Friday, November 29, 2013

lo tech

you smirked and whipped out the sun,
dangling from a chain like the celestial watchdog.

go ahead, try to hypnotize me with it.
try to blind me.
i will blink at the last possible moment.

your vision for us thus confounded,
and my own barely saved,
here we are--

two sundials telling time by shadows.
________

for G Man's Friday 55!

16 comments:

Sioux said...

Crapola. No reason for me to say, "Thanks, Shay, for taking one friggin' day off." Oh well.

The last stanza and the last stand-alone line--a perfect topper to a moving piece.

hedgewitch said...

You've done more here with 55 words than many could do with 55 pages. Blinded by science, baffled by booshwah, nonetheless, no one stays hypnotized forever. Love the striking introductory image, Shay.

G-Man said...

Damn FB....
You just keep coming up with this Jaw-Dropping imagery that is freaky fabulous.
Loved your Mesmerizing 55
Thanks for this masterpiece, I am truly blessed and honored by your support, please have a Kick Ass Week-End

Mama Zen said...

That closing line is perfect.

Lolamouse said...

Too much sun is as bad as not enough! Love the imagery in this, Shay.

And thanks for the "Gobbletov" wish!

manicddaily said...

Wonderfully taut and creative. k.

TexWisGirl said...

such talent...

TALON said...

Magical, Shay.

Other Mary said...

Wow - love this!

grapeling said...

that last line ~

Grandmother (Mary) said...

Sometimes love feel lie that...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Sigh. Too brilliant. You are hereby appointed Poet Laureate of the entire Blogosphere. We all surrender.

Helen said...

Sherry said it best .....

Cloudia said...

You are in your usual good form, Shay!



ALOHA from Honolulu
Comfort Spiral
=^..^= <3

Yvonne Osborne said...

I love lo tech. Sundials and the celestial watchdog. Happy Thanksgiving.

Daryl said...

something oddly romantic here ..