tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post1228653001588861373..comments2024-03-28T09:11:04.513-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): A Remedy For RobberyFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger22125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-24310811909293357552018-08-06T11:13:35.263-04:002018-08-06T11:13:35.263-04:00She is so crafty. Watch out for that door that ope...She is so crafty. Watch out for that door that opens to nothing. Somehow this reminded me of the Winchester House and the ghosts residing therein.Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-45492139545195130152018-07-31T18:55:23.891-04:002018-07-31T18:55:23.891-04:00I really love the unexpectedness of the opening tw...I really love the unexpectedness of the opening two lines - and then how it all unfolds, and the form works for it, sets it down like two parallel lines, running silver for gold .... <br /><br />and well, fire is smoke is steam - and sometimes, you just have to pack up and leave, at least dump the losses by the roadside and try to forget ... <br /><br />and well, you had me chuckling a bit at policemen petting her at the station, it conjured up the weirdest image of "innocent but dark thievery" at this weird train station thing .... <br /><br />interesting poem you've unearthed from before ... :)Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-60162440428079815962018-07-31T16:36:53.534-04:002018-07-31T16:36:53.534-04:00That stealer of rooms, houses, stations. This is ...That stealer of rooms, houses, stations. This is so rich in rhyme and meter. This story is a mixture of winsomeness and nightmare. It creeps into my few dreams and steals them too.tonispencerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04200564195675794747noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-73172034771293934232018-07-31T16:36:50.550-04:002018-07-31T16:36:50.550-04:00Love the flow of this Shay...it is like a haunting...Love the flow of this Shay...it is like a haunting ballad. That last line is killer! I love it!Carrie Van Hornhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11715648073882529202noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-57888656842437660222018-07-31T16:22:46.426-04:002018-07-31T16:22:46.426-04:00Somehow it made me think of Hotel California ... Somehow it made me think of Hotel California ... brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-65024954804304704492018-07-31T13:33:06.421-04:002018-07-31T13:33:06.421-04:00Oh, this is very well done - the stranger steals s...Oh, this is very well done - the stranger steals so much just in a short stay. And we learn to board up and try to be aloof of another one.<br />Safeguard your heart; that is the lesson before anything else.<br />I really liked the way you picture a tale around it. <br />"Beware the door/That opens to nothing--/A void where no guest can stay, again.": This is definitely my favorite bit.<br />-HAAnmol (HA)https://www.blogger.com/profile/02427056865589377093noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-15724911698407788692018-07-31T13:13:19.940-04:002018-07-31T13:13:19.940-04:00Hey there Tiger Woman! I am struck by how each st...Hey there Tiger Woman! I am struck by how each stanza stands alone as a poem!Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-7567651324123107612018-07-31T12:35:24.337-04:002018-07-31T12:35:24.337-04:00that would be an enchantress....cool!that would be an enchantress....cool!Sreejahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01395234979504881964noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-60623371946093091212018-07-31T11:17:03.406-04:002018-07-31T11:17:03.406-04:00I kept going back to that door that opens to nothi...I kept going back to that door that opens to nothing...excellent imagery throughout. Thotpurgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09729170517164200003noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-57584642479460214352018-07-31T10:38:59.559-04:002018-07-31T10:38:59.559-04:00She stole the room, plus the train to escape on. I...She stole the room, plus the train to escape on. I love this one. Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-71637764676389008772012-08-31T05:13:59.678-04:002012-08-31T05:13:59.678-04:00at least she didn't succeed in stealing the ho...at least she didn't succeed in stealing the homeowner's heart!<br /><br />{{{don't forget the Crisco???}}}<br />{{{i'm not gonna go there...}}}<br /><br />{{{i wanna, but i'm not gonna}}}<br />{{snort}}Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-3693104237018141202012-08-29T06:46:14.021-04:002012-08-29T06:46:14.021-04:00Totally cool! Definitely some lines in here for a ...Totally cool! Definitely some lines in here for a song. All that stealin' and rhymin' <br /><br />xoJannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66552699446885862282012-08-28T22:15:36.164-04:002012-08-28T22:15:36.164-04:00Sounds like my last visit to the Winchester Myster...Sounds like my last visit to the Winchester Mystery House. Now *that's* the kind of home I'd build if I had the extra scratch.HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-12996017200332100272012-08-28T19:28:26.141-04:002012-08-28T19:28:26.141-04:00Loved every line, the tempo, the rhyme........and ...Loved every line, the tempo, the rhyme........and the fanciful creature who steals whole rooms and railway stations........way cool!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-22072857061224335342012-08-28T17:40:23.068-04:002012-08-28T17:40:23.068-04:00This the perfect bittersweet mix of absurdity and ...This the perfect bittersweet mix of absurdity and winsomeness. Sometimes you just gotta cut your losses. Sending a firm embrace - MoskBuddah Moskowitzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06839068145732552328noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-19572819612161484612012-08-28T14:34:40.561-04:002012-08-28T14:34:40.561-04:00ouch. ouch. TexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13641962051044162710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-12942065479570294002012-08-28T13:07:46.472-04:002012-08-28T13:07:46.472-04:00I agree .. great way to begin my Tuesday!! Remind...I agree .. great way to begin my Tuesday!! Reminds me a bit of Lisbeth Salander ....Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52194298107095333492012-08-28T11:23:01.394-04:002012-08-28T11:23:01.394-04:00I can't comment over the Thin Lizzy stuck in m...I can't comment over the Thin Lizzy stuck in my head!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-25142208068690126352012-08-28T10:46:34.379-04:002012-08-28T10:46:34.379-04:00I LOVE Stanza 4, and the following section about h...I LOVE Stanza 4, and the following section about her stealing everything she comes in contact with. Clearly the message is "Run, baby, run."Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-12852627015473940202012-08-28T10:06:50.802-04:002012-08-28T10:06:50.802-04:00"A void where no guest can stay again.."..."A void where no guest can stay again.." One of your greatest gifts for me, Shay, is this ability to take something intangible and translate it into an image that can't be denied, a physical reality out of an emotion or experience--also, your skill at creating characters shines in this one--I feel I know the thief all too well, and can put a face on her from my own experience. Plus, I always love it when you season it up with some meter and rhyme. Thanks for the great start to my day.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52102788740145180062012-08-28T09:59:21.445-04:002012-08-28T09:59:21.445-04:00'take only your heart and never look back'...'take only your heart and never look back' ... oh boy ... Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-6508657340810218572012-08-28T09:38:13.174-04:002012-08-28T09:38:13.174-04:00Yeah, cut your losses. Sometimes the whole house h...Yeah, cut your losses. Sometimes the whole house has to be burned down to eradicate the ghost of one room. <br />You spin stories so well<br />RickFar Beyond The Ridgehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05854741339081490896noreply@blogger.com