tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post3465526448891583146..comments2024-03-28T05:18:54.680-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): MoonlightFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger30125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-39906015675199456002011-04-26T21:05:20.085-04:002011-04-26T21:05:20.085-04:00If she were...but in my mind, I don't think sh...If she were...but in my mind, I don't think she is.<br /><br />But, a fisher of men? Oh, my, that grabbed me by the short and curlies, my dear!<br /><br />So many layers, so much beauty.Irish Gumbohttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07386134334156997186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-79417501115194034362011-03-28T14:30:33.468-04:002011-03-28T14:30:33.468-04:00I love comforting nonsense.
The image of the perf...I love comforting nonsense.<br /><br />The image of the perfume bottles lined up like birds on a perch is so striking to me. This is just gorgeous all the way through.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-27549779725135472762011-03-28T13:30:45.143-04:002011-03-28T13:30:45.143-04:00Thank you for your kind words about my blog. I app...Thank you for your kind words about my blog. I appreciate your interest. I love to play with pictures and words...<br /><br />♥ ஆεlεɳa ~.^Helena Whitehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03022290127423654311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63868102822106638782011-03-27T19:15:29.764-04:002011-03-27T19:15:29.764-04:00Everything about this is so damn magical that I ju...Everything about this is so damn magical that I just want to scream myself green with envy.Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-4917208690198776092011-03-27T17:20:49.267-04:002011-03-27T17:20:49.267-04:00Wonderful, stunning versifying.Wonderful, stunning versifying.Steve Isaakhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07162341357622058518noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-84702098549811314782011-03-27T16:41:43.720-04:002011-03-27T16:41:43.720-04:00That was pretty cool hearing how you are inspired....That was pretty cool hearing how you are inspired.Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-54894981611275228312011-03-27T16:07:29.324-04:002011-03-27T16:07:29.324-04:00A poem with character, and an engaging one at that...A poem with character, and an engaging one at that, masterfully playing with metaphor and imagery. Descriptive and hard-hitting, an exceptional piece that certainly hits what I would call poetic elegance. Strong, very strong - keep up the good work.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-4384117091867818892011-03-27T15:40:26.443-04:002011-03-27T15:40:26.443-04:00Shay, you have woven a magical tale here, the imag...Shay, you have woven a magical tale here, the imagery is beautiful. Oh yeah, I love Penelope:)<br /><br />Pamelaflauberthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18424439866515694972noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-92095877935426228712011-03-27T15:19:39.460-04:002011-03-27T15:19:39.460-04:00Wow, that's quite a mind trip for a whore who ...Wow, that's quite a mind trip for a whore who lives and works by the sea ;) Like the layers and hints that you add to this as you build the momentum towards the last stanza Shay. You're work is deserving of more than one read because of your metaphors.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-74098063026390269502011-03-27T14:59:01.322-04:002011-03-27T14:59:01.322-04:00FB,
This is outstanding. Kinda where human behav...FB,<br /><br />This is outstanding. Kinda where human behavior melds with the metaphor, where extended scene isn't 'mere extension', where one sliver of social behavior becomes representative of . . . social behavior.<br /><br />Very, very good.<br /><br />Trulyfool<br /><br />(P.S. Nothing like Penelope Cruz works the seaside, the streets, the phones or even -- I do this out of belief, not firm knowledge -- the escort ranks of Charlie Sheen's little black book.)Trulyfoolhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13385653066007723233noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-85698370397345024022011-03-27T14:17:53.188-04:002011-03-27T14:17:53.188-04:00superb, my dear. xxxjsuperb, my dear. xxxjJenne' R. Andrews https://www.blogger.com/profile/15744946229300234443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-56685726868262879402011-03-27T13:56:24.759-04:002011-03-27T13:56:24.759-04:00Funny! It made me laugh, thanks!Funny! It made me laugh, thanks!Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-33628334066204027722011-03-27T12:50:50.465-04:002011-03-27T12:50:50.465-04:00The black umbrellas pouring from the church steps ...The black umbrellas pouring from the church steps like raisins from a scoop<br /><br />Magical moment!Jinksyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01686101468214361004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-35069565137600388182011-03-27T12:27:17.871-04:002011-03-27T12:27:17.871-04:00Shay---I don't know why you think that some of...Shay---I don't know why you think that some of your work is more mired in muck than this one. Perhaps this is one of which you're particularly proud?<br /><br />What I see--every day--is a poet at work who has to have (I must believe this or I will dig at my veins and let myself bleed out, rather than attempt to write when compared with the "spirit of the day") multiple personalities. Your voice is so distinct, yet so different.<br /><br />Are you planning on a collection of your poetry to be published? If no, why not? There are small, independent publishers, and your flying monkeys/spirits could help hawk them. (And I ain't talkin' 'bout a vanity press, neither!) <br /><br />The images in this poem are, as usual, mind-boggling. Toothpick fishing boats...black umbrellas, like raisins from a scoop...eyes refracting like confetti...<br /><br />Spirit--are you assuaged now?Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-14850087563487490362011-03-27T11:34:17.260-04:002011-03-27T11:34:17.260-04:00stunning! striking! amazing! what words can i use ...stunning! striking! amazing! what words can i use to describe the magic of your poetry? i love it! {i wish i could have written it.} ♥ daniAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-61765542134593518482011-03-27T07:58:48.916-04:002011-03-27T07:58:48.916-04:00I agree with the others. Great write on the prompt...I agree with the others. Great write on the prompt. Very imaginative.The Poethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00667034322952126127noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-39951950469247279932011-03-27T07:38:37.179-04:002011-03-27T07:38:37.179-04:00You really are a storyteller - its just such an ad...You really are a storyteller - its just such an added advantage that you can make it flow in a rhythm so :)Another Man's Dreamhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04453440630317550594noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-48541808169349389222011-03-27T07:14:15.487-04:002011-03-27T07:14:15.487-04:00Sublime, such imagery, I love the way you transpor...Sublime, such imagery, I love the way you transport words into such vivid pictures.<br /><br />Anita.Anita Magdalenahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17759774477028333590noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-70488479987921385722011-03-27T07:09:19.377-04:002011-03-27T07:09:19.377-04:00Weird. We looked at the picture and then sung the ...Weird. We looked at the picture and then sung the other halves of its tale. This is jazzy and jocose, the mermaid imagined as a seaside whore whose intentions are indifferent to her gig of drowning men's souls in their own lust. Just a job ... to part the curtains and see this gal on her day off, about her own business, her own life, shows that much of the tales are the clutter of men's minds. And that it's possible to exult in blue rooms beyond. I'm dizzy - and entranced. - BrendanAnonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-60198528280891617052011-03-27T02:09:03.218-04:002011-03-27T02:09:03.218-04:00I'm with the rest of this lot. You're bril...I'm with the rest of this lot. You're brill, totally enjoy every single thing your crafty mind comes up with. Also, was very interested in your response to The Questions! <br /><br />Nice work!<br /><br />xxLisahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05321514984426181181noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-51841800311426237072011-03-26T22:14:56.671-04:002011-03-26T22:14:56.671-04:00I was gonna ask how the hell you come up with such...I was gonna ask how the hell you come up with such awesome stuff, but you already answered that so after I write this I'm going to read it. <br /><br />I absolutely ADORED this one. The first line is genius and it just gets better from there. You go girl! You're rockin'!Ravenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03290572009221670011noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-84767185489069089462011-03-26T21:17:33.548-04:002011-03-26T21:17:33.548-04:00I mean, even a tossed-off-lightly line like "...I mean, even a tossed-off-lightly line like "she arranges her perfumes in rows like kept birds lined on a perch" --- if I wrote a line like that once in a MONTH I would be delirious - you scatter these richly through every poem with an original vision that is just remarkable. Thanks for your interesting comment on your process. But you have more than a process. You are a genius, I do humbly believe. The whole docking between splayed fingers thing........and "their minds melting from the altitude like hanged men". I have no clue how words like that come to you so easily. I am just so very glad that they do and I get to read them.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-61295173690921237162011-03-26T17:44:50.560-04:002011-03-26T17:44:50.560-04:00damn....love the description of jim...love your co...damn....love the description of jim...love your comments as well on where you find inspiration...i am much the same...Brian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66930225397343059642011-03-26T14:32:12.749-04:002011-03-26T14:32:12.749-04:00First, thank you ladies, all of you, for these esp...First, thank you ladies, all of you, for these especially wonderful comments! I appreciate them tremendously.<br /><br />I thought I would answer Helen's questions here in the comments, because perhaps others will be interested in the answers, as well. <br /><br />Helen asks, "How are you inspired?" Almost anything I see, hear, or experience can inspire me. This morning, it was being introduced to Lorca's poetry by my very dear friend Hedgewitch. I had heard the name, but not read anything he had written. I was blown away. It made me want to write something wonderful, myself. <br /><br />Helen asks, "How long does it take you to create something like this?" This poem took about an hour. <br /><br />Helen asks if I think about poetry at work, on my bike, or all the time? I don't think about it all the time, but I may be thinking of it at any time. I think about it a lot. And yes, I think of poems at work, or traveling, or drifting off to sleep, or listening to music, or just really any time at all. A single word or image may lead to a poem. I generally begin with one line and build from there. With this one, it was the opening line, but it isn't always, or even usually. <br /><br />I hope these answers were helpful or at least entertaining!<br /><br />FBFireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63913768466323765852011-03-26T13:58:53.639-04:002011-03-26T13:58:53.639-04:00You draw me right in from the shocking first line,...You draw me right in from the shocking first line, that I could smell, taste and feel every captivating word. I especially liked, 'I, too, am a fisher of men.'<br /><br />Bravo!Jacqueline Howetthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13522485407848765933noreply@blogger.com