Monday, June 13, 2011

Raining Up

It rained up,
Everything launching into the sky--
Leaving the earth a featureless desert much like your heart.

And the one
you were convinced
I loved better than you?

I love her better than you.

She makes everything weightless,
Fantastic;
It rains up.

Hell yeah.
_________

16 comments:

hedgewitch said...

Cold, my dear, the first stanza, but I have a feeling, completely just. And nothing is more fun than being weightless--as long as you don't have to be an astronaut and eat weird food through a straw to do it. Loved it.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Once again, you astound. You are amazing like that!

Brian Miller said...

well...note to self...never piss off shay...although flying or floating up would be so cool...

Sioux said...

This is such a lovely, butterflies-and-rainbows type of love poem...kind of like the Police's "Every Breath You Take" (which idiotic people used to think WAS a love song).

Revenge is best served cold. Who said that? This wasn't cold, it was arctic! But I'm with Hedgewitch; your icy attitude was probably well-provoked.

ami de manila said...

That's quite an experience. What a feeling.

HermanTurnip said...

I've thrown up, been washed up, gave up, loosened up, shut up and even ground up...but I've yet to see it rain up. That, I would think, would be amazing to see...

Caty said...

Hey Shay-Stopped in for a visit. You're writing is still terrific; glad I stopped by to read some!!

Shadow said...

the heart always knows, no matter what the head is trying to tell us...

Lynn said...

Raining up - that's cool, Shay.

ellen abbott said...

of course you love her better. who would want to love a featureless desert heart?

Helen said...

... and I say WHEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!

Daryl said...

Yup, I got someone who does that too..

blueoran said...

Sometimes, a single phrase -- "It rained up" -- says everything a poem can about passion, about love. I'm gonna start walking on my umbrella. - Brendan

~ Tabitha ~ said...

Cha...that was great !

Mama Zen said...

So there!

Lolamouse said...

If it rains up, do I point my umbrella down?