tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post478540934606264502..comments2024-03-28T05:18:54.680-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): This Poem Is the War Bird, the Cat, and AshesFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger14125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-13901941387948701222014-07-22T10:50:27.508-04:002014-07-22T10:50:27.508-04:00Wow. I appreciate this poem all the more from read...Wow. I appreciate this poem all the more from reading Hannah's mini-challenge. OMG that's not easy to do! You did a great job with this and this line is such a powerful use of words:<br /><br />"This poem is ashes, flame's dark warmthless daughters."<br /><br />I loved the entire poem, but I could read this line again and again!Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-43010436563201516642014-07-21T17:11:48.437-04:002014-07-21T17:11:48.437-04:00I want that closing line for my very own.I want that closing line for my very own.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-52855388668155577832014-07-21T00:39:50.350-04:002014-07-21T00:39:50.350-04:00**See our favored girls, pampered and scornful,
sm...**See our favored girls, pampered and scornful,<br />smiling ice from rot-sweet teeth.**<br /><br />LOVE))!! xxmyinnerchick.comhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07523772091083412278noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-90232132580152308132014-07-20T23:44:20.647-04:002014-07-20T23:44:20.647-04:00Speechless! I knew you would rock the form..Speechless! I knew you would rock the form..Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-31101761307303423402014-07-20T23:33:32.306-04:002014-07-20T23:33:32.306-04:00totally blown away...totally blown away...Sumana Royhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17333363799083094084noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-81718681082359228672014-07-20T21:48:49.349-04:002014-07-20T21:48:49.349-04:00You nailed this form which I found very difficult!...You nailed this form which I found very difficult!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-53193638012990214172014-07-20T21:08:48.139-04:002014-07-20T21:08:48.139-04:00So much fun! This was a blast to readSo much fun! This was a blast to readAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05088944123595868347noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-65475987445756724902014-07-20T20:48:45.437-04:002014-07-20T20:48:45.437-04:00For me, your content feels multi-layered, rich and...For me, your content feels multi-layered, rich and balanced with meaning and imagery...skillfully expressed. <br /><br />It's interesting that this poetic style can take so many different shapes in the hands of each writer. I think, you show that the form can be followed quite loosely and still have a similar effect. <br /><br />Thanks for writing to my challenge, Shay. Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-83656511757880929362014-07-20T19:17:25.318-04:002014-07-20T19:17:25.318-04:00OH! MY! GOD! Shay wrote a boomerang metaphor poem....OH! MY! GOD! Shay wrote a boomerang metaphor poem. I read it with lascivious delight. Then thought to myself "now I will never be able to write another one." Holy crap, what a poem!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-10213237726640234952014-07-20T17:26:17.587-04:002014-07-20T17:26:17.587-04:00Ah! Heres a dark one... lovely use of form.. the p...Ah! Heres a dark one... lovely use of form.. the picture goes so well with it!!Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16765039970274452443noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-72839146599726059332014-07-20T16:38:25.564-04:002014-07-20T16:38:25.564-04:00Ambrosia Barkers!
I love playing in your mind
...Ambrosia Barkers!<br /><br />I love playing in your mind<br /><br /><br /><br /><br />ALOHA from Honolulu<br /><a href="http://comfortspiral.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">ComfortSpiral</a><br /> =^..^= <3Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-83460174124784913562014-07-20T12:40:22.162-04:002014-07-20T12:40:22.162-04:00This form or poetic approach seems ideal for your ...This form or poetic approach seems ideal for your style of writing. Great progression and excellent choice of visual and musical accompaniment.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-82002883021338912222014-07-20T12:06:24.992-04:002014-07-20T12:06:24.992-04:00This poem knocks me out (as most of your poems do)...This poem knocks me out (as most of your poems do). Too many lines to cut and paste in here, but one I especially like is "before we cored them and tore out their tongues."<br /><br />Wow.<br /><br />Drool. Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-39092667940482529752014-07-20T11:32:44.672-04:002014-07-20T11:32:44.672-04:00Just superb writing Shay. This form has not grabbe...Just superb writing Shay. This form has not grabbed me, but you do it proud--really, make it seem as if there is no form involved at all, which is the true test of a form poem. It is scathing, lyric, damning and no matter how much one wants to look away from the truth of it, its fingers hold one's head and make one watch. hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.com