Anniversary.
Warm restaurant.
Such happiness.
She takes her hand.
Candles burn in bowls,
A baby grows in her womb.
"At last."
Smiles.
Tears.
Joy.
Good food.
Outside, leaves, concrete, a chill.
They kiss and hold hands.
Voices behind.
"Yo, what you need is a man."
Hospital.
Wife and baby gone.
Devastation.
Pain beyond bearing.
Anniversary.
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True story.
These 55 words really do tell an entire story. Sad to hear it's true. Very nice to visit a new blogger.
ReplyDeleteYep...Your writing is always POWERFUL!
ReplyDeleteWOW!!
Excellent 55 Shay...
Thanks for wilting to my wishes, I really appreciate it..
Have a Kick-Ass Week-End...G
powerfully done.
ReplyDeleteTo quote you: I don't know how you do it. I wouldn't know where to begin!
ReplyDeleteWonderful, magical use of those 55 .. as always you hit it spot on.
ReplyDeletethis is harsh. you've managed to convey so much in so few words.
ReplyDeleteHmmm You are good with words Woman Poet.. Devastating it is yes
ReplyDeleteGreat 55 (1st prize)
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Fantastic 55. Tells a horrible story so well.
ReplyDeleteMine is posted
HERE.
That is powerful, beautiful and sad...and silly me, I was thinking about doing a Friday 55 about piggies!
ReplyDeleteWow, this one really blew me away! My heart sunk at the end. Good job, amiguita!
ReplyDeleteMan, life is a bitch! But you say it sooo much better.
ReplyDeletePS I loved Rachel's Wedding. I'm the dad character:(
Very powerful use of 55 words.
ReplyDeleteBummer. Amazing how you incite such strong feelings with so few words. Words are powerful.
ReplyDeleteI have so much enjoyed taking part for the very first time. I will be contributing next Friday too. I find you via David, a great blogging friend too. How we all connect eh?
ReplyDeleteRight off to write a poem for another new project on Monday, subject My Home Town!
You've definitely mastered the flash fiction 55!
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