tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post3105892910922842975..comments2024-03-28T15:32:26.808-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Girl Scouts On AcidFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-67662601305238074842012-05-09T09:02:36.130-04:002012-05-09T09:02:36.130-04:00I'm a little creeped out by the use of "g...I'm a little creeped out by the use of "girl scout" only because of all the creeps preying on young girls these days... (and a recent too close call with a family that went through this) BUT I do get what you were getting at with the image... <br /><br />Now, House of Mirrors to describe love, (especially teenage "love") is ingenious! I see it and hear about it a lot these days... Will I survive? :)Margarethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00007201357693227614noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-27486693717514264562012-05-08T02:40:18.698-04:002012-05-08T02:40:18.698-04:00Very cool, definitely lyrical, would make a great ...Very cool, definitely lyrical, would make a great song. Love the house of mirrors stanza, very neat. ThanksAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05885047796180529498noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-75290954027428909752012-05-07T21:52:21.558-04:002012-05-07T21:52:21.558-04:00cute!!!!!cute!!!!!Isadora Gruyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036782300945079952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-57011876170527463412012-05-07T20:34:15.927-04:002012-05-07T20:34:15.927-04:00As others have said, this piece is positively lyri...As others have said, this piece is positively lyrical. It literally begs to be put to music.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16049770623138973942012-05-07T19:50:44.933-04:002012-05-07T19:50:44.933-04:00I used "fool" to go with "You'l...I used "fool" to go with "You'll" and "too", but you're right, it does sound guy-ish.Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-54404448142872680392012-05-07T19:36:07.344-04:002012-05-07T19:36:07.344-04:00Sorry, Shay. Straight-girl mistake. It won't h...Sorry, Shay. Straight-girl mistake. It won't happen again. ;)<br /><br />What threw me was the word "fool." I would never use that word to describe a woman.<br /><br />rosemarymint.wordpress.com✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52112164424073220502012-05-07T18:20:22.119-04:002012-05-07T18:20:22.119-04:00Girl scout on acid...that is some image ~Girl scout on acid...that is some image ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85080080779960931042012-05-07T18:18:33.725-04:002012-05-07T18:18:33.725-04:00Guy, Shawna? Au contraire.Guy, Shawna? Au contraire.Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-72998197657406254222012-05-07T15:01:57.553-04:002012-05-07T15:01:57.553-04:00Is love ever NOT in the House of Mirrors? If so, I...Is love ever NOT in the House of Mirrors? If so, I haven't managed to find it. I love the italics here--which point to appearances, as well as the mirrors, not being the same as the underlying reality. And the elevator shaft.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-53522749968833790642012-05-07T14:33:55.393-04:002012-05-07T14:33:55.393-04:00I like how you begin this with "girl scouts o...I like how you begin this with "girl scouts on acid" ... but by the time you repeat it toward the end, we have a completely different understanding of the phrase. It's not the "girl scout" who seems like she's dropping acid; it's the guy who feels as such when he's around her (or when she's on his mind). Nothing makes sense; everything is a hallucination, reality/surreality a blitz-blend (to use Kerry's word).<br /><br />Very effective use of italics and "House of Mirrors" to illustrate your point.<br /><br />You should write one about how she feels, being acid and all.<br /><br />rosemarymint.wordpress.com✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-9691556207769633812012-05-07T13:30:54.850-04:002012-05-07T13:30:54.850-04:00Fantastic poem: "Gone Without A trace." ...Fantastic poem: "Gone Without A trace." Love the fun house mirror.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-40410310208038464832012-05-07T12:47:32.564-04:002012-05-07T12:47:32.564-04:00yes she is, and yes I did, once some time ago...yes she is, and yes I did, once some time ago...Mark Windhamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01662876682127886074noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-41378955568086647382012-05-07T11:37:26.832-04:002012-05-07T11:37:26.832-04:00Awesome! The idea of the girl scout on acid certa...Awesome! The idea of the girl scout on acid certainly paints a picture!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-77230152091288790612012-05-07T11:31:22.726-04:002012-05-07T11:31:22.726-04:00This is a very enigmatic character you have create...This is a very enigmatic character you have created. You do have a gift for writing about surreally believable people, and breathing life into them, and a back history that is just out of sight.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63809150373835997312012-05-07T10:29:58.618-04:002012-05-07T10:29:58.618-04:00Its the game thats so enticing...and when they kno...Its the game thats so enticing...and when they know how to play it....and they stumble across a fool (someomnne like me maybe..lol)its all over but the cryin'.Herotomosthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11486093602914824276noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-37119662081509886652012-05-07T08:59:06.569-04:002012-05-07T08:59:06.569-04:00Girls like her won't be sticking around those ...Girls like her won't be sticking around those who can only think of getting to her, I guess. I agree with Writerwoman, this could work as a song. :) Fun to read.<br /><br />- Ravenblack<br />http://theotherdayplace.blogspot.comRavenblackhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07408808375869234480noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-13961709543462889362012-05-07T06:28:20.858-04:002012-05-07T06:28:20.858-04:00should they linger around at times instead of vani...should they linger around at times instead of vanishing, shooting, stabbing etc? not always, you know, but just once in a while? <br />as enjoyable and spunky as always.Abin Chakrabortyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17534639363132246570noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-34859569883977939282009-07-30T19:40:12.456-04:002009-07-30T19:40:12.456-04:00..gone without a trace...just perfect!!..gone without a trace...just perfect!!She..the beauty and the besthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11710179461574830490noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-50949256356029997642008-10-31T22:31:00.000-04:002008-10-31T22:31:00.000-04:00Enjoying going through your archives.J.xoEnjoying going through your archives.<BR/>J.<BR/>xoJannie Funsterhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11595786402510366043noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44079077048345661892008-04-16T12:31:00.000-04:002008-04-16T12:31:00.000-04:00Oh this is just the style of poetry I love!Its lyr...Oh this is just the style of poetry I love!<BR/><BR/>Its lyrical, a little bitter and brusing, but so beautiful. This could make a fantastic start to a song.writerwomanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07645753712657412094noreply@blogger.com