tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post5660162983266952566..comments2024-03-29T03:09:23.361-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): forgive like godFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger13125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-49785337861847555302013-10-09T15:33:22.723-04:002013-10-09T15:33:22.723-04:00Okay, in my previous comment I mentioned how beaut...Okay, in my previous comment I mentioned how beautifully you write love poetry. Well, now I say you're also very good at revenge poetry. This one made me laugh loudly. I'm still laughing:~)Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-40878676648613971222013-10-07T12:28:18.542-04:002013-10-07T12:28:18.542-04:00i bet it does get messyi bet it does get messyDarylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-13140441130451576222013-10-06T20:39:24.552-04:002013-10-06T20:39:24.552-04:00see, with you, you draw an "X" in the ai...see, with you, you draw an "X" in the air and gently wave your pen and it lands square. you don't need a laser sight, anything so quaint and technical as a red dot. and your target? a red dot means instant end, a flooding red splotch, and they get out from what comes next. but your "X"? That's where fright burrows beneath the skin: because survival means more x's.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-67131330785129427302013-10-05T21:03:05.500-04:002013-10-05T21:03:05.500-04:00Love that ending!Love that ending!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66509444385388737632013-10-05T12:44:13.896-04:002013-10-05T12:44:13.896-04:00Your balance,choices, and uber-clarity conspire in...Your balance,choices, and uber-clarity conspire in this to beg a species of poetic perfection.....pleasing, <br /><br /><br />AlohaCloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-23042291666139121832013-10-05T12:42:57.637-04:002013-10-05T12:42:57.637-04:00Shay--
I lovedlovedloved your line break between ...Shay--<br /><br />I lovedlovedloved your line break between the third and fourth stanza.<br /><br />Brilliant.Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-68457256512629677692013-10-05T12:23:02.521-04:002013-10-05T12:23:02.521-04:00This is wicked cool!This is wicked cool!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-21398188645525636292013-10-05T12:05:35.402-04:002013-10-05T12:05:35.402-04:00The repetition and alliteration work really well i...The repetition and alliteration work really well in this--give a very restrained and almost formal feel to an emotional piece. I especially like the switch between conversational and biblical tones.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-14734748665242032013-10-05T11:50:23.607-04:002013-10-05T11:50:23.607-04:00I love the sassy "could get messy, Missy. Jus...I love the sassy "could get messy, Missy. Just you wait."Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-64152442721677200882013-10-05T11:19:26.120-04:002013-10-05T11:19:26.120-04:00beautiful, insightful poem. thank you so much for ...beautiful, insightful poem. thank you so much for sharing your wonderful thoughts.<br /><br />have a great weekend~ Betty Manousoshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08549686306725800208noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44197156201377463482013-10-05T10:24:44.543-04:002013-10-05T10:24:44.543-04:00Hard to forgive, but maybe ok if flood and plague ...Hard to forgive, but maybe ok if flood and plague get held back just in case, cause even god does that... love this sassily insightful take.Grandmother Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18169464484379536529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-30197929928006039192013-10-05T10:21:55.596-04:002013-10-05T10:21:55.596-04:00i like it.i like it.TexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13641962051044162710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-34931333253057383852013-10-05T09:08:36.863-04:002013-10-05T09:08:36.863-04:00Yeah. Forgiveness ain't easy. Still, we do our...Yeah. Forgiveness ain't easy. Still, we do our best to hold back. I think God hears you. She certainly speaks through you. Miss you, chica. Crazy busy.LaTonya Baldwinhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17837979981517423142noreply@blogger.com