Wednesday, March 25, 2015

Army Wife

When I met her she was enlisted--
a serious chick soldier turned out in
army surplus

Take off your damn boots, I told her.
I don't want it looking like Napoleon came tromping across
my precious Persian

On a rainy afternoon, we walked to the mm yum bakery--
me in a white jacket like a ski trooper,
but she detected me with kiss

In September she moved in, when the sky was that spectacular blue.
We're cat and commander, redeploying this and that
to make basic barracks accommodate my girly curl


Sioux said...

I loved--among other things--the "iss" of kiss and reconnaissance."

You are a master at word choice, at creating images, at blending the serious with the silly, at... well, what are you NOT an expert at when it comes to writing, Shay?

Lolamouse said...

I so agree with Sioux! Spectacular imagery, storytelling, and everything (as usual!)

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Superb - not a bit of unnecessary anything. - Mosk

Sherry Blue Sky said...

So clever - "she detected me with kiss reconnaissance." Love the closing stanza.

TexWisGirl said...

cat and commander. :)

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is a wonderfully layered poem. Lots of nuances in this relationship.

hedgewitch said...

This is full of quotable lines, but I really do relish those last few, and the kiss reconnaissance. The whole package is a gem, Shay.

Björn Rudberg said...

Somehow the unlikely combination of cat and commander caught my attention.. superb imagery...

my heart's love songs said...

what's a ski trooper? is that like a stormtrooper? huh? huh?

of course this is amazing! everything you write is amazing... unless it's stunning... or exquisite... or beyond fucking words...

{skulking back home to shut down my blog}

Mama Zen said...

I love the way this says so much by leaving much unsaid. I also like the kind of quirky structure.

Sara said...

This was fun read, but I had to look up "rococo!"

I liked the use of the letter "r" for the last words:~)

Sorry to be so late in my visits lately. I've been working on a story and when I do this, I have a hard time remembering to eat:~)

Rajesh said...

Ah! The weather adds to the fun of it all! Beautiful.

grapeling said...

you always make it appear so effortless ~