Vase so shapely upon the shelf
holding so lightly within herself
the finest faces all gathered to her
which start to bore and bother and blur
until she meets the one who moves her,
beckoning her come quickly closer
to fall so hard and tumble o'er
to spread her shards upon the floor.
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for Dverse poetics--the proverbial. Mine is in the title.
the artwork is Flowers In A Basket 1910 by Seraphine de Senlis
I love how this lovely vase perfectly displays how love affects us. A gorgeous poem, full of beauty and the wisdom of experience. I so love it when you rhyme!!!
ReplyDeleteBeautifully written.
ReplyDeleteWow, I really enjoyed how you show the impacts of love. Sometimes, love has us learn the hardest lessons through experience. Indeed, the fool becomes wise. Eventually. :D
ReplyDeleteBeautifully penned.
I've had my time as "shards upon the floor"! Your poem is beautifully written.
ReplyDeleteThis sang beautifully! Nice combination of sounds from your words.
ReplyDeleteI like the idea of a person as a vessel that collects things into itself but is also fragile. I like the rhythm of your poem.
ReplyDeleteThat is just how it is.........the miracle is that sometimes the love is reciprocated. It must be glorious.
ReplyDeleteThere are days I like to sound all rough and tough, inside I am like the vase you describe. 'Until she meets the one who moves her' is exquisite.
ReplyDeleteOoh — interesting perspective regarding attraction. Can leave one in shards. Yeah, I can see it Shay!
ReplyDeleteFabulous musical workings here — what a beautiful vulnerable voice… WOW, Love it!🥰
DeleteI have just become smitten by Holly Cole! How fucking cool she is, and you are for being aware of her! Very hip! I now downloaded her “blame it on my youth” album! Sizzles so sweet soft and seductive, ooooh! Lwould like to be your friend Shay. You need to move to the Pac NW. 🙂✌🏼
ReplyDeleteI was visiting and reading poets. NowI am sidetracked falling in love with Holly — YOUR FAULT!
ReplyDeleteRob, I am very pleased to be blamed for that! Holly Cole is fantastic. Some favorites of mine besides this one are "Cry If You Want To", "Everything I Have Belongs To You", and "Take Me Home."
DeletePerfect cadence and rhyme encase the message like the soi-dissant vase does her trophies that don't seem dangerous at all until the shattering comes. A very effective exercise in metaphor, and a lovely tune to go with it.
ReplyDeleteI like this one. The word play is clever and effective.
ReplyDeleteFantastic poem Shay and I love the music you chose!
ReplyDeleteLove can break any ocean into pentameter.
ReplyDeleteYou create a wonderful image and metaphor here. That vase shattered but wiser. Your rhyme was so subtle that I didn't notice it at first.
ReplyDeleteGreat metaphor! So evocative with the fallen shards at the end!
ReplyDeleteAwesome.
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