Thursday, February 17, 2011

Scorpion

if a scorpion
wraps herself around your heart,
don't
don't look
don't look at anybody else.

if a scorpion
curls her tail around your heart,
don't
don't love
don't love anybody else.

if a scorpion
has wrapped herself around your heart,
love
love like it
love like it's the last day you will see--
that's all
that's all that there may be--
love dangerous love
now that you've found it;
lucky heart
with the scorpion's tail wrapped 'round it.
_______

17 comments:

blogoratti said...

The first two lines...and the last two lines-kind of blends together. Interesting read...

Kay said...

I think that could be said of every woman... :)

Daryl said...

Nice vibe rhythm .. I have been missing you (and the rest of blogland) but I am catching up now that things are less nutzy

Jannie Funster said...

I had a scorpion on me once and it was NOT fun. Now I carry a can of scorpaway everywhere.

xoxo

TALON said...

It reads as a song, Shay. Seems that this love might be fatal...

Sherry Blue Sky said...

I love the way the lines move from shorter to an accelerated sense of urgency. But I am not brave: no scorpions around my heart - way too scary! Great writing, as always.

Kim Nelson said...

I particularly like the repetition with growth and added detail. I always learn from your work, Shay. Thank you for that.

hedgewitch said...

I like the repetition, the sense of the words coiling like the scorpion's tale, like the tension and the pain and the emotion, strained down into the minimalist song-lyric-/chant-like lines.

That little chickie is smokin on teh gi-tar, too.

Old Ollie said...

Makes sense...right? So cool - you got style FB.

Lulú said...

reckless, non-safe, dangerous love...it's the best!

Neva Flores said...

Excellent write, sounds like a wicked love to me!

RachelW said...

I like this. I've had a scorpion around my heart lately.

Everyday Goddess said...

Surrender to love even when it's dangerous, very thrilling.

The guitarist is very good!

Mama Zen said...

Damn, that little girl is good!

I really like the repetition, too.

Cloudia said...

if......

Cloudia said...

Worth jumping over to firefox to see the video (why is chrome not liking flash now? oh well...)

Ami Mattison said...

I'm diggin' the repetition of this, Shay. Speaks the kind of careful way in which one would be around a scorpion as well as the heart's pain and constriction of one's breath when held tight like that. Really great write!