Set a lemon on the window sill--
I will come with the April freeze.
I loved a man like you, once.
He was a hack, like you.
He was carob when I wanted chocolate.
Did I say I loved him?
I tend to lie.
Never mind me, I am just a shadow-girl,
Like the violet growing in the green pot your mother gave you.
Your mother and I, we wear the same root
Crushed, in vials, around our necks.
When we speak,
We disturb you, I can tell;
And yet, we never run out of chatter.
Here is an almond--
Ask it anything.
Every specter was beautiful once;
And every beauty will writhe with worms, given time.
It isn't what you wanted to hear, I know.
Forgive me--
I can be soft.
I can be yielding.
I can be kind...
Just not tonight,
And not for you.
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for Monday Melting #10, which required me to use the following words: almond, root, fire, carob, hack, lemon, specter, violet, writhe, and disturb. (And I just noticed that I edited out the line that had "fire" in it Oh well, I'm not sticking it back in now.)
Ha! It says you posted this 57 seconds ago - that is what you call a First Responder...hee hee. I love this so much. Love the bite, and especially love the last two lines.......Also the carob when you wanted chocolate. Oh yeah. Been there!
ReplyDeleteAs always, this is totally your own, no matter how many words you may have shared with the list. It has a twisty kind of gris-gris going on, and I have to say, the first stanza has quite a bite, but the rest is just as fierce. I have a preference though for the Marie Laveau-ish middle stanza, and the shadow-girl.
ReplyDeleteYay! I'm so glad you came out to play. I have several favorite lines here:
ReplyDelete"Never mind me, I am just a shadow-girl"
"Your mother and I, we wear the same root
Crushed, in vials, around our necks.
When we speak,
We disturb you, I can tell"
"every beauty will writhe with worms, given time"
"Forgive me--
I can be soft."
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Very nice!
ReplyDeleteAmazing. That was a damn tough word list and you owned it.
ReplyDeleteevery beauty will writhe with worms, given time
ReplyDeleteaint that the truth....
strong voice and i particularly like the last two lines...
Just letting it flow? Insightful, creepy, and disturbing...man, I wish I had your mind!
ReplyDeleteShay love, I just gave you a shout-out in this post:
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So come comment. :)
Now I'm cravin' me some chocolate and ALL I have in this house is CAROB!
ReplyDeleteDespite the inclusion of pre-chosen words, this poem is all Fireblossom! Your use of the vocab is highly original.
ReplyDeleteWow - impressive use of those words, FB!
ReplyDeleteSpiteful and delightful, this is pure fun to read. I have pity on the person this was said to: on the one hand, your indictment is precise, surgical and cuts straight through the bullshit (He was a hack, like you), but on the other hand, how do you leave someone who cuts you down so artfully. I'd only be able to last a few years. Great job.
ReplyDeleteI bet that almond would be just as accurate at the weather as our local guy is ... I like this a lot, I felt as if I was shadow-girl
ReplyDeleteWhoa Nelly! The ending reads TOUGH.
ReplyDeleteI liked these lines...
"Every specter was beautiful once;
And every beauty will writhe with worms, given time." C'est la vie!
I hope you having a good week FB:~)
"And every beauty will writhe with worms, given time," I'm off to buy chickens and buy myself some time.
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