Friday, May 24, 2013

bordered by ice cream tiles

bordered by ice cream tiles,
i am a creature of smooth soap,
soft steam and honeyscent;

female in every summer-dark inch of me,
i loosen like curls from the clip,
or dreams from new sleep;

this is the only time my thoughts grow lazy,
beading on my skin and mind in languid language,
speaking your name

your name
your name
in a fine sensual hour of being yours,

even from here,
without reserve
and entirely.

__________

for Fireblossom Friday "Location, location, location!" Mine is claw footed.
 

25 comments:

TexWisGirl said...

beautiful.

hedgewitch said...

There's an almost edible quality about the descriptions in this, the ice cream tiles, the honey, something more substantial and nourishing than just words...as always you tap into the heart of emotion, and pour out its fullness without spilling or wasting a drop--just beautiful, Shay.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Oh so beautiful, and so enticing, it must provoke a response in the one so adored.

more coffee, please said...

Unbelievably good. Just perfect. I'm sure she is swooning, "even from here."

This is my very favorite line: "i loosen like curls from the clip" ... But I'm crazy about all of the first five. That repetition of "your name." Those final three lines. There's no way she could have a concern in the world after being affirmed like this. Just exquisite.

And like everyone always says, you make it look so easy to write like this! So smoothly. So dreamily. I'm super jealous. You're such an impressive writer and storyteller, day after day after day.

more coffee, please said...

"There's an almost edible quality about ... this" YES! That's right on.

Ella said...

A sensual journey-like a wondrous dream!

Kay L. Davies said...

"speaking your name
your name
your name"
...this gives me goosebumps, Shay. I love it.
K

Susie Clevenger said...

Ice cream tiles and sensual thoughts...sigh, it sounds heavenly.

Susan said...

I love this! Even the lines of your poem start tight and then loosen from beginning to end like the curls, the dreams and the thoughts.

Carol Steel said...

The lines "loosen like curls from the clip or dreams from new sleep" unfurl such rich imagery. The whole piece appeals to the senses and the "summer-dark inch of me" is luscious connotation. I enjoyed this.

aprille said...

Why is a free-standing bath so much more romantic than a built-in one?

Marian said...

yum, lovely.

Other Mary said...

Lovely and sensual...what a great location you chose.

Helen said...

Ice cream and chanting ... who could want for anything more?

Sioux said...

Shay--The 4th line is one of my favorites in this poem. And "ice cream tiles" brings about an instant image.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Oh, yes, I can relate to this 100% My bathroom is my most beloved place of respite and escape. I love this entire description from smooth soaps to uncurling from a day like hair unclipped.

Margaret said...

... Creativity oozes from your fingertips like .... I can never come up with a metaphor brilliant enough. They just flow upon your pages (screen). Just a soothing, loving, sensual read.

sharplittlepencil.com said...

Shay, another sensual winner! That phrase, "i loosen like curls from the clip, / or dreams from new sleep," I could see how you'd loosen tension in muscles and in mood.

The final reminder that this poem is written for a lover, well, hell's bells, girl, don't hold back. EVER!!! Love, Amy

Lydia said...

I was lulled into this dream state until I read your comment at the end about your post: "Mine is claw footed." It just cracked me up!

Mama Zen said...

This is so incredibly sensual. Whew!

Isadora Gruye said...

I hear you on the clawed foot tub issue. I have insisted on always renting a place with a big ole clawed footer...it's the only way to soak, IMO.

I liked the structure of this piece, in particular how the language and tone dissolve and relaxes as the poem progresses.

You last verse would be an excellent way to close a love letter which makes it a perfect ending!

KISLAYA GOPAL said...

A wonderful poem..:)

Loredana Donovan said...

Oh my goodness, how do you go from writing such dark poetry to this, full of light ... I love your versatility :)

Akila G said...

Romantically sensuous. I liked the way you explored to open up the thoughts

myheartslovesongs.com said...

{{{sigh}}}

LOVE your love poems, SP!