tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post8744904675086091086..comments2024-03-29T03:09:23.361-04:00Comments on Shay's Word Garden (Poetry & Such Like): AphroditeFireblossomhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07040525704916368792noreply@blogger.comBlogger28125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-59191953723826960712012-04-24T14:56:14.048-04:002012-04-24T14:56:14.048-04:00"A little ashy bonfire of a girl" Ha! So..."A little ashy bonfire of a girl" Ha! So true, the contrasting ways in which we view ourselves, both as worthy and as crap.<br /><br />"Smooth and silly and flat on my back, Waiting to be carved" ... Stop spying on me.<br /><br />rosemarymint.wordpress.com✿https://www.blogger.com/profile/01044032159371976375noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-34887632998657539522012-02-08T09:14:29.947-05:002012-02-08T09:14:29.947-05:00fuck! fuck! fuck!
don't you EVER have an off ...fuck! fuck! fuck!<br /><br />don't you EVER have an off day?<br /><br />brilliant! stunning ending! Aph would be jealous of you if she was a poet. {so of course this mere mortal is... not enough to actually HURT you or anything...}<br /><br />...<br /><br />♥Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-89620855689794754752012-01-31T01:30:57.580-05:002012-01-31T01:30:57.580-05:00Not sure which I like to be least, "Why am I ...Not sure which I like to be least, "Why am I always the sunset, well-remembered, Aph?<br />And why never<br />The longed-for shore?" Love your weaving as always.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-18968183243586891412012-01-28T10:40:46.068-05:002012-01-28T10:40:46.068-05:00Told you guys not to concern yourselves, Shay'...Told you guys not to concern yourselves, Shay'd be back.<br /><br />Like always Shay, wonderfully stimulating piece.Marcoantonio Arellano (Nene)https://www.blogger.com/profile/10713672589582754484noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-47663806370096303432012-01-28T10:19:25.394-05:002012-01-28T10:19:25.394-05:00Beautiful and compelling. Love the line "a li...Beautiful and compelling. Love the line "a little ashy bonfire of a girl".Katerihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/05645403612156172760noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-49810519425743246972012-01-28T08:43:30.034-05:002012-01-28T08:43:30.034-05:00A conversation with no resolution...A conversation with no resolution...Jinksyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01686101468214361004noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-47603889388322747962012-01-28T01:38:58.834-05:002012-01-28T01:38:58.834-05:00"Why am I never the longed-for shore?" W..."Why am I never the longed-for shore?" What a great, great question. I love it.<br />KKay L. Davieshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/09966266404058177742noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-8378239223936256552012-01-28T00:31:38.094-05:002012-01-28T00:31:38.094-05:00love love love. Especially use of ashy bonfire o...love love love. Especially use of ashy bonfire of a girl. I like how you also have your narrator calling the goddess Aph, the way it implies familiarity, perhaps because she reminds the narrator of the "you" sparsely mentioned. <br /><br />Also<br /><br />"Why am I always the sunset, well-remembered, Aph?<br />And why never<br />The longed-for shore?"<br /><br />Are mighty fine ending lines. Damn, you answered the dialogue challenge with such an astounding growl, I almost want to growl along instead of writing my own piece. I am poem jealous here, sunshine. Viva laIsadora Gruyehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13036782300945079952noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-42565613940789225452012-01-27T21:18:15.744-05:002012-01-27T21:18:15.744-05:00Everything you write just blows my mind! Your cre...Everything you write just blows my mind! Your creativity, earthy, philosophical poetry is perfection.Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-45329171280841168752012-01-27T16:16:16.647-05:002012-01-27T16:16:16.647-05:00Shay...Whoa. This one pierces the heart.
I hope y...Shay...Whoa. This one pierces the heart.<br /><br />I hope you have a good weekend and may you be the "longed for shore" for someone special.Sarahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15995684156785464334noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-88441213505765304282012-01-27T15:49:18.610-05:002012-01-27T15:49:18.610-05:00In addition to what everyone else has already said...In addition to what everyone else has already said, especially the last lines, I love how you call a goddess by a nickname! Most people would be struck dumb but you call her "Aph!" Love it!Lolamousehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12508347229501155001noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-69234902234139402852012-01-27T14:41:43.562-05:002012-01-27T14:41:43.562-05:00Ohhh! That ending.Ohhh! That ending.Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13984802196897920610noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-80733287361181790232012-01-27T14:02:23.419-05:002012-01-27T14:02:23.419-05:00really a fabulous close on the end of this shay......really a fabulous close on the end of this shay...def evocative...appreciatedBrian Millerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00722940075884718007noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-36708036951541274992012-01-27T13:31:48.331-05:002012-01-27T13:31:48.331-05:00sunsets are embracing .. shores let life wash away...sunsets are embracing .. shores let life wash awayDarylhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08241795455748298624noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-44005093916124155512012-01-27T13:16:34.451-05:002012-01-27T13:16:34.451-05:00Well, that's a hair tearing ending! I used to...Well, that's a hair tearing ending! I used to have such pretty hair . . .Maude Lynnhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03669688074743095866noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-27624462864447650562012-01-27T12:32:23.319-05:002012-01-27T12:32:23.319-05:00Shay, this is brilliant. I can't think of anyt...Shay, this is brilliant. I can't think of anything better to say than what Kerry already has-- that every woman wonders if she isn't worth more than who she is on her back. Your words make me wonder... As if I am missing something...Hannah Pratthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03241656929267868673noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-87064563650435967942012-01-27T12:06:47.300-05:002012-01-27T12:06:47.300-05:00Definitely a telling conception of Aphrodite here,...Definitely a telling conception of Aphrodite here, more attune to accessories than matters of the heart or head.Semaphorehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/16945917520773585129noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-13555575512414413952012-01-27T11:51:51.163-05:002012-01-27T11:51:51.163-05:00what a question to ask of someone who has her (bea...what a question to ask of someone who has her (beautiful) back turned and doesn't listen or care. great ocean sigh!Marianhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/04030161532713347225noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-68574192949777070602012-01-27T11:12:01.410-05:002012-01-27T11:12:01.410-05:00Oh My Goddess, lovely beyond compare! Love the &qu...Oh My Goddess, lovely beyond compare! Love the "little ashy bonfire of a girl", the self-worth that ebbs and flows at the whim of another (universal problem we women have) and most especially the plaintive question at the end: "why am I always the sunset.......why never the longed-for shore?" OMG. I SO know that feeling, and that wondering. Story of my life. Fantastic writing!Sherry Blue Skyhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10769154286598233146noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-76002280178996148202012-01-27T10:46:42.309-05:002012-01-27T10:46:42.309-05:00That there should be two such questions for the va...That there should be two such questions for the vain goddess, these questions, with sea-foam answers...<br />The first is the eternal cry to be recognized and cherished by another and the last questions one's importance in an old love's heart - universal, and brutally sad.<br />Aren't women always wondering whether they are worth more than the fucking?Kerry O'Connorhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00720862912375945249noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-34968482709590938462012-01-27T10:43:50.203-05:002012-01-27T10:43:50.203-05:00You know how everything in this rings like a bell ...You know how everything in this rings like a bell for me, so I'm just going to quote--yes, the horrible mindless quote-back, but sometimes I can't help myself--my favorite lines: <br />"..How is it that the waves always come this way,<br />Wearing stones down to sand,<br />And yet.../I remain as dry as driftwood,<br />Smooth and silly and flat on my back,<br />Waiting to be carved?"<br /><br />and the end of course--that same old same old end. *pulls last hair out with tweezers*hedgewitchhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/13090696134322515899noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-46810093559404571302012-01-27T10:27:30.866-05:002012-01-27T10:27:30.866-05:00Liking this! Lovely imagination. Well done*
@iamb...Liking this! Lovely imagination. Well done* <br />@iamblogorattiBlogorattihttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12821621371176285384noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-31652115523107888112012-01-27T10:16:20.540-05:002012-01-27T10:16:20.540-05:00good onegood oneellen abbotthttps://www.blogger.com/profile/00535475792150335186noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-62951035702378408352012-01-27T10:13:27.504-05:002012-01-27T10:13:27.504-05:00I like how you showed the inner battle (from one e...I like how you showed the inner battle (from one extreme to the other) we fight about the poems we write... you lying like driftwood and the longing demonstrted in the final stanza- amazing.Laurie Kolphttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07494759781947881343noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3107838361391025851.post-1880338645768420042012-01-27T09:56:47.778-05:002012-01-27T09:56:47.778-05:00Wow, it pulled me in from the first line ... and t...Wow, it pulled me in from the first line ... and the last stanza was brilliant. Definitely a question many people ask....Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/10094116226854880072noreply@blogger.com