Friday, May 31, 2013

Sugar

Tell me your name--
like something sweet on a spoon,
still on your lips,
offered,
irresistible.

Tell me your name--
like something lethal on a spoon,
hidden out of sight,
indistinguishable,
prettily white.

Come down the Tunnel of Love--
no purse.
no wrap.
close your eyes.
come barefoot,
expecting glory, as the boldest explorers do.
______

for Hannahballistic's "Hungry Eyes" challenge at Real Toads,

and G Man's Friday 55 !

image: the Tunnel of Love in Kleven, Ukraine

 

23 comments:

g-man said...

Barefoot...Tunnel of Love?
Yer killin me Shay!
You go right for my weakness .
Loved your multi prompt 55
You nailed both perfectly
Thanks for squeezing me in, I know Friday is a congested day, you Rock!!!!
Have a Kick Ass Week End

g-man said...

Hehehehehe .... Bingo!!!

Other Mary said...

There she goes...another great write.

Charleen said...

Sounds like the garden is courting the girl.

Linc said...

This is simultaneously sexy and creepy. Love it!

Daryl said...

oh my ...

Hannah said...

Oh, dear!!! You've colored me pink with this one!!

You should have seen the delight when I found that you were able to present that brief snippet from the video!! Love that shot and then the first two stanzas...I feel the crisp contrast between those...the implications of each, secretive...this sweet and lethal...so good!

Yes, and my smile grew...ol' nicknames that stick...it's fun!!

Thank you so much for writing, Shay, I enjoyed this!! :)

hedgewitch said...

Such a delicious first stanza, and like all rich and intoxicating things, the second shows its secret face, and the risk that is latent in indulging, but also the exhilaration, and the freedom. Just an excellent, crisp, perfectly worded piece, Shay. With a sweet aftertaste. (And I love the tags.)

Mama Zen said...

That closing stanza could not be more perfect!

razzamadazzle said...

This is beautiful!

Helen said...

There she goes ~~ again!!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Just gorgeous! I love your unique approach (an oblique approach) to the prompt - as always you focus on the character, and she lends credence to the setting.

Susie Clevenger said...

Such beautiful passion...again I am amazed at your writing and creativity.

Lolamouse said...

What an enticing offer! I love that song too, though I've never heard this version.

TALON said...

Barefoot - my favorite way of being. Loved this, Shay!

kaykuala said...

That's wonderful Shay! A refreshing twist to the image makes it realistically mysterious!

Hank

Margaret said...

Hmm. Those last two lines are quite the invitation and are the two opening ones! Can't decide which I like best. I think the next 21 places are going to be fun reading! Nicely done, Shay!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Cool and clever.

Joanna Jenkins said...

Wow, wow, wow.
Fantastic.
xo jj

Kay L. Davies said...

And you are among the boldest explorers, of that I can be sure.
K

gabrielle said...

Seductive, surreal and bien sur, barefoot!
Great cover of the song.

Vanessa V Kilmer said...

Sexy.

Flash 55 - prick lee

myheartslovesongs.com said...

LOVE that last line!!!

i've never been in a tunnel of love~

they seem too claustrophobic and dark and scary and.....

no, i am NOT neurotic!