tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post701669300931758797..comments2024-03-29T07:11:54.743-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): ομορφιά (Beauty)Fireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-22214348963599486932012-11-27T13:54:13.574-05:002012-11-27T13:54:13.574-05:00I've been waiting to comment on this one until...I've been waiting to comment on this one until I could come back and listen to it (without Dramatic Chipmunk playing in the background!). It's exquisite (as I knew it would be). Such truth in the contrast between feminine power and vulnerability. I love this, Shay.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-18193282363151593462012-11-23T18:58:20.042-05:002012-11-23T18:58:20.042-05:00Athena is one lucky lady !Athena is one lucky lady !machttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04073782907747032366noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-55591673204220468762012-11-23T12:49:41.882-05:002012-11-23T12:49:41.882-05:00"the flakes collecting in my horse's mane..."the flakes collecting in my horse's mane<br />as we stood tossing our heads and shifting from foot to foot<br />under a giant Revlon ad.<br />But that was contradicted by the lilies<br />blooming white as death,<br />white as a bride,<br />around our legs and up to our knees." This is such a exquisite image. It was stunning.<br /><br />"I have come across Persia, Africa and France.<br />I have killed and I have enslaved<br />all who opposed me.<br />At times,<br />my red curls became damaged,<br />with no product to be had.<br />I wore a helmet<br />for six weeks on campaign<br />to hide my split, untrimmed ends<br />and my shame." This a marvelous pairing of the ancient past and the present, of the warrior and the woman--at least from my perspective...<br /><br />"She took my hands,<br />dark with blood under their blunt, unpolished nails.<br />She said,<br />"Come back to bed,"<br />and so I did,<br />naked<br />and trembling." The vulnerability and the acceptance is quite poignant.<br /><br />AND the gravy--your voice reading your poem.<br /><br />Thanks, Shay. I'm thankful for writers like you who share their gift with others...<br />Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-84595599059531580292012-11-23T12:09:00.924-05:002012-11-23T12:09:00.924-05:00One of your best poems yet...I was enthralled...One of your best poems yet...I was enthralled...Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11213895832127088168noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-55585976129895581892012-11-23T11:21:07.864-05:002012-11-23T11:21:07.864-05:00awesome write ... incredible read ..
belated but...awesome write ... incredible read .. <br /><br />belated but sent with love<br /><br />*´¨)<br />¸.•´¸.•*´¨) ¸.•*¨)<br />(¸.•´ (¸.•` ¤ HAPPY THANKSGIVING!!Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-20620007185609203522012-11-23T11:19:02.740-05:002012-11-23T11:19:02.740-05:00I love that you included the Greek in the title.
...I love that you included the Greek in the title.<br /><br />This is one of those pieces that's hard to comment on because the words are glued together so tightly that it's difficult to break them apart without hurting their feelings.<br /><br />Excellent (and true) opening.<br /><br />"Beauty shows respect for others as well as for one's self,<br />and lets lesser women know<br />to lower their eyes." Ouch. I don't follow this code; I love the way you've so obviously made this someone else's voice. These are not things you really believe; they're things you fear others might believe.<br /><br />"It invites men to blind themselves" I love this imagery, as if it is a kindness to offer a blade. I like the double meaning in "keen edge"---which makes me think of sharp personality, wit, and mental ability almost before a sword. But this is an excellent transition into your next stanza (where the claymore appears).<br /><br />"described the things I needed" This is SO loaded. It could be quite a long list, depending on your heart.<br /><br />The SAV-RITE is perfect. :)<br /><br />Your "I'm a paradox" paragraph (snow/lilies) is exquisite.<br /><br />"I have come across Persia, Africa and France" Ha! This is awesome.<br /><br />I was surprised she had red hair, for some reason. But I dig it.<br /><br />Love this:<br />"I wept to think<br />that she would do that;<br />that she would call me 'baby,'<br />and value me<br />as she does her owl and all those she loves the most"<br /><br />"where I found her pressing my hand-written poems to her<br />into coherent volumes" Now isn't this telling. Not only does she see your worth, but she also understands you. I like that in the pressing, they become coherent.<br /><br />The ending is moving as well, particularly the last three words.<br /><br />I love this, Shay. It was a pleasure to read.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16060812530570891652012-11-23T01:02:15.137-05:002012-11-23T01:02:15.137-05:00You're right; I love it. And I'm just goin...You're right; I love it. And I'm just going to press it against me and hold it for tonight. Tomorrow, I will leave you a real comment. <br /><br />You know I love the owl. :)<br /><br />Happy Thanksgiving, my beautiful friend.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-34782597580298153812012-11-22T22:49:06.210-05:002012-11-22T22:49:06.210-05:00it has been scientifically proven that the more de...it has been scientifically proven that the more deeply in love we become with someone, the more beautiful they are to us. we didn't need science to tell us that, did we?<br /><br />this is a stunning-as-only-Shay-can-do-it poem! Love it, Sista!<br /><br />♥ Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-27485002531663332132012-11-22T14:09:46.873-05:002012-11-22T14:09:46.873-05:00You surprise the essence within the great temple o...You surprise the essence within the great temple of feminine power, built on a crumbling edifice that can't last, but so beautiful while it does, and sometimes, even more beautiful after it passes--I echo Kerry, and your poem--beauty after the first blinding flash, becomes invisible over time--what shines beneath the surface never dulls, only glows with a deeper sheen as it is polished and perfected.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44403048289042563012012-11-22T13:58:08.308-05:002012-11-22T13:58:08.308-05:00We can use beauty to blind, out there in the glare...We can use beauty to blind, out there in the glare of daylight streets, but our truest admirers see more than meets the eye... Your words show all this and so much more, and make me proud to have been born female. I know how to love, and how I deserve to be loved too.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66851367161947916412012-11-22T13:27:58.952-05:002012-11-22T13:27:58.952-05:00Oh, wow. What a tale. I, too, trembled when the na...Oh, wow. What a tale. I, too, trembled when the narrator asked the question, and was heartened by the response. SO lovely. Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-53008864305835798572012-11-22T13:01:20.735-05:002012-11-22T13:01:20.735-05:00lots of power in this one.
happy thanksgiving to...lots of power in this one. <br /><br />happy thanksgiving to you, shay.TexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13641962051044162710noreply@blogger.com