tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post6648771487107755750..comments2024-03-28T09:11:04.513-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): A Year In The FactoryFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-62787366808825841132012-12-28T00:26:22.872-05:002012-12-28T00:26:22.872-05:00Something about love in a grimy setting is so much...Something about love in a grimy setting is so much more pristine... like it floats above. Dark Angelhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09449477369000569642noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-88030165919325105612012-12-24T09:24:35.642-05:002012-12-24T09:24:35.642-05:00This is one of the best poems that I have read thi...This is one of the best poems that I have read this year. Period! Wishing you a Merry Christmas and many blessing for a Happy New Year.Liz Rice-Sosnehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14705708193546909432noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-71855109773350707632012-12-21T07:41:07.017-05:002012-12-21T07:41:07.017-05:00If this poem were a painting, I see it in gray and...If this poem were a painting, I see it in gray and red. Gorgeous!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-9717044852905034822012-12-20T20:22:09.967-05:002012-12-20T20:22:09.967-05:00My dear ... you must find a publisher!!!! I echo ...My dear ... you must find a publisher!!!! I echo the comments of those who came before me. Happy Holidays, Shay.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85429046148322084052012-12-20T18:47:34.037-05:002012-12-20T18:47:34.037-05:00I'm with WK on this one, but then I read the t...I'm with WK on this one, but then I read the tags and saw "Boris and Natasha live again" and am laughing my a** off! <br /><br />Yes, you are amazing, but I guess you know that. How could you hold such talent and not?Karenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12003379181294550035noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-21146149465586724632012-12-20T13:15:49.281-05:002012-12-20T13:15:49.281-05:00Such brilliant nuances...
We once owned a turkey t...Such brilliant nuances...<br />We once owned a turkey that was missing the top part of his beak. Everytime he pecked at a corn kernal it shot right up out of the top. I don't know how he stayed alive...:-)<br />Happy Holiday Week-End Shay....GG-Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14968807697181554781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-79102426986303170472012-12-20T10:56:22.851-05:002012-12-20T10:56:22.851-05:00This is such incredible writing, Shay. I can'...This is such incredible writing, Shay. I can't even begin to comment.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-24880190413793340972012-12-20T09:53:35.561-05:002012-12-20T09:53:35.561-05:00wow wow wowwow wow wowLLM Callinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17199375981896229914noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-18473942297587283132012-12-20T05:29:55.041-05:002012-12-20T05:29:55.041-05:00This is so different from everything I've read...This is so different from everything I've read before that I have no words sufficient to praise it. You paint such vivid scenes and characters.<br /><br />My only tiny niggle is that the font and size of your sidebar means that there is not room to read your longer lines as they were, no doubt, written. Could you tinker with your settings?vivinfrancehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07388722600118753457noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-78377444816192763362012-12-20T01:36:45.471-05:002012-12-20T01:36:45.471-05:00I agree with Kay. I am so glad I didn't read t...I agree with Kay. I am so glad I didn't read this before I posted mine because it would have never seen the light of day. There is such joy and agony in bittersweet. You have written it well.Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-50389876245911195542012-12-20T00:29:46.067-05:002012-12-20T00:29:46.067-05:00Bittersweet and wonderful to boot.
Too many wonder...Bittersweet and wonderful to boot.<br />Too many wonderful things to mention...they'd only repeat all that has been written above.<br />Thank you.Siggi in Downeast Mainehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12977578917775406831noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-8961425845968104452012-12-19T23:03:04.933-05:002012-12-19T23:03:04.933-05:00can this be considered bittersweet or even a love ...can this be considered bittersweet or even a love poem? I am afraid that those terms would be to simple for this gorgeous work. Something like this that sprawls and crawls can only really be considered one thing to me: epic.<br /><br />From the "nowhere nationstate/ soviet block meets little orphan annie" feel to the Ike Reilly-esque thigh worshipping, to the one eyed pigeon pecking away in futility next to a burning or soon to be burning river (didn't REM write a song about that? :) ) this is mesmerizing in scope. I love the playfulness you show: messing with the border guards, a catholic shoplifting candles--in my mind they were those ones that the guys sell from the trunk of their cars at the Saturday market, the ones with the saints screen printed on them. I love it especially in contrast to the broken down elements which are also so clearly a part of the narrators life: the shotty electrics of the city, the cookie cutter piece of shit, the carcinogens she helps produce.<br /><br />Truly stellar showing here, Lady. viva laIsadora Gruyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036782300945079952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-69049640956837672472012-12-19T22:06:28.264-05:002012-12-19T22:06:28.264-05:00I'm loving these story poems. You're gett...I'm loving these story poems. You're getting better and better with 'em. They're so good that I find myself reading through them multiple times so I can fully absorb them. HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-78616669691797241222012-12-19T21:59:36.839-05:002012-12-19T21:59:36.839-05:00Fabulous. I'm glad I broke my rule (don't ...Fabulous. I'm glad I broke my rule (don't read the others until my own is posted) because there is no way I could ever write like this.<br />Your genius makes a pastiche of passion and factory into a love song.<br />KKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-10303754141190971482012-12-19T20:51:39.088-05:002012-12-19T20:51:39.088-05:00Mr. Ginsberg, meet Messrs. O'Rourke and Spring...Mr. Ginsberg, meet Messrs. O'Rourke and Springsteen, and that may be Mr. Fred Exley in the corner. I believe you already know Mr. Burroughs?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-42450103134462265422012-12-19T17:29:45.617-05:002012-12-19T17:29:45.617-05:00Well, I'm late to the party so you already kno...Well, I'm late to the party so you already know this is gorgeous, in a brittle, broken-nailed and lost sort of way. Every bitter banned-by-the-FDA drop must be drunk to yield the kind of sweetness this factory produces for those who have worked overtime to find they can never catch up on production. One of your best, Shay, and as you know, that is as good as it gets in my book.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-59146742319965951342012-12-19T16:36:00.806-05:002012-12-19T16:36:00.806-05:00Brilliant...I just love the heat...how the flavor ...Brilliant...I just love the heat...how the flavor of passion contrasts so awesomely with the sound and image of the machinist-factory backdrop. Such an excellent write, Shay!!! Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-68080048236606104682012-12-19T16:33:38.235-05:002012-12-19T16:33:38.235-05:00Wow, I love this. Excellent! I immediately thought...Wow, I love this. Excellent! I immediately thought of <i>An Officer and a Gentleman</i> with Richard Gere---only, there were a few different circumstances of course. ;)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-14755940746958814872012-12-19T15:47:06.428-05:002012-12-19T15:47:06.428-05:00I enjoyed this narrative so much! It takes a whil...I enjoyed this narrative so much! It takes a while to refocus the joys through the surgical loss and this poem DEFINITELY lets me know what the narrator misses, what she re-feels a little in the retelling. Those thighs! That bliss!Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-27962427305555803652012-12-19T15:42:38.164-05:002012-12-19T15:42:38.164-05:00never enough time ... never enough time ... Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-11741448531466457012012-12-19T12:47:04.871-05:002012-12-19T12:47:04.871-05:00Such a bittersweet tale, so well told. For Ella...Such a bittersweet tale, so well told. For Ella's challenge I am to pick one of your poems as my favorite. The dilemma - they are ALL my favorite. Your writing always makes me catch my breath in wonder.<br /><br />This poem goes straight to the heart. And one year is not enough.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-58675470670315959432012-12-19T12:31:51.439-05:002012-12-19T12:31:51.439-05:00YOU do this so well! I too love the last line~ Yes...YOU do this so well! I too love the last line~ Yes, your bittersweet fruit does spread a landscape to ponder! Ellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06070952447277684613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-35318617682920469352012-12-19T12:26:29.563-05:002012-12-19T12:26:29.563-05:00A true gem of a tale (poem)..and yup, bittersweet,...A true gem of a tale (poem)..and yup, bittersweet, as Mosk has said. What a treat to read this morning.Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07366010389846904663noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-40051761143995564912012-12-19T12:05:04.361-05:002012-12-19T12:05:04.361-05:00yeah, that last line is killer. does that motion e...yeah, that last line is killer. does that motion ever do any good? it does, when it does, and then it doesn't. i really like your weaving of this tale, Shay. excellent.Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-53343509050462141922012-12-19T11:26:36.133-05:002012-12-19T11:26:36.133-05:00Again, my favorite flavor: bittersweet.Again, my favorite flavor: bittersweet.Buddah Moskowitzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06839068145732552328noreply@blogger.com