Wednesday, July 3, 2013

The Vacation Of You

You came north. 

I took you more northerly still,
my arms around you green
as the hearts of young trees.

The lake gave us all it had--
shells, glass, smooth stones,
and pretty foam laid at our feet.

My dark-haired, dark-eyed stormy baby,
see me orange and black, a monarch girl
in love with you, transformed.
______

To STWIASD from your Michigan girl.

57 words for Mama Zen's Words Count Challenge.

image of Janine Mizera titled Emotions III Retouch is by Catliv and can be found HERE

25 comments:

Kerry O'Connor said...

Green hearts of trees, smooth foam.. so many beautiful images combine to produce this 'feeling' poem.

Grandmother said...

There's much to love in this poem- arms as green as young trees, pretty foam laid at our feet- but my favorite is the image of you as a monarch, transformed by love. Pitch perfect.

Lolamouse said...

I love the image of "a monarch girl!" This poem is chock full of beautiful imagery.

Helen said...

.. 'pretty foam laid at our feet' ~ pretty maidens all in a row. Lovely poem, Shay.

Susan said...

Looks to be an extraordinary vacation!

Hannah said...

Oh, total abandonment in the arms of love...Shay...*sigh* this is so beautiful and I'm a sucker for mention of, "orange and black, a monarch girl in love..." just delicious, truly. ♥

L. Edgar Otto said...

Amazing their migration, the sea of them... their short lives in the sun or long lives to make the journey. Why wouldn't she make pilgrimage to such a northern star?

Sioux said...

Holy crapola! 57 words? I can't even get close to that good with 570 words.

TexWisGirl said...

big sigh... lovely.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Glorious and perfect.

Cloudia said...

Monarch Girl - Harley colors too.....


Ride!


Aloha

Gemma Wiseman said...

A sense of swoon and dream all romancing reality! Very beautiful!

sharplittlepencil.com said...

"More northerly still," ahhh, there is an image, the heights of pleasure. This is a sensual feast, Shay. I love your approach to women loving women... it simply abides. A wonderful quality in your writing. And the monarch shedding its cocoon was great, too. Peace, hon. Amy

K9friend said...

There's no doubt you have a way with words, Shay.

Pat
Critter Alley

Patricia A. McGoldrick said...

Great use of colours! I especially liked the orange for the monarch!

Lynn said...

That must be hard - sticking to 57 words like that. Beautiful.

Susie Clevenger said...

Beautifully sensual...quite a vacation.

TALON said...

Shay, next week I'm heading north and I can't wait...not many places where there is still and calm left. This was beautiful.

grapeling said...

swooningly brilliant... true love points true north...

Mama Zen said...

Every word of this is perfect.

LaTonya Baldwin said...

Fantastic! Love the use of color here.

And I'm a Detroit, baby. Lots of stories and friends, up North. Take me with you.

Marian said...

pretty! i just watched a handful of movies with southwest/desert locales and this is like fresh air.

Other Mary said...

What a fresh description...love your images Shay.

Maggie Grace said...

Feel like this is a beautiful love story!

hedgewitch said...

How dast you write stuff like this when I'm unconscious??? You do short poetry so many different ways, Shay. I like this way, simple and sweet, very much.