You can believe in me
When I say
That there's bound to be
A place so lovely
That even we
Can't mar it.
And my love,
In all of your enchanting
Recently repaired
Almost perfection, can't we
Enjoy the evening air
That even we
Can't ruin?
Every time that the planets
Align
In this certain way,
I find myself wanting to say
With only the slightest irony,
"Will you be mine?"
My nodding love,
We don't really need
The crutches that we
Allowed to become more important
than this feeling
That even we
Can't poison.
So, now that the planets
Have aligned
In our favor, this once darling,
I find myself wanting to say
In an only slightly disingenuous way,
"Will you be mine?"
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for Magaly's "Out Of Your Own Words" challenge at Real Toads. As per instructions, my 2012 poem "Sustenance" shares an opening line with this one.
"Crazy arms." What a perfect tag. :) Love the poem, love the song, love you. Keep 'em comin', hot stuff.
ReplyDelete(I especially like the repeated lines saying "that even we can't ..." screw up.)
Shay--Do you think you might be underestimating the human race?
ReplyDeleteI didn't think there was anything we were incapable of screwing up...
Sigh. I so love this!
ReplyDeleteA time so perfect that even we can't ruin it. I love the thoughts of that and that last, be mine. What a lovely poem about love.
ReplyDeleteI find myself wanting to say
ReplyDeleteIn an only slightly disingenuous way,
"Will you be mine?"..... love that and the song
The first stanza, especially the very end, made me grin from ear to ear. And the closing is a wonder. I so want to hear the subject's response.
ReplyDeleteWonderful, Shay! Your words of love took me back to memories of times I cherish.
ReplyDeleteIt's the fourth stanza that rocked my world. I'm still grinning!
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed everything about this unusual love poem, Shay. I especially liked:
ReplyDelete'...there's bound to be
A place so lovely
That even we
Can't mar it'
and
'...now that the planets
Have aligned
In our favor, this once darling'
I find myself wanting to say
In an only slightly disingenuous way,
"Will you be mine?"'
i believe that you have the power to bring the planets into alignment with the magic of your words.
ReplyDeletegreat song too!
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The flip and artful delivery of the question barely conceals the nakedness of the request. I'd say you nailed the challenge.
ReplyDeleteSigh... I love this poem.
ReplyDelete"...recently repaired almost perfection...". LOVE this line! The whole poem, actually, but this line is perfection!
ReplyDeleteOh gosh this is so incredibly beautiful!💖 Especially adore; "Every time that the planets align in this certain way, I find myself wanting to say with only the slightest irony,"Will you be mine?" ..*swoooon*💖
ReplyDeleteEvery now and then the vulnerable you comes out. She is beautiful, you know? la la mosk
ReplyDeleteYou're going to find this odd(or maybe not) but there's an old country song that says "Happiness is Lubbock, Texas/in my rearview mirror." I always thought it was an artful metaphor, and this poem reminds me of that ironic conclusion, even though the echoes of it are far more sophisticated, delicate, and haunting.It also reminds me that love is something we often seem to borrow, but never own.
ReplyDeletePerfectly lovely in every way....crazy arms and all. :-)
ReplyDeleteSo beautiful... The romance of imperfection finding that perfect moment even it can ruin gives me hope. :)
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