Wednesday, November 20, 2013

What the fox said

Rooster guarded his white brides;
strutted 'round the yard with pride.
Cockadoodle-doo, Rooster,
cockadoodle-doo.

Fox said, "Rooster, let me in.
Let Fox Confessor hear your sins.
Let me save your soul, Rooster,
let me save your soul."

Fox and bird went off alone.
Fox ate meat, spit out the bones.
"Never sin again, Rooster.
Now, where are those hens?"
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this was meant to be for Mama Zen's Words Count at Real Toads, but I blew the 43 word limit, ending up with 59. Even G Man would say I overdid it!

25 comments:

TexWisGirl said...

:)

Sumana Roy said...

the fox has a hearty meal...mine's fasting because of a miss......an enjoyable read. ... :)

Kerry O'Connor said...

Fox and bird went off alone.
Fox ate meat, spit out the bones.

Now there's a cautionary tale in a nutshell.

Mama Zen said...

I love it!

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Excellent fable, Mabel.

Helen said...

For sure ... these words need to be added to the lyrics of "What Does the Fox Say" and performed!
PG13 rated?

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Not one word could possibly be removed. This is a wry and well-told fable. Loved it. Love the photo too, so gorgeous.

manicddaily said...

Ah-- but he saved the soul perhaps -- for the last bite--

Very clever fable. k.

grapeling said...

delicious!

Margaret said...

Scrumptious poetic story telling! (and I actually sang your words to the tune of the song… it WORKS!)

Lolamouse said...

The hens wouldn't be as stupid as the rooster! Loved this!

myheartslovesongs.com said...

when the page came up, i thought the title was "WHAT THE FAX SAID"

...maybe i should just go back to bed.

it's 59 words of fun, SP!

Susie Clevenger said...

Love this!!

Marian said...

sly!

hedgewitch said...

Some sinners just can't be converted, no matter what they say.

Susan said...

Perfect in every way! Meter especially prances me along to its inevitable conclusion. The rooster should have known! Great allegory too.

Siggi in Downeast Maine said...

I like the way your post reads...
it has a nice rhythm to it and I don't know where you would chop a word or two. Thank you for sharing.
Peace
Siggi

Ella said...

Yes a very cautionary tale-you make me smile! Bravo for the truth~

HermanTurnip said...

Took me a second, then a sick grin crossed my face. Nice!!

humbird said...

Cool take on the prompt!

Kay L. Davies said...

Love the way you re-told the old fable, Shay.
K

Sam Edge said...

Fox ate meat and spit out bones - yup.

razzamadazzle said...

Cunning fox. Sadly, my rooster just disappeared from the coop last week. Pretty sure it wasn't a fox though.

G-Man said...

You overdid it....

Mimi Foxmorton said...

Late but sincere.......
the Fox approves! ;)