The Moon is sleeping
in a pool of rain water
dreaming of tides, solar winds,
and the last words you said last night, mi amada.
The crow wears his feathers
like an old man's overcoat
at a train station
in early December.
He wraps used alphabets
around the Moon in payment
for memories,
some false, some bittersweet.
The crow will stay
as long as the Moon does.
The Moon will stay
forever, but often hidden.
The rain water
comes alive at a touch,
receding even as it returns
in spite of itself or anything said last night, mi amada.
_______
For Sunday Muse #162
That's... stunning.
ReplyDeleteI knew it would be worth the wait my friend!! Oh how the last words do linger! You have given life to the power of memory and words. Every line made me hold still for the next but that last stanza is utter perfection! I love the Spanish touch you added in! Such a romantic language it is!! Sigh!.....
ReplyDeleteOn 4th and 5th reading: That might be one of your best ever. It's not the straight razor you so often use to cut snicker-snee. Instead, it pulls the reader in with lines that are so right, they reflect the world in moonlight on a rainy street puddle. I don't care how much you suffered in the birth, you need to bring these into the world.
ReplyDelete“snicker-snee” ... <3
DeleteIncredibly visual and full of wonderful movement ... love the old man's overcoat and the hidden moon.
ReplyDeleteOne of the identifying characteristics of great poetry is that it strikes home with no fanfare, just a bullet to the heart that instead of destroying, enriches. I love every line of this, especially the overcoat, and indeed all of the very Spanish feeling third and fourth stanzas, with their glimmering images. Fine writing.
ReplyDeleteOh. My. Goodness. Your opening stanza is stunning. The crow wearing his feathers like an old man's overcoat in December. Brilliant. Sigh. This is just gorgeous.
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I love this so much.
Do you really need me to tell you how well you executed that; stuck the landing? No, I didn't think so. But you did. You really did.
ReplyDeleteShay--I love the bookcase of the first and last stanza--the beauty of those two, and the repetition of "mi amada."
ReplyDeleteThe imagery in this is excellent. I can't quote stanzas because each is perfection.
ReplyDeleteOh my gosh, I love this poem from beginning to end. You make me feel this image.
ReplyDeleteI am late ro finish commenting here, and almost missed this. A great write, and thanks for Willie!!!
ReplyDeleteMoons and crows do have an affinity for each other. Witnesses to all, love and love lost... A poignant and beautiful poem, Shay.
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