637-04:002015-08-11T14:48:55.637-04:00Somewhere in my past I have a potential Bill.. I g...Somewhere in my past I have a potential Bill.. I grew up with model railroads and at my mother's house we have all the cars and houses... somehow I get Elinor Rigby playing in my head...brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85991487632302520192015-08-10T23:27:35.447-04:002015-08-10T23:27:35.447-04:00What an intriguing tale!What an intriguing tale!purplepeninportland.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07842681508730093858noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-29799964362348232222015-08-10T21:15:41.233-04:002015-08-10T21:15:41.233-04:00This hits close to home. That desire to have some ...This hits close to home. That desire to have some control over the mighty forces in our lives that take away our joys and loves is within me as well. The desire for some kind of consistency, to see good for one's life work.<br /><br />Also notable to me is the fact that it didnt improve his relationship with others. As he strives desperately to find a reason to live, to be happy...he is brought no closer to the fellow humans around him. He is instead a nuisance and frustrating. How sad the world has become....Full of people building model train lives and relating to each other no better for their shared pains.Michaelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18164471310146247950noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85059688038342954492015-08-10T20:24:20.072-04:002015-08-10T20:24:20.072-04:00This made me feel sad no matter where she goes she...This made me feel sad no matter where she goes she will always go around to 1955. Her destiny 1955 I guess.Truedessahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09079953417572207613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-22050609367990785312015-08-10T18:56:27.922-04:002015-08-10T18:56:27.922-04:00Love. Sobbing a little, but I'm alone in an in...Love. Sobbing a little, but I'm alone in an institution of healing and would build a track with all those I miss and would wish to see again and again even in a repetition of time. You constantly surprise me. Thank you.Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-81827473715121039242015-08-10T18:01:09.505-04:002015-08-10T18:01:09.505-04:00This comment has been removed by a blog administrator.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-65271417023762795732015-08-10T17:47:30.153-04:002015-08-10T17:47:30.153-04:00Oh, poignant! And thanks for the bonus song I neve...Oh, poignant! And thanks for the bonus song I never heard before, and now love - almost as much as I love your old man in the poem.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-20878058164526773442015-08-10T15:35:48.599-04:002015-08-10T15:35:48.599-04:00This is so incredibly sad.This is so incredibly sad.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-23601139543427829012015-08-10T13:56:41.573-04:002015-08-10T13:56:41.573-04:00This is wonderful. A model railroad is sometimes t...This is wonderful. A model railroad is sometimes the only thing small enough, and at the same time large enough, to help a man's mind get past overwhelming grief.<br />Good job, Shay. And I hate hate hate that mail lady. LOL<br />Luv, KKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-45155948275405684222015-08-10T09:41:24.541-04:002015-08-10T09:41:24.541-04:00Love this, great work. I always like a poem that t...Love this, great work. I always like a poem that tells a story and the story here is grand. :-)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13169488599439217495noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-9479029709144908902015-08-10T06:13:39.344-04:002015-08-10T06:13:39.344-04:00First off, I must say that when I saw this pic for...First off, I must say that when I saw this pic for The Mag, I thought it was made for you. However, as always, you surprised me with the POV in this poem. The old man, wifeless, abandoned to a hobby which is going nowhere, and the brilliant touch of the tiny female mannequin. <br /><br />This is like looking through a window at someone's diorama of life. Truly exceptional work. Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-32747043581848389062015-08-10T04:35:50.674-04:002015-08-10T04:35:50.674-04:00The concocted feminine presence in his railroad wo...The concocted feminine presence in his railroad world seems to give him peace. A man adapting to his personal challenge in life. Sad and satisfying, we hope.Gemma Wisemanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17466540188839321484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-88467728119487088072015-08-10T03:29:43.561-04:002015-08-10T03:29:43.561-04:00An amazing read, with a vivid web of thoughts. Gre...An amazing read, with a vivid web of thoughts. Greetings! Blogorattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12821621371176285384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63990519830400044322015-08-10T01:58:34.462-04:002015-08-10T01:58:34.462-04:00I dont know why, but it gave me an impression of a...I dont know why, but it gave me an impression of a nice Santa like man<br />Nice take on the promptDeepahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16764125425140331692noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-83129535495125144422015-08-09T22:51:52.717-04:002015-08-09T22:51:52.717-04:00deep and well realizeddeep and well realizedCloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-90305276222950222122015-08-09T22:35:37.251-04:002015-08-09T22:35:37.251-04:00I love your description of his minature landscape ...I love your description of his minature landscape and how it saved him from the woes of the large as life one.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-81323569876978731522015-08-09T21:12:11.735-04:002015-08-09T21:12:11.735-04:00The Nilsson song is perfect for the poem.
Gluing ...The Nilsson song is perfect for the poem.<br /><br />Gluing her feet... what a great detail.Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-47194842118746197512015-08-09T20:46:17.668-04:002015-08-09T20:46:17.668-04:00sweet and sad- love the music to accompany! sweet and sad- love the music to accompany! Kathe W.https://www.blogger.com/profile/06781645436343424010noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-33177479918307192832015-08-09T20:09:51.774-04:002015-08-09T20:09:51.774-04:00This is brilliant. I empathize with Bill - and als...This is brilliant. I empathize with Bill - and also with MY mailman, who has suggested, gently, that I might like to visit the annual book sale in our town? LOL.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85309810063695225132015-08-09T19:33:21.135-04:002015-08-09T19:33:21.135-04:00I really like the story that you tell here. It rem...I really like the story that you tell here. It reminds one to be kind-to not make assumptions of strangers. Charleenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07983825702353264957noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-89828452972591486812015-08-09T19:09:31.964-04:002015-08-09T19:09:31.964-04:00This is both straightforward as a set of endless r...This is both straightforward as a set of endless rails, and enigmatic as the picture. "..Carefully gluing her feet to the platform,<br />he offers her his devotion, and a tiny glass of lemonade..." the essence for me seems to be that craft, effort, order is all that saves us, some form of creating it, believing in it, bringing it to life, as memory alone is not enough, we must also have 'the consistency of scale.' As always Shay your poem is a narrative of ordinary people illuminated and refracted by the wrinkles of spirit which make them extraordinary.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.com