tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post7780421754851752133..comments2024-03-28T09:11:04.513-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): tiger swallowtailFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger15125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-11155426865857249742012-05-19T12:41:53.524-04:002012-05-19T12:41:53.524-04:00There is not a damn thing that I can say that does...There is not a damn thing that I can say that does justice to how utterly perfect this is.Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-53209924054332719622012-05-18T23:38:40.201-04:002012-05-18T23:38:40.201-04:00This is dangerous love you're writing about; i...This is dangerous love you're writing about; it's the kind that inevitably breaks you into pieces. These are the lines that make this cauldron bubble:<br /><br />"I am the rippled, vintage glass pane in a window made love to by the weather"<br /><br />"a spray of spirit caught inside a potter's jar of flesh"<br /><br />"I published my love on the rain-side of silver maple leaves"<br /><br />"I would respect her view"<br /><br />rosemarymint.wordpress.com✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44677418108924595222012-05-18T22:17:03.722-04:002012-05-18T22:17:03.722-04:00I hope you don't end up with 3 twin comments ...I hope you don't end up with 3 twin comments from me but as I wrote before... This piece makes me want to stop making dinner and start writing poetry. No, stop writing and start having sex. No, not just sex but to fall in love and never eat again.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-78233260477491814782012-05-18T18:45:14.862-04:002012-05-18T18:45:14.862-04:00NO...NO...NO one can write love songs the way you ...NO...NO...NO one can write love songs the way you do, SP!<br /><br />your writing is the definition of perfection!<br /><br />♥Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-91442357539859809622012-05-18T17:47:31.767-04:002012-05-18T17:47:31.767-04:00Lines I really loved:
"convincing me utterly...Lines I really loved:<br /><br />"convincing me utterly<br />of your roadhouse infallibility,<br />and of my own divinity--"<br /><br />"or that Rock island Reds can rhumba"<br /><br />"I published my love on the rain-side<br />of silver maple leaves,"<br /><br />"or the aphasia your bare skin engenders in me,"<br /><br />"I am the rippled, vintage glass pane<br />in a window made love to by the weather;"<br /><br />Some writers take words and wrap themselves in them like satin sheets, and the sheets are oh so happy for that, as am I, since I love the result.<br /><br />Loved this and luv you, el Mosk<br />(the fatter, more Mexican version of the Fonz)Buddah Moskowitzhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/06839068145732552328noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-36036028088679472042012-05-18T10:18:07.107-04:002012-05-18T10:18:07.107-04:00'what you see is blessed' and then Willie ...'what you see is blessed' and then Willie AND EmmyLou .. is it hot it here?Darylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-24886364680545345382012-05-18T10:09:08.118-04:002012-05-18T10:09:08.118-04:00I think this may be the most beautiful thing I hav...I think this may be the most beautiful thing I have ever read:<br /><br /><br />Nonetheless,<br />I published my love on the rain-side<br />of silver maple leaves,<br />and should the caterpillar of the tiger swallowtail find it<br />and be pleased,<br />I would respect her view, whether her wings one day<br />be yellow, or a deep feminine blue.Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-31385125156926241532012-05-18T09:14:01.221-04:002012-05-18T09:14:01.221-04:00Love the last stanza. The intimate request that .....Love the last stanza. The intimate request that ...let me know you can see right through me, and that what you see is blessed. <br />This comes after the window glass pane has been made love to by the weather and you've asked to be called "mine".<br />A wish for both to become selfless and become each other in each other's embrace much like the caterpillar capturing itself as the tiger swallowtail.<br /><br />If I could, but just once, gently touch those beautiful gossamer wings of yours.Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10713672589582754484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-22505008614612972342012-05-18T07:31:42.470-04:002012-05-18T07:31:42.470-04:00"I published my love on the rain-side
of silv..."I published my love on the rain-side<br />of silver maple leaves," How DO you come up with lines like that?!! I want to live in your words, wear them, swim in them , breathe them. Yeah, I liked this poem. A lot.Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-15288386596980322702012-05-18T06:46:28.902-04:002012-05-18T06:46:28.902-04:00WTF? I could cut and paste all the lines that were...WTF? I could cut and paste all the lines that were breathtaking, but then it would be the whole poem pasted into this comment. Beautiful in an other-worldly way, with a bit of rawness at the end.<br /><br />I'm buying up ALL the Bolthouse Farms you-know-what-in your neighborhood to express my pissed-off envy ;)Sioux Roslawskihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17924021828536277618noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-67172885036753021902012-05-18T06:03:24.247-04:002012-05-18T06:03:24.247-04:00How could I express my reaction any better than he...How could I express my reaction any better than hedge or Sherry did? This is one of the most powerful love poems everever, one that should be read by many more than will ever know it exists...the fact that it won't be is one of its solemn beauties.<br /><br />"Fat chance" as a label just made me smile.Lydiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11135393270656573516noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-81085138879160617582012-05-18T04:03:17.657-04:002012-05-18T04:03:17.657-04:00OMG. Incomparable. I, too, loved the rain-side of ...OMG. Incomparable. I, too, loved the rain-side of silver maple leaves........and the caterpillar of the tiger swallowtail. How do you DO it? Never mind, even if you gave me all the words and instructions, I could still never write a poem like you!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-66928804876547518392012-05-17T23:10:43.746-04:002012-05-17T23:10:43.746-04:00Read this twice--I felt that first stanza make a l...Read this twice--I felt that first stanza make a little quiver in my bones--and each time it gets more beautiful, in an unreal way, like a dream one doesn't believe is really happening, because it's too good....then the last lines...*throws hands up* what can I say? I'm already bald, and the bar is just a nasty melted puddle out in the shed.hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-20509548960005490832012-05-17T22:43:58.497-04:002012-05-17T22:43:58.497-04:00chillZ!
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Comfort Spir...chillZ!<br /><br /><br />Friendly Aloha from Waikiki<br /><a href="http://comfortspiral.blogspot.com/" rel="nofollow">Comfort Spiral</a><br /> <br /> > < } } (°>Cloudiahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05853753108637831069noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-34033090471817541852012-05-17T22:40:39.207-04:002012-05-17T22:40:39.207-04:00loved this line: I published my love on the rain-s...loved this line: I published my love on the rain-side<br />of silver maple leavesTexWisGirlhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13641962051044162710noreply@blogger.com