Saturday, July 7, 2012

Dispensation

There is a line of demarcation
Between dawn and regret for the night;
There is a point of fascination
Where the black lace touches the white.

Tell me no, and I will go
Deep in the brambles, bleeding;
Tell me yes, you love me best
And I'll be your saint interceding.

_______

for A Word With Laurie at Real Toads

both pictures from weheartit.com 

13 comments:

Sioux said...

There is a sweetness here, but something sharper underneath.

And this, without Bolthouse? ;)

rosemary mint said...

"There is a point of fascination
Where the black lace touches the white" ... Sheesh. No kidding.

"Tell me no, and I will go
Deep in the brambles, bleeding" ... Beautiful and sad.

And what if I tell you no but mean yes? What will you do then? (Shhh. Don't tell me now; save your answer for your next poem.)

;)

ellen abbott said...

I like this one.

hedgewitch said...

I always love it when you work with rhyme, because you never let it even begin to feel forced or obvious, and here is no exception--simple, elegiac almost, fragile-feeling statements that are knotted indivisibly together like lace neither black nor white--maybe ecru, the color of the flesh that longs and suffers and rejoices.

Mad Kane said...

Very lovely verse!
Madeleine Begun Kane

Mama Zen said...

This is perfection.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I echo Mama Zen. Each stanza is a beautiful little creation, and I like the contrast between them. I smiled to noted the heightened effect of the rhyme - made everything so crisp.

Margaret said...

You are as powerful with simplicity as you are with verbosity (is that a word?) This just made me sigh with the pure genius of your words... (and I love that little top! :)

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Beautiful. Sigh.

Heaven said...

Love the contrasts of emotions and colors in each stanza ~

HermanTurnip said...

For such a simple format, this piece rolls so nicely off the tongue. Added to my short list of favorites by you. *Applause!*

Lolamouse said...

Short, sweet, and a touch sad. I love it. (I like your new Emmylou photo better-looks more natural!)

LL Cool Joe said...

It's very touching. :) The black lace touching the white seems to sum up life.