Sunday, August 13, 2017

Believe Me, Darling

The thing is,
You can believe in me
When I say
That there's bound to be
A place so lovely
That even we
Can't mar it.

And my love,
In all of your enchanting
Recently repaired
Almost perfection, can't we
Enjoy the evening air
That even we
Can't ruin?

Every time that the planets
Align
In this certain way,
I find myself wanting to say
With only the slightest irony,
"Will you be mine?"

My nodding love,
We don't really need
The crutches that we
Allowed to become more important 
than this feeling
That even we
Can't poison.

So, now that the planets
Have aligned
In our favor, this once darling,
I find myself wanting to say
In an only slightly disingenuous way,
"Will you be mine?"
______

for Magaly's "Out Of Your Own Words" challenge at Real Toads. As per instructions, my 2012 poem "Sustenance" shares an opening line with this one.

 

18 comments:

jade said...

"Crazy arms." What a perfect tag. :) Love the poem, love the song, love you. Keep 'em comin', hot stuff.

(I especially like the repeated lines saying "that even we can't ..." screw up.)

Sioux Roslawski said...

Shay--Do you think you might be underestimating the human race?

I didn't think there was anything we were incapable of screwing up...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Sigh. I so love this!

Toni Spencer said...

A time so perfect that even we can't ruin it. I love the thoughts of that and that last, be mine. What a lovely poem about love.

Debi Swim said...

I find myself wanting to say
In an only slightly disingenuous way,
"Will you be mine?"..... love that and the song

Magaly Guerrero said...

The first stanza, especially the very end, made me grin from ear to ear. And the closing is a wonder. I so want to hear the subject's response.

Sara McNulty said...

Wonderful, Shay! Your words of love took me back to memories of times I cherish.

Mama Zen said...

It's the fourth stanza that rocked my world. I'm still grinning!

Kim Russell said...

I enjoyed everything about this unusual love poem, Shay. I especially liked:
'...there's bound to be
A place so lovely
That even we
Can't mar it'
and
'...now that the planets
Have aligned
In our favor, this once darling'
I find myself wanting to say
In an only slightly disingenuous way,
"Will you be mine?"'

Dani H said...

i believe that you have the power to bring the planets into alignment with the magic of your words.

great song too!

Brendan MacOdrum said...

The flip and artful delivery of the question barely conceals the nakedness of the request. I'd say you nailed the challenge.

ayala said...

Sigh... I love this poem.

Sarah Russell said...

"...recently repaired almost perfection...". LOVE this line! The whole poem, actually, but this line is perfection!

Sanaa Rizvi said...

Oh gosh this is so incredibly beautiful!๐Ÿ’– Especially adore; "Every time that the planets align in this certain way, I find myself wanting to say with only the slightest irony,"Will you be mine?" ..*swoooon*๐Ÿ’–

Buddah Moskowitz said...

Every now and then the vulnerable you comes out. She is beautiful, you know? la la mosk

hedgewitch said...

You're going to find this odd(or maybe not) but there's an old country song that says "Happiness is Lubbock, Texas/in my rearview mirror." I always thought it was an artful metaphor, and this poem reminds me of that ironic conclusion, even though the echoes of it are far more sophisticated, delicate, and haunting.It also reminds me that love is something we often seem to borrow, but never own.

Carrie Van Horn said...

Perfectly lovely in every way....crazy arms and all. :-)

Susie Clevenger said...

So beautiful... The romance of imperfection finding that perfect moment even it can ruin gives me hope. :)