Friday, December 7, 2012

Xmas Wish

They came a long way
to bring that kid swag.
They pretended not to notice
the livestock
and the funky digs.

Natch, it did finally shake down
to wood, nails, and vinegar,
but still, he blew it off
cos they didn't know what they'd done.

Me neither.
Can't you forgive me?
_______

for Words Count with Mama Zen at Real Toads.

20 comments:

Sherry Blue Sky said...

A heart as big as yours must always be forgiven, Shay. Because it is True Blue. (pssst-watch for a package in the mail:))

Mama Zen said...

I love the tone of this. You always manage to say what no one else would even think of.

Poet Laundry said...

Your opening killed me. Dang clever piece.

Laurie Kolp said...

Powerful!

Susie Clevenger said...

I agree with Mama Zen, you say what no one else would think of and in some cases wouldn't be brave enough to say.

Margaret said...

Forgiven 100 times over! It's not about writing a letter to Santa, is it :)

Susan said...

Yes. May you receive everything on your lists--I suspect, though, that you have already been forgiven!

J Cosmo Newbery said...

Sure can.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I think MZ has summed it up in her comment. I'll just grit my teeth and try harder next time...

Loved it, every word and intonation.

Mary said...

I am sure you have been!!

Scott said...

I really like it. A certain simplicity,innocence,acceptance. Real and straight forward. Cuts to the heart of the matter. A reminder. Thanks.

hedgewitch said...

"Forgiveness is the answer to the child's dream of a miracle by which what is broken is made whole again, what is soiled is made clean again."
Dag Hammarskjold

Dag had it right, for a brooding Nordski. Some of us are not very good at it, are we? Still, we need to learn. An expressive short piece, and I agree with everything Scott says above.

Marian said...

of course.

Other Mary said...

Yes.
And this is the best thing I've read in a long time. Kudos.

Hannah said...

Stated well...in brevity and your unique style...nicely done, Shay.

Helen said...

Catblossom and Professor Whiskers a tad out of their element? ... no doubt as to the excellence of this Christmas wish.

nene said...

Always wise and tasty, mi amiga
Feliz Navidades!

Lolamouse said...

Beautifully done.

Ella said...

I love the truth in your form ;D

razzamadazzle said...

Mama Zen truly said it best. Amazing poem.