i am a creature of smooth soap,
soft steam and honeyscent;
female in every summer-dark inch of me,
i loosen like curls from the clip,
or dreams from new sleep;
this is the only time my thoughts grow lazy,
beading on my skin and mind in languid language,
speaking your name
your name
your name
in a fine sensual hour of being yours,
even from here,
without reserve
and entirely.
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for Fireblossom Friday "Location, location, location!" Mine is claw footed.
beautiful.
ReplyDeleteThere's an almost edible quality about the descriptions in this, the ice cream tiles, the honey, something more substantial and nourishing than just words...as always you tap into the heart of emotion, and pour out its fullness without spilling or wasting a drop--just beautiful, Shay.
ReplyDeleteOh so beautiful, and so enticing, it must provoke a response in the one so adored.
ReplyDeleteUnbelievably good. Just perfect. I'm sure she is swooning, "even from here."
ReplyDeleteThis is my very favorite line: "i loosen like curls from the clip" ... But I'm crazy about all of the first five. That repetition of "your name." Those final three lines. There's no way she could have a concern in the world after being affirmed like this. Just exquisite.
And like everyone always says, you make it look so easy to write like this! So smoothly. So dreamily. I'm super jealous. You're such an impressive writer and storyteller, day after day after day.
"There's an almost edible quality about ... this" YES! That's right on.
ReplyDeleteA sensual journey-like a wondrous dream!
ReplyDelete"speaking your name
ReplyDeleteyour name
your name"
...this gives me goosebumps, Shay. I love it.
K
Ice cream tiles and sensual thoughts...sigh, it sounds heavenly.
ReplyDeleteI love this! Even the lines of your poem start tight and then loosen from beginning to end like the curls, the dreams and the thoughts.
ReplyDeleteThe lines "loosen like curls from the clip or dreams from new sleep" unfurl such rich imagery. The whole piece appeals to the senses and the "summer-dark inch of me" is luscious connotation. I enjoyed this.
ReplyDeleteWhy is a free-standing bath so much more romantic than a built-in one?
ReplyDeleteyum, lovely.
ReplyDeleteLovely and sensual...what a great location you chose.
ReplyDeleteIce cream and chanting ... who could want for anything more?
ReplyDeleteShay--The 4th line is one of my favorites in this poem. And "ice cream tiles" brings about an instant image.
ReplyDeleteOh, yes, I can relate to this 100% My bathroom is my most beloved place of respite and escape. I love this entire description from smooth soaps to uncurling from a day like hair unclipped.
ReplyDelete... Creativity oozes from your fingertips like .... I can never come up with a metaphor brilliant enough. They just flow upon your pages (screen). Just a soothing, loving, sensual read.
ReplyDeleteShay, another sensual winner! That phrase, "i loosen like curls from the clip, / or dreams from new sleep," I could see how you'd loosen tension in muscles and in mood.
ReplyDeleteThe final reminder that this poem is written for a lover, well, hell's bells, girl, don't hold back. EVER!!! Love, Amy
I was lulled into this dream state until I read your comment at the end about your post: "Mine is claw footed." It just cracked me up!
ReplyDeleteThis is so incredibly sensual. Whew!
ReplyDeleteI hear you on the clawed foot tub issue. I have insisted on always renting a place with a big ole clawed footer...it's the only way to soak, IMO.
ReplyDeleteI liked the structure of this piece, in particular how the language and tone dissolve and relaxes as the poem progresses.
You last verse would be an excellent way to close a love letter which makes it a perfect ending!
A wonderful poem..:)
ReplyDeleteRomantically sensuous. I liked the way you explored to open up the thoughts
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ReplyDeleteLOVE your love poems, SP!
♥