even though I tried everything I could think of to kill it.
From the frictionless round of me,
came the product of your asphyxiating embrace.
Behold, serpent, your son
with the doublesharp smile.
Is your surprise because you see him coiled, ready to strike,
or because he has your eyes?
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55 words for the G Man.
Ooooooh FB.
ReplyDeleteThis was co sinister
Yet Hot
You are the Queen of descriptive writing at ANY word count
Loved your Striking 55
I'm so tickled whenever you play
Thank You so much Shay
You da Bomb!
Have a Kick Ass Week End
Hehehehehe .....Jenga!!!!!
ReplyDeleteoo there is a nice darkness to this....we reap what we sow..and sometimes that offspring is not happy...just like our own hearts...
ReplyDeleteShay--This is cold to the bone. Brilliant, as usual.
ReplyDeleteits a bit chilly in here
ReplyDeleteooh! there's that venom i mentioned the other day! :)
ReplyDelete...yikes. And obviously her heart! This is chillingly disturbing.
ReplyDeleteDouble sharp smile. Hmmm.
ReplyDeleteJust totally hissingly excellent,Shay, and every word is a hook, barbed and sharp. Just reading the first couplet made my day, but the second put it over the top.
ReplyDeleteI'm thinking of just tattooing my head--wigs are so hot...
PS Great accompanying tune!
ReplyDeleteNice. A very striking poem.
ReplyDeleteFlash 55 - Revenge by Chance
Whoa, this is cool!
ReplyDeleteWay over the edge, edgy too.
ReplyDeleteOh, what a dark, delish write.
ReplyDeleteI'm scared!
ReplyDeleteOooh! Scary and scaly and comes with fangs. I like!
ReplyDeleteWowzers! the closing lines cut to the chase.
ReplyDeleteOhhhh! Super duper creepy...and I loved it!
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