tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post7483429783315782448..comments2024-03-29T03:09:23.361-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): The Submarine Edvard GroskFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16263526314416322972013-03-16T03:05:52.723-04:002013-03-16T03:05:52.723-04:00I love this story! Those old movies of WWII submar...I love this story! Those old movies of WWII submarines always thrilled and terrified me: I hate the claustrophobia of such tight containment so far from breathable elements! I also thought the title was excellent - named for the submarine rather than the main character. Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-83554709259090657412013-03-14T20:13:41.868-04:002013-03-14T20:13:41.868-04:00Hey girlie, I forgot to point out that "were ...Hey girlie, I forgot to point out that "were to were to" typo in your poem. I know you hate that.Alicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09212391351233448784noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-20709729989576783522013-03-14T00:26:38.162-04:002013-03-14T00:26:38.162-04:00Perhaps the submarine is even a metaphor for the d...Perhaps the submarine is even a metaphor for the depth and pressure of surviving/enduring the claustrophobia of life. She is his savior, distraction, guide, and friend (with "benefits," it sounds like).Alicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09212391351233448784noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-16763315599855935002013-03-14T00:23:37.472-04:002013-03-14T00:23:37.472-04:00"making extreme depth and enormous pressure s..."making extreme depth and enormous pressure survivable"<br /><br />"There is no official roster on which her name is recorded,<br />and yet, she is there"<br /><br />"mid-way between the sun and the Earth's fiery core"<br /><br />"If God were to were to pluck a burning star from the Pleiades ... and hold it in the darkness of His palm"<br /><br />the entirety of the last two stanzas<br /><br />Excellent, brilliant, impressive, inspiring work. I hope you're adding it to The List.Alicehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09212391351233448784noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63740176412932429742013-03-13T13:50:42.921-04:002013-03-13T13:50:42.921-04:00"she was a rider beneath her mother's rib..."she was a rider beneath her mother's ribs,<br />a miniature ship in dry dock,<br />until she came down the greased skids as a water baby,<br />meeting her natural element and taking to it thereafter"<br /><br />God, that is gorgeous!Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-39797908261855751832013-03-13T11:49:12.704-04:002013-03-13T11:49:12.704-04:00I liked:
"There are things she will do--
thi...I liked: <br />"There are things she will do--<br />things not just anyone can do,...<br /><br />There's something so devilish about those challenging words. <br /><br />I'm not a big fan of the idea of submarines, but Blonde Katy would definitely spice up the ride:~)Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-2398572555833410802013-03-12T17:53:34.102-04:002013-03-12T17:53:34.102-04:00Shay,
You travel to the wildest places and the w...Shay, <br /><br />You travel to the wildest places and the weirdest eras in your poetry.<br /><br />This was quite intriguing...Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-19504636393760342712013-03-12T14:45:02.778-04:002013-03-12T14:45:02.778-04:00i love this one, read several times because each t...i love this one, read several times because each time i find something new Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-39282841260602209002013-03-12T13:48:53.467-04:002013-03-12T13:48:53.467-04:00What a fantastic write. The last stanza is astound...What a fantastic write. The last stanza is astounding! Love the nautilous discovering its shell.Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-36307866199128330092013-03-12T13:25:50.601-04:002013-03-12T13:25:50.601-04:00No Fidelity bleatings from me!
Yes I'd kiss he...No Fidelity bleatings from me!<br />Yes I'd kiss her.<br />...Maybe some heavy petting.<br />Loved your Nordic musing!!G-Manhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14968807697181554781noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-83975749205290520892013-03-12T10:41:55.836-04:002013-03-12T10:41:55.836-04:00How do you come up with these visions? They lead u...How do you come up with these visions? They lead up to all sorts of previously unmentionable places, and aren't we glad?!Grandmother Maryhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18169464484379536529noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-45751165295471737902013-03-12T09:10:29.700-04:002013-03-12T09:10:29.700-04:00wow! this one was full of fabulous visions and wor...wow! this one was full of fabulous visions and wordsmithing! from the first line 'a tiny pocket of air and humanity'TexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13641962051044162710noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-63231116342399498172013-03-12T07:28:10.701-04:002013-03-12T07:28:10.701-04:00I think Blonde Katy is from Oslo's icy waters ...I think Blonde Katy is from Oslo's icy waters where she resided until I held her in my arms and her heart thaw'd. She lies there 'still'.Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10713672589582754484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-67539881706942461652013-03-12T07:10:38.996-04:002013-03-12T07:10:38.996-04:00Being stuck on a submarine is my idea of a nightma...Being stuck on a submarine is my idea of a nightmare! I hate being underwater and I hate enclosed spaces! I don't think even Blonde Katy could make me feel better under those circumstances!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-90553683052053219402013-03-11T23:08:53.150-04:002013-03-11T23:08:53.150-04:00One perfect spot of serenity in a tiny world surro...One perfect spot of serenity in a tiny world surrounded by the perfect terror. If it were me, I'd weep with joy in Blonde Katy's arms. <br /><br />Wonderful story!HermanTurniphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15448138758753193112noreply@blogger.com