tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post1613672795008628765..comments2024-03-28T19:48:05.247-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Her(e) it isFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger17125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-74615496121859797952013-07-01T20:47:13.258-04:002013-07-01T20:47:13.258-04:00postage due and damaged...
You ran with the the...postage due and damaged... <br /><br />You ran with the theme "greet yourself" in a very clever way... this challenge was too much for me on what little time I am able to carve out during the summertime. <br /><br />the "dress it in red" lines made me chuckle. How do you just keep creating story lines? Maybe that should be something you do for a prompt... give us some insight how to stretch our (my) brain... :)Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-54468660327021880982013-07-01T16:26:16.785-04:002013-07-01T16:26:16.785-04:00What attitude, girlfriend!!! But why pick on the p...What attitude, girlfriend!!! But why pick on the poor postman?<br /><br />I loved the part about the heart being returned with "postage due and damaged." Well said. <br /><br />Hope all is well with you and it's fun to read your poetry -- just the right amount of dark humor and sexy dreams:~)Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-76190643021765948122013-07-01T16:15:48.107-04:002013-07-01T16:15:48.107-04:00You take on each challenge and I come here to read...You take on each challenge and I come here to read and be amazed. "Now, I am the one billowing thick dark plumes, going up from inside my own skin" I love that..coming to complete freedom to be who you are without apology.Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-33324079541616450992013-07-01T07:27:37.109-04:002013-07-01T07:27:37.109-04:00I'm in 'shock and awe' with your creat...I'm in 'shock and awe' with your creative brain. All your simile's and pictorial use of words take a reader for a ride hoping it never ends.<br /><br />Gracias mi amiga for such a treatMarcoantonio Arellano (Nene)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10713672589582754484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-55178859577123967432013-06-30T22:48:12.310-04:002013-06-30T22:48:12.310-04:00Wow!
Where to begin?
I swallowed this poem whole, ...Wow!<br />Where to begin?<br />I swallowed this poem whole, and now I am listening to your music and going back for more. Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-62620873157109922252013-06-30T21:43:42.633-04:002013-06-30T21:43:42.633-04:00So much anger barely contained by the thin lines i...So much anger barely contained by the thin lines in the poem. It's like you captured anger in a jar and are holding it up to the light. Fantastic!<br /><br />Oh, and I had to Google the world "caduceus". Heh...HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-39151663535040692712013-06-30T20:58:49.122-04:002013-06-30T20:58:49.122-04:00Witty and wonderful and totally you! I love that 5...Witty and wonderful and totally you! I love that 5th stanza!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-28565798821689692832013-06-30T20:38:21.254-04:002013-06-30T20:38:21.254-04:00Ummm yes...this is excellent...I Love the part abo...Ummm yes...this is excellent...I Love the part about the crows a lot!! Excellent and uniquely you all the way! @ your comment...I'm still working on it, too...somedays are better than others.Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-70606825489223633032013-06-30T16:39:22.538-04:002013-06-30T16:39:22.538-04:00The twist of dark with the light...your specialty,...The twist of dark with the light...your specialty, Shay. A heart belongs to its owner...TALONhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03205633556998220372noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-8290688675403228592013-06-30T15:12:00.269-04:002013-06-30T15:12:00.269-04:00Fireblossom
Your poems are so excellent- but I wo...Fireblossom<br /><br />Your poems are so excellent- but I wondered what you looked like and I have no clue- well, you cant be 35 by any view (or maybe that my dirty old man brain twisting in the curving view and vital fire of some imagined fireplace lost in the darksome woods at night- your lantern in the window I pass by somehow helps light my way.<br />L. Edgar Ottohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00525169618204198073noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-39714478201075751402013-06-30T15:01:00.261-04:002013-06-30T15:01:00.261-04:00Oh, THIS is the attitude and wittiness I've be...Oh, THIS is the attitude and wittiness I've been missing...ashy anthills and all.<br /><br />Btw, I see that Angeline Jolie (who I believe does nothing for you but no matter) will be starring in Maleficent next Spring. I think you'll like her in that one.Ileanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11200869126695231050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-48454895213508579882013-06-30T13:29:57.890-04:002013-06-30T13:29:57.890-04:00I have mentioned before what an incredible way you...I have mentioned before what an incredible way you have with similes, and I must point out this one:<br /><br />I have been feeling hollow, like a human celery stick sat up and rotting <br />in a wrought iron chair<br />with a fork in its forehead...<br /><br />The graphic visuals astound the reader, and the poetic truth of the comparison makes the image a lasting one.<br /><br />Fabulous concept of retrieving one's heart from a fallible lover and learning to love its beating back in the bosom where it belongs.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44240213708514582872013-06-30T13:26:45.269-04:002013-06-30T13:26:45.269-04:00This is such quintessential Fireblossom stuff, tha...This is such quintessential Fireblossom stuff, that I don't know what to say that I haven't already said often and often, about how good it is--My favorite lines are the bitch-slap ones, of course, but there's a darkness in the humor that knows itself too well, that knows the end of the movie seen a thousand times but still has a totally irrational hope things will be different on the thousandth and one viewing. The blend of tenderness and cynicism is especially effective, and the close is perfect.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-86685914898494849252013-06-30T12:11:12.340-04:002013-06-30T12:11:12.340-04:00Holy hell, this is amazing!
"a clock-girl sw...Holy hell, this is amazing!<br /><br />"a clock-girl swaying with the systolic and diastolic of my pretty balancing act"<br /><br />I may never write again.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-33060065640507226422013-06-30T11:30:34.721-04:002013-06-30T11:30:34.721-04:00black, humor, gall, wry, puckish, guffaw, phenomen...black, humor, gall, wry, puckish, guffaw, phenomenal. ~ Mgrapelinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14929030339206629628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-51500572100829299212013-06-30T10:15:00.560-04:002013-06-30T10:15:00.560-04:00"and then to crawl insider her and hum, rocki..."and then to crawl insider her and hum, rocking" is so moving and sweet. <br /><br />I especially love the last stanza, Shay.<br /><br />(Don't you ever slow down? ;)Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-74346527887101712912013-06-30T09:44:38.527-04:002013-06-30T09:44:38.527-04:00You manage such a wonderful combination of humor a...You manage such a wonderful combination of humor and despair - and the imagery is so original and, okay, wacky, but vivid enough that we can easily picture what you are talking about the celery,the jackknifed poems, and the wonderful curing cadeucis at the end. Terrific. This is Karin of Manicddaily. I am on a mobile device and I think it will make me use an old google ID. k. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com