tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post8064957530838779685..comments2024-03-28T09:11:04.513-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Little BirdFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-13695199236295636052014-02-04T11:43:56.639-05:002014-02-04T11:43:56.639-05:00What a brilliant evocation of Individualism, and w...What a brilliant evocation of Individualism, and who can write this way better than you - you are the one person I know who is fearless when it comes to peeling back the layers of her own skin.. One who knows herself walks in innate beauty.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-57814244598459882282014-02-04T10:37:14.942-05:002014-02-04T10:37:14.942-05:00... 'with nothing to stop me I became myself&#...... 'with nothing to stop me I became myself' ~~ this is my favorite line. It takes some of us longer than others ...Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-89970749864813622272014-02-03T13:14:35.029-05:002014-02-03T13:14:35.029-05:00"but innocence is unbecoming
past a certain a..."but innocence is unbecoming<br />past a certain age.<br />One is expected to have learned something,<br />to desire something enough to wrap one's self around it no matter the requirement in blood,<br />and one really ought to, eventually, have grown some guts.<br />"<br /><br />Sorry for "reprinting" but that is just amazing. And the message of finding PASSION to fulfill one's life is so awesome! Live, find what inspires you, and grab it and learn as much about it as possible. The "pretty girl' syndrome - is so annoying - it is why I find women over 40 so much more interesting. I really can't understand why men go for the "young ones" - or maybe it says something about the men. <br /><br />I adore your ending. The little bird and her song. I will listen for it. Excellent, Shay!Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-35024870419429454782014-02-03T01:09:02.684-05:002014-02-03T01:09:02.684-05:00This captures her essence. You wield the flame ~This captures her essence. You wield the flame ~Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-15075066215535032602014-02-03T01:03:18.480-05:002014-02-03T01:03:18.480-05:00wow! with every poem, i think that's as good a...wow! with every poem, i think that's as good as it gets... then you write another one, even better. this is... astounding, astonishing, affirming, amazing, awe-inspiring. this is... a song of your soul that i could listen to through Eternity.<br />You ARE<br />i HEAR<br /><br />fucking brilliant, SP! one of your best EVER!<br />♥Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-42739542866832398232014-02-02T19:11:21.609-05:002014-02-02T19:11:21.609-05:00There is such self-affirmation and courage in this...There is such self-affirmation and courage in this- yes! Grandmother Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18169464484379536529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-88679424197194925192014-02-02T16:50:55.278-05:002014-02-02T16:50:55.278-05:00Okay, this is my all time favorite of your poems a...Okay, this is my all time favorite of your poems and you know how many are my favourites. This is the real stuff - standing in front of ourselves as ourselves. The butterfly with lion eyes. The lions strewn in the path. All the bleeding. Fantastic. Mama Z said it best. Fuck YES. An unbelievably brilliant write. Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-55813678800087722902014-02-02T16:38:12.223-05:002014-02-02T16:38:12.223-05:00Epic piece! Especially loved this imagery:
"...Epic piece! Especially loved this imagery:<br />"but there are lions strewn dead in my path, behind me."<br /><br />How such a tiny thing can wreak such havoc. Beautiful.HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-75507696957523413872014-02-02T15:46:31.096-05:002014-02-02T15:46:31.096-05:00Rawrr. For me it has been that kind of evolution/...Rawrr. For me it has been that kind of evolution/journey/transformation won from things that didn't work for me the way I thought they should--for at least the first 50 years. Lucky, huh?! Beautifully expressed in an Anais kind of radical departure, one I've begun to hear as you. Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-28798983331113988542014-02-02T13:00:14.972-05:002014-02-02T13:00:14.972-05:00Shay--I forgot to say (this is my only poetry for ...Shay--I forgot to say (this is my only poetry for today ;) that Carole King's Tapestry album was the first one I fell in love with. And THAT poster (the picture you chose to go along with the song you chose) hung in my bedroom, right beside one of James Taylor. Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-79913061215492676752014-02-02T12:57:12.409-05:002014-02-02T12:57:12.409-05:00"I am a little bird, a butterfly, nothing muc..."I am a little bird, a butterfly, nothing much,<br />but there are lions strewn dead in my path, behind me." Love that line!! (just one among many in this fabulous piece) Such a powerful piece of growing pains.Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-61207254515289361932014-02-02T12:07:03.199-05:002014-02-02T12:07:03.199-05:00Fuck YES.Fuck YES.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-67760402508958278452014-02-02T11:50:19.144-05:002014-02-02T11:50:19.144-05:00i luv the language of growth and maturing; there i...i luv the language of growth and maturing; there is dynamism in your words<br />"Fun is fun,<br />until one starts marrying people and moving in.<br />A common language must be agreed upon."<br /><br />my favourite lines<br /><br />Have a nice Sunday<br /><br />much love...Gillena Coxhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09191865405561549074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-25867511919463615752014-02-02T08:53:49.274-05:002014-02-02T08:53:49.274-05:00Hey Shay--this starts strong, but garners intensit...Hey Shay--this starts strong, but garners intensity as it moves along, rather like the narrator starting with the common goal of prettiness and moving on to becoming the leader of an internal pride. Many good true solid coin able observations here, though the voice becomes more idiosyncratic in the best of ways--individualistic. I think of "I am" like becoming one's own deity at last, though being still a bird, there's a humility too. K. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-80890619927470832172014-02-02T08:24:59.134-05:002014-02-02T08:24:59.134-05:00I'm with Hedgewitch. The last three lines are ...I'm with Hedgewitch. The last three lines are exquisite. And the period after "am" is priceless.Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-88058674136752748552014-02-02T08:23:42.730-05:002014-02-02T08:23:42.730-05:00Uncanny that we chose the same quote but used it d...Uncanny that we chose the same quote but used it differently ~ I specially like butterfly with lioness eyes and turning gauze into garlands. Last ending lines are passionately moving~ Gracehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02213172239590722747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-37426822125158008042014-02-02T01:08:08.719-05:002014-02-02T01:08:08.719-05:00I hesitate to respond to a poem as if it is a page...I hesitate to respond to a poem as if it is a page from someone’s diary…the “I” in poems not always being the poet themselves and such, but this feels so real. So if it is or isn’t, it’s just that good. <br /><br />“but I was me<br />standing there<br />in front of myself at last.”<br /><br />Wow. I found the whole piece moving. I hear you.Jennifer Wagnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04344877737695801883noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-48065789732729128852014-02-01T18:58:37.308-05:002014-02-01T18:58:37.308-05:00I love the progression, the transformation...this:...I love the progression, the transformation...this:<br /><br />"innocence is unbecoming<br />past a certain age.<br />One is expected to have learned something,<br />to desire something enough to wrap one's self around it"<br /><br />This resonates and the facing oneself in the mirror for real embracing the image and digging to find what one really wants...<br /><br />Excellent poem, Shay.Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-14187183985984055762014-02-01T17:12:20.295-05:002014-02-01T17:12:20.295-05:00"Fun is fun, until one starts marrying people..."Fun is fun, until one starts marrying people and moving in."<br />That line made me laugh, but a lot of other lines are fabulous, amazing, great, Shay! Wow, you!<br />Luv, KKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-15329369943706657002014-02-01T16:45:24.782-05:002014-02-01T16:45:24.782-05:00i agree with hedgewitch - the last 3 lines...i agree with hedgewitch - the last 3 lines...TexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13641962051044162710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52662202362349990762014-02-01T15:29:24.293-05:002014-02-01T15:29:24.293-05:00Wow. I better spit out the glue and get to work if...Wow. I better spit out the glue and get to work if I'm gunna pee with the big dogs here in the Pond. <br /><br />That was amazing. I am feeling particularly passionate and inspired today. This makes me feel like I've sold off so many little pieces of me over the years all the fun stuff is gone. Like I'm just on the Edge of passion.<br /><br />But It's been a great day for poetry in my little fiefdom. Fo Sho. Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15220312888756354357noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-86580485542963788842014-02-01T14:54:04.676-05:002014-02-01T14:54:04.676-05:00A rather harrowing retrospective, but one which re...A rather harrowing retrospective, but one which resonates on a lot of levels. I especially like the fourth stanza--nothing shapes us and makes us ourselves like the things for which it is so hard to feel a just gratitude. Last three lines are solid gold.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.com