Saturday, March 17, 2012

2 pretty girls

2 pretty girls
lifted morning's veil,
walking where they hadn't ought to go--

down by the fence line
called The Devil's Tail,
just one come back, but she don't talk no more.
_____

picture by Shanyn Silinski for Real Toads.

25 comments:

Brian Miller said...

wow now that begs a story...

Lynn said...

That just summons up all sorts of imaginings.

Mary said...

Yikes! Eerie, leaves so much to the imagination; and I don't want to go there....

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Whoa! You can tell a story, kiddo, in very few words. I especially loved "lifted morning's veil"......

Lolamouse said...

This conjures up all kinds of thoughts, none of them good. (Shiver)

hedgewitch said...

Like my incubus always says--never turn your back on The Tail. I believe that's one walk I'll skip.

Mama Zen said...

More, more!

Herotomost said...

When they beg for more, you have definitely done your job. This is craaaazzzyyyy cool. I love it, I want to have ten thousand of its babies. Carry on.

Laurie Kolp said...

Tell me more, tell me more!

Mary Mansfield said...

Love, love, love!!! The story between the lines of this poem sends shivers up my spine.

myheartslovesongs said...

ooooooh! you could expand on the fairy tale behind this for dVerse Poetics Saturday prompt!

even if you leave it just as it is, this is brilliant!

"Walking where they hadn't ought to go--"

LOVE it!

darkangelwrites said...

Maybe because its St. Patty's day, I can see an old timer nodding towards a mysterious woman in the corner of the pub. He leans over his pint and whispers these lines to a wide eyed tourist.

Susie Clevenger said...

Yes, I can see a story in this one. That is what is great about this piece...it leaves you with questions for your imagination to answer and begs to ask for more

Kerry O'Connor said...

Haha! Laughing at Corey's comment! But I know what he means.. you have tantalized us with these lines: an entire story is suggested and left to our imaginations to complete. What was lurking in the woods?

Zoe said...

Oh... that chills and intrigues all at once! Very nicely done.

Hannah Stephenson said...

Oooh.....good stuff. Page 1 of a big book....

Mystic_Mom said...

So cool...and Devil's Tail fits that line of fence perfectly, it gave me a little nip yesterday that bled like crazy! My war painted leg and your poem seem to have a connection! Great write!

Margaret said...

This grabs hold from the first line and kept me dangling long after one I read it! This writing fits the photo like a glove - just perfect!

Marian said...

you know, Matthew Shepard was the first image i saw when i looked at Shanyn's gorgeous photo. but then i went in another direction. i'm glad you went this way and like that you haven't explained a thing.

Shawna said...

He does have an appetite for pretty girls.

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Kay L. Davies said...

Oooh, Shay, a mystery, or a horror. Scary. So much implied when so little is actually said here. Very well done.
K

Heaven said...

What indeed happened...do tell us a tale ~

Happy Sunday ~

Daryl Edelstein said...

A tasty tease, that

TALON said...

What a perfect mystery you wove, Shay. It's so hard to resist walking where you hadn't ought to.

vivinfrance said...

A wonderful story poem, leaves us wanting more.