tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post5383628618268069093..comments2024-03-28T09:11:04.513-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): Test For FreshnessFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger20125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-78048466693269843832012-05-31T18:22:17.970-04:002012-05-31T18:22:17.970-04:00hee-hee
♥hee-hee<br /><br />♥Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-35972166656061387702012-05-28T22:20:23.167-04:002012-05-28T22:20:23.167-04:00Pineapple has never been so satisfying!Pineapple has never been so satisfying!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-69308761660133481522012-05-28T20:09:19.047-04:002012-05-28T20:09:19.047-04:00I always wondered what happened to your mother, Sh...I always wondered what happened to your mother, Shay. I promise I won't tell! I don't want to be looking over my shoulder for deadly tropical fruits!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-57957584965847755872012-05-28T14:07:22.255-04:002012-05-28T14:07:22.255-04:00I love Hedgewitch's idea for the application o...I love Hedgewitch's idea for the application of the pineapple. Hee hee. You ALWAYS write something that is so entirely unexpected and original, I just marvel : how do you DO it? But dont tell, it is cool to keep that a mystery:)Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-45853986926205435842012-05-28T12:10:58.288-04:002012-05-28T12:10:58.288-04:00was it a pineapple from Hawaii?was it a pineapple from Hawaii?Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-68932602790584525302012-05-27T08:26:31.790-04:002012-05-27T08:26:31.790-04:00What a story ~ Love it ~What a story ~ Love it ~Scarlethttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03330793338813508704noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-13726282463432341632012-05-26T22:23:37.494-04:002012-05-26T22:23:37.494-04:00P.S. Your title is hilarious.
rosemarymint.wordpr...P.S. Your title is hilarious.<br /><br />rosemarymint.wordpress.com✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-65391619295940223942012-05-26T21:47:26.053-04:002012-05-26T21:47:26.053-04:00"And the blonde former classmate who had look..."And the blonde former classmate who had looked him up<br />After he'd appeared on a game show<br />As a lark" ... Ha! Yay for Facebook.<br /><br />"splay-legged and dead as a Thursday afternoon" ... Love this.<br /><br />"All Norma had ever done<br />Was to love her family<br />Within an inch of their lives,<br />Because there are neighbors, you know,<br />And standards to be kept,<br />And everything<br />Everything<br />Reflects back on her in the end" ... Great to know how this story ends. Ugh.<br /><br />"Asha The Quiet, Our Lady Of The Easy Startle" ... What a great line.<br /><br />"Indian had been a stray,<br />And he curled his life around Asha's" ... Love the sound of the words "Indian," "curled," and "Asha" in the same sentence. This pleases my ears.<br /><br />"When Asha the Quiet had picked up a pineapple by the leaves,<br />And swung it hell for Sunday smack into Norma's skull." ... I have had this fantasy.<br /><br />"And with such an expensive piece of fruit" ... Excellent closing line!<br /><br />rosemarymint.wordpress.com✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-78029037913319227312012-05-26T18:49:41.598-04:002012-05-26T18:49:41.598-04:00Ah...I can relate to the daughter...although I'...Ah...I can relate to the daughter...although I've never actually considered a pineapple a deadly weapon before. Very good Shay...I can picture this as a Cohen film!Mystic_Momhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00099062213372011260noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-64461660749656247692012-05-26T16:30:00.286-04:002012-05-26T16:30:00.286-04:00Beware of the pineapple and daughters who've h...Beware of the pineapple and daughters who've had enough of their mothers. Beautifully done, as usual, Shay.Ileanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11200869126695231050noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-38143749983318069432012-05-26T15:52:06.177-04:002012-05-26T15:52:06.177-04:00Oh my now pineapples will give me a fright..lol Gr...Oh my now pineapples will give me a fright..lol Great story!Susie Clevengerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09239990133754328967noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-70952825795734045662012-05-26T12:53:18.304-04:002012-05-26T12:53:18.304-04:00Hey, you should come write for us, here:
http://f...Hey, you should come write for us, here: <br />http://flashyfiction.blogspot.com/<br /><br />(A new prompt just about daily.) <br /><br />You've got Flashy down pat! :) <br /><br />deDe Jacksonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04798544585779003567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-57877321236065272682012-05-26T12:52:14.053-04:002012-05-26T12:52:14.053-04:00Oh, man! This is GREAT. This is a fantastic line: ...Oh, man! This is GREAT. This is a fantastic line: <br />"So how did she end up splay-legged and dead as a Thursday afternoon<br />on the checkered linoleum beside the bananas<br />@ 79 cents a pound?" <br /><br />And that ending! :) <br /><br />de jackson <br />www.whimsygizmo.wordpress.comDe Jacksonhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04798544585779003567noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-29290118929845039372012-05-26T12:18:40.813-04:002012-05-26T12:18:40.813-04:00Your opening about the cops being in the produce s...Your opening about the cops being in the produce section caught me! The story is a flash fiction narrative poem--horrible.lovely.true. Thank you!Susanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05723639294340760325noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-90914768614447648602012-05-26T11:33:00.077-04:002012-05-26T11:33:00.077-04:00greatness. i think we all possess the ability to s...greatness. i think we all possess the ability to snap if pushed hard enough. <br /><br />the pineapple was a nice weapon!TexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13641962051044162710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-55866798453765418002012-05-26T10:51:11.429-04:002012-05-26T10:51:11.429-04:00Intriguing and engaging piece... I'll never lo...Intriguing and engaging piece... I'll never look at pineapples the same way again. = )Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-2891606616038837452012-05-26T10:39:18.607-04:002012-05-26T10:39:18.607-04:00Hannah, I do write stories, though not frequently....Hannah, I do write stories, though not frequently. They can be found here:<br /><br />http://night-blooms.blogspot.com/Fireblossomhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16709105276623589572012-05-26T10:20:54.058-04:002012-05-26T10:20:54.058-04:00This is one of yours with the thin almost invisibl...This is one of yours with the thin almost invisible sideways knife, just slicing away under a sinisterly jolly exterior, like a heart surgeon in a clown uniform. A brilliant portrait of someone who should have had a pineapple applied not just to the head, but forcefully, where the sun doesn't shine. Really hits home in a nice prickly way.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-32405060829099349372012-05-26T10:19:08.409-04:002012-05-26T10:19:08.409-04:00Wow, rugged, Shay!!! I love it. You have an incred...Wow, rugged, Shay!!! I love it. You have an incredible story-telling quality to your work. I was drawn right into your story. I really love the loving description in this and the prophecy of the ending in it, too.<br /><br />"Indian had been a stray,<br />And he curled his life around Asha's<br />Like two castaways in a boat.<br />Each of them brought a gift of joy to the other,<br />And they would have cheerfully died for each other,<br />Had it ever come to that."<br /><br />Do you write short stories also? You should!! :)Hannahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10124956200834969600noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-34559737078106501332012-05-26T09:41:36.009-04:002012-05-26T09:41:36.009-04:00Bludgeoned by pineapple! Yeesh, Shay. It's not...Bludgeoned by pineapple! Yeesh, Shay. It's not altogether surprising that most murders occur within the family unit, and then society wonders why we can't love our neighbours, or the nation living on the next continent.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.com