tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post7627920596519246429..comments2024-03-28T21:52:15.546-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): My WindowFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-28375845571167392942008-11-24T19:28:00.000-05:002008-11-24T19:28:00.000-05:00Fanks, girly. *smiles*Fanks, girly. *smiles*Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-51016825407183149562008-11-24T18:52:00.000-05:002008-11-24T18:52:00.000-05:00Beautiful. just beautiful.Beautiful. just beautiful.Lil Bithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01866807713238723606noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-13499346238509656672008-11-20T15:59:00.000-05:002008-11-20T15:59:00.000-05:00Thank you, Snaggle and Talon. Welcome to The Word ...Thank you, Snaggle and Talon. Welcome to The Word Garden!Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-40533032416055591312008-11-20T12:05:00.000-05:002008-11-20T12:05:00.000-05:00"So I became the rain And wept"Those two lines are..."So I became the rain<BR/> And wept"<BR/><BR/>Those two lines are brilliant.<BR/><BR/>TalonTALONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-35868517000549102012008-11-20T02:57:00.000-05:002008-11-20T02:57:00.000-05:00I can fix a broken window, but the putty stuff mak...I can fix a broken window, but the putty stuff makes a mess...<BR/><BR/>Good workSnaggle Toothhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07197042129309670471noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-83913300680533876872008-11-18T17:14:00.000-05:002008-11-18T17:14:00.000-05:00Cynthia, you always make me feel so nice when you ...Cynthia, you always make me feel so nice when you comment. I'm pleased this poem resonated for you! (((((((((C))))))))))<BR/><BR/>Gillian, you are spot on, I am indeed going through a change. No, not THAT change LOL. And I hope you are right about my window fixer and I hope she is as nice as you are. :-)<BR/><BR/>Indeed, Tex, it was and it is. <BR/><BR/>Thank you, BD, I hope that youa re feeling better, and it is always a joy to see you here at the Word Garden. :-)Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-28700842764924211592008-11-18T14:06:00.000-05:002008-11-18T14:06:00.000-05:00This is move then it seems. Flow of words and imag...This is move then it seems. Flow of words and images are great. Well done my friend.<BR/><BR/>love-bdCassiopeia Riseshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02625091389788114012noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-17265264675426701512008-11-18T07:56:00.000-05:002008-11-18T07:56:00.000-05:00I love what Chewy said - maybe it needed a break. ...I love what Chewy said - maybe it needed a break. Yes indeed. Was teim to move on.Jannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-73668142006476632332008-11-17T22:52:00.000-05:002008-11-17T22:52:00.000-05:00Hey Shay...!I believe we must break in order to gr...Hey Shay...!<BR/>I believe we must break in order to grow. To allow. This means you are undergoing some kind of transformation. You are right to become the rain...it will likely lead you to your window fixer. Metaphorically speaking of course.<BR/>Ever notice how dark it gets just before the dawn, as they say?<BR/>xoGillhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08845512494417503198noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-31368465254858783612008-11-17T22:16:00.000-05:002008-11-17T22:16:00.000-05:00Oh, shayfire, you've just writtenmy prayer for win...Oh, shayfire, you've just written<BR/>my prayer for winter, your mind<BR/>and emotions are beautiful.Cynthiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10598169309616545734noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-89843202065912140322008-11-17T20:45:00.000-05:002008-11-17T20:45:00.000-05:00Funster, Funster, Funster,I love ya. ya know? :-)Funster, Funster, Funster,<BR/><BR/>I love ya. ya know? :-)Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-75844648276927804992008-11-17T20:41:00.000-05:002008-11-17T20:41:00.000-05:00I love that perspective, Shrinky. Plus I like the ...I love that perspective, Shrinky. Plus I like the pleasant notion of that window put right. :-)<BR/><BR/>My word, gf, between you and Jannie, I'm going to get a swollen head! I do love the kind words, though, oh yes i do. <BR/><BR/>And to answer your question, I've been published. The first really decent poem I wrote, when I was 18, got published in a magazine called Speakeasy. They were eager to see more. There was no more, then, lol. But they took a really nice photograph to go with my poem, and it was the biggest kick to pull a copy off the newsstand and say "that's me!" Five years later I got published again, and in the next five years I got published several dozen times in publications which had readerships of about 15, and which quickly became defunct. Then I never really wrote poetry again until two years ago. Although my new work beats the stuffing out of my juvenalia, this is the only place to see it. I dream of publishing a book of my poems, though. Anyone know how?<BR/><BR/>(((((Shrinky)))))))))Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-34035732913450312262008-11-17T20:28:00.000-05:002008-11-17T20:28:00.000-05:00oOo, I like that comment, Chewy. Yeah. :-)oOo, I like that comment, Chewy. Yeah. :-)Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-12888117234405457892008-11-17T20:27:00.000-05:002008-11-17T20:27:00.000-05:00Thank you, S.L., it's nice to see you back here ag...Thank you, S.L., it's nice to see you back here again! :-)Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-78353169256530040362008-11-17T14:48:00.000-05:002008-11-17T14:48:00.000-05:00Fireblossom, Fireblossom, Fireblossom, "So I becam...Fireblossom, Fireblossom, Fireblossom, <BR/><BR/>"So I became the rain and wept," "a morning dusted on my skin..." No pressure on you to create future brilliance, but lines like these are what drew me into Word Garden in the fist place and keep me coming back. <BR/><BR/>Thank you.Jannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-76165629719869045042008-11-17T11:21:00.000-05:002008-11-17T11:21:00.000-05:00Times come when we all need to suffer a broken win...Times come when we all need to suffer a broken window, how else can we value the shelter of having it fixed again? <BR/><BR/>How, how, how do you do this? Shay girl, I'd give anything for just ONE ounce of the talent that you have. Are you published (outside of blogland)?<BR/><BR/>I am ripped between awe and envy.Shrinkyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18401403773851253351noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-64114801235166043952008-11-17T10:40:00.000-05:002008-11-17T10:40:00.000-05:00Although the glass is transparent, it is a barrier...Although the glass is transparent, it is a barrier. Perhaps it needed a break.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-53817310894622097002008-11-17T08:03:00.000-05:002008-11-17T08:03:00.000-05:00"a morning dusted on my skin" is such a great line..."a morning dusted on my skin" is such a great line, Shay, well-done. I also liked the ending stanza -- the persona's reference to the woman and the kiss, breakfast, windows.<BR/><BR/>Cheers. ;)S.L. Corsuahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10299376651709536034noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63966003924835378932008-11-17T05:27:00.000-05:002008-11-17T05:27:00.000-05:00Welcome to the Word Garden, Weyrd1. But that's not...Welcome to the Word Garden, Weyrd1. But that's not Austin. That's San Antonio in the header. ;-)<BR/><BR/>Me too, Grace, me too. But I am trying to change that. ;-)<BR/><BR/>Thanks, Tracey-Ann. A lot has been happening in my life behind the scenes, some of the plates are shifting. I put what I was feeling into this poem.Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-61257115177849280862008-11-16T21:52:00.000-05:002008-11-16T21:52:00.000-05:00At the beginning of your poem, your words expresse...At the beginning of your poem, your words expressed such a feeling of melancholy.<BR/><BR/>"I thought, I have somehow invited this rain,<BR/><BR/>This destruction;<BR/><BR/>So I became the rain<BR/><BR/>And wept."<BR/><BR/>That is such a soulful line<BR/>I like how you turned it around at the end and expressed a feeling of comfort and renewed hope.<BR/><BR/>I put on the morning mist as if it were a silken robe.<BR/><BR/>Lovely as always !Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-10010880233320935972008-11-16T21:46:00.000-05:002008-11-16T21:46:00.000-05:00This was sad and romantic at the same time. What s...This was sad and romantic at the same time. What stood out to me the most were these verses, “I thought, I have somehow invited this rain, This destruction; So I became the rain And wept.”<BR/><BR/>They reminded me of how I sometimes feel when everything is going wrong or someone hurts me as if I somehow invited them to hurt me or the bad things to happen.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-46550445656772227572008-11-16T20:16:00.000-05:002008-11-16T20:16:00.000-05:00nice...and I have noticed that it rains fairly oft...nice...and I have noticed that it rains fairly often there in Austin...TheWeyrd1https://www.blogger.com/profile/15064826219629525527noreply@blogger.com