tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post1716822626868318936..comments2024-03-18T12:57:23.556-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Portrait of A.Fireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger25125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-89866766273107660272015-05-03T23:09:07.812-04:002015-05-03T23:09:07.812-04:00This is so nice....This is so nice....Lindahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12692170857496442623noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-25104213514372656772015-05-02T18:54:25.657-04:002015-05-02T18:54:25.657-04:00This makes me wonder how many secret, never-spoken...This makes me wonder how many secret, never-spoken-about crushes there are...<br /><br />Very sweet and wistful...Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-22914984830375821182015-05-01T13:54:38.369-04:002015-05-01T13:54:38.369-04:00another to be read re-read and read againanother to be read re-read and read againDarylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-12883412533660313752015-04-29T22:52:45.414-04:002015-04-29T22:52:45.414-04:00sigh ~sigh ~grapelinghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14929030339206629628noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-83042054647927055732015-04-29T21:00:05.018-04:002015-04-29T21:00:05.018-04:00I know, right?! Glasses are super sexy.
"A j...I know, right?! Glasses are super sexy.<br /><br />"A journal for her notices." This line is to die for.<br /><br />I really like the stacking of the three "Shes" in the first stanza and the three "As" in the fourth stanza. It's visually interesting. If it were done in only one place, I would have thought it was an accident. But being that it was in two, I think it was on purpose. "She('s) a _____." What? Three <i>shes</i> who are three things. Things we don't know. But <i>you</i> do, because you're watching her so closely. You carry her mail; what's more intimate than that?<br /><br />"slipping letters carefully into the slot" ... Clever. There's a double meaning in almost every word. Well done.<br /><br />Oh, and I like that you left "hums" hanging on its own line. Not only does she hum with her mouth, but in the springtime, everything about her hums with electricity. We all have a season in which we especially thrive. Hers is spring.<br /><br />I also think "clears the gardens" means she shaves her southern lady parts, and "plants seeds" means she has relations with men. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-46766995736108247122015-04-29T15:53:09.712-04:002015-04-29T15:53:09.712-04:00I especially like that she "hums."
Hop...I especially like that she "hums." <br /><br />Hope all is well with you! Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-20950451270385080512015-04-29T14:07:17.907-04:002015-04-29T14:07:17.907-04:00I am a sucker for unrequited love..and this poem i...I am a sucker for unrequited love..and this poem is very sigh-worthy.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-13616471957927709372015-04-29T12:10:20.162-04:002015-04-29T12:10:20.162-04:00As ever, I am moved by the emotion you convey in y...As ever, I am moved by the emotion you convey in your character sketches. We get of sense of who she really is, and how the narrator really feels. Lovely.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12460881702249079009noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-6155708792511115282015-04-29T08:09:07.401-04:002015-04-29T08:09:07.401-04:00Delightful. Not only a poem but also an intriguing...Delightful. Not only a poem but also an intriguing short story.Rosemary Nissen-Wadehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05913841031559499568noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52854165541606778842015-04-29T01:24:01.687-04:002015-04-29T01:24:01.687-04:00A slice of your life?
ALOHA from Honolulu,
Co...A slice of your life?<br /><br /><br /><br /><br /><br />ALOHA from Honolulu,<br /><a href="http://comfortspiral.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">ComfortSpiral</a><br /> =^..^=Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-79202639692000444622015-04-28T23:57:21.895-04:002015-04-28T23:57:21.895-04:00I always leave treats for my mail carrier- Wow, yo...I always leave treats for my mail carrier- Wow, you really painted your route-so well! I bet you sigh a lot~Ellahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06070952447277684613noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-75042932769759125272015-04-28T20:34:50.114-04:002015-04-28T20:34:50.114-04:00I want a gazebo made of election signs..."Vot...I want a gazebo made of election signs..."Vote for Scarlet!" ;)<br /><br />Missed the wit and humor here. Sigh.Ileanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11200869126695231050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-46369994602888279282015-04-28T17:44:06.460-04:002015-04-28T17:44:06.460-04:00I love that journal too.I love that journal too.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85371535252137135862015-04-28T16:06:01.748-04:002015-04-28T16:06:01.748-04:00Yes, slip that journal in the slot. A gazebo made ...Yes, slip that journal in the slot. A gazebo made entirely of election signs..interesting. Much better use of political pandering.Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-38846574067618695962015-04-28T15:55:40.293-04:002015-04-28T15:55:40.293-04:00Ah... she needs that journal. It would fit in the ...Ah... she needs that journal. It would fit in the mail slot! ;)Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44860919967663425542015-04-28T15:46:34.163-04:002015-04-28T15:46:34.163-04:00Sometimes the humble mail in the slot is what'...Sometimes the humble mail in the slot is what's needed.. a crush is something I have forgot how it felt...brudberghttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12563403553536472377noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85378939777161629562015-04-28T15:07:51.947-04:002015-04-28T15:07:51.947-04:00I love it, such poignant musings as you put the ma...I love it, such poignant musings as you put the mail into the slot. Sigh. Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-61802233857298696352015-04-28T14:51:42.475-04:002015-04-28T14:51:42.475-04:00lovely.
question regarding your labels:
is it ~
...lovely.<br /><br />question regarding your labels:<br /><br />is it ~<br />oh, well; silly rabbit; your plums are safe with me<br />or<br />oh, well, silly rabbit, your plums are safe with me?<br /><br />♥my heart's love songshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13629303520695044479noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-42900100480584640822015-04-28T13:57:32.742-04:002015-04-28T13:57:32.742-04:00You deliver every time, Shay!You deliver every time, Shay!Timoteohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08351410966396854582noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16807793307149767132015-04-28T13:42:15.444-04:002015-04-28T13:42:15.444-04:00I understand, I understand. Well done, ShayI understand, I understand. Well done, ShayBuddah Moskowitzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06839068145732552328noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-18903277161168433982015-04-28T12:56:20.854-04:002015-04-28T12:56:20.854-04:00Crush story - love that.Crush story - love that.Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-17193630516874117602015-04-28T11:36:15.317-04:002015-04-28T11:36:15.317-04:00"A journal for her notices."
I love tha..."A journal for her notices."<br /><br />I love that.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-91855279616725700582015-04-28T09:42:59.495-04:002015-04-28T09:42:59.495-04:00The intoxication of that stranger-crush is a speci...The intoxication of that stranger-crush is a special vintage, one to sip in the grey cold fog of reality to warm your bones. I love the little gestures of affection the narrator would like to make, and the quiet glow and heat behind the words.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-40067386714340766372015-04-28T09:33:09.142-04:002015-04-28T09:33:09.142-04:00Wonder if Chip our mail carrier thinks about me in...Wonder if Chip our mail carrier thinks about me in a poetic way ~~ doubt it.Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-4199608895913308142015-04-28T08:56:36.950-04:002015-04-28T08:56:36.950-04:00This is oh so beautiful..! Loved the depiction of ...This is oh so beautiful..! Loved the depiction of your sentiments for the character in the poem :D<br />xoxoSanaa Rizvihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06681404650477409830noreply@blogger.com