tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post4475069488808446424..comments2024-03-26T19:38:47.952-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Poor BettyFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-2247497036517536542022-06-06T17:53:57.124-04:002022-06-06T17:53:57.124-04:00"like a bumper sticker on a car made of wind&..."like a bumper sticker on a car made of wind" wow, great line, all these lines are good, but that one i really likephillip woodruff (jalopy dreams)https://www.blogger.com/profile/08224547506080365774noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-74565689528452669012022-06-02T04:53:25.712-04:002022-06-02T04:53:25.712-04:00This is incredible, Shay! The images you paint to...This is incredible, Shay! The images you paint to depict futility (or perhaps they're riddles I've yet to decipher) is like downing an exquisite shot of whisky. It was pure fire and you just want another shot. My favourite lines:<br /><br />"She built a doorway of hard-done-by and walked straight into it,<br />then said she'd been beaten by the future." - what an astounding first line! I want to read the novel about Betty with this first line. I imagine she finally gets something right in the end but the tragedy is she never gets to know about it.<br /><br />"a bumper sticker on a car made of wind"<br /><br />"Our Lady of the Tinkertoy Triptych"<br /><br /><3Sunra Rainzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16803999051382699986noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66397832028798501572022-05-31T10:31:17.327-04:002022-05-31T10:31:17.327-04:00Poor Betty indeed. Beaten by the future, and dead ...Poor Betty indeed. Beaten by the future, and dead dandelions in her smile. Vigorous and vivid imagery, as always Shay.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-19507944888050238722022-05-31T07:59:31.561-04:002022-05-31T07:59:31.561-04:00And its a holy shit from me too ... And its a holy shit from me too ... Marion Hortonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09928737422288639311noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-24137765839753948312022-05-30T12:20:50.334-04:002022-05-30T12:20:50.334-04:00The video is beyond awesome ... I saved it! And t...The video is beyond awesome ... I saved it! And the poem ???!!!! Holy shit is more than appropriate. I love where your mind/brain take you. (you are funny too)Helenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16619199535376925989noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-47644723549955773952022-05-30T11:57:05.796-04:002022-05-30T11:57:05.796-04:00Each word like a grenade, lobbed perfectly. A poem...Each word like a grenade, lobbed perfectly. A poem with verbiage so unexpected and incomparable that "holy sh*t" is the only appropriate response. Just fantastically good.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01926508656571639801noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-11535937681914955982022-05-30T10:52:51.328-04:002022-05-30T10:52:51.328-04:00I second the holy s#*t! These lines definitely del...I second the holy s#*t! These lines definitely deliver a sting! Profound and bitter truths many don't want to hear but need to!! Love this Shay and I am always delighted when you write a poem for the Muse!!Carrie Burtthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15016231028602947306noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-31550645532993812412022-05-30T10:37:08.500-04:002022-05-30T10:37:08.500-04:00Holy s*t! That is so, so good. Every line a hard s...Holy s*t! That is so, so good. Every line a hard slap. But the heart of it: "It's sad magic to watch a woman become an infant" Lord. And "bumper sticker on a car made of wind." Doesn't get any better than that. qbithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08373768695201177514noreply@blogger.com