Saturday, March 23, 2013

Finishing School

Like a waitress holding the house specialty high,
I presented my heart,
sheathed in propriety,
nestled on a thorn bush bed.

Sleep, little angel, you could have said.
Sleep like the dead.

Instead, you put me on a chain
and suspended it above my head in one of your extra rooms.
Soon, I was snapping at everything,
pacing a groove in the floor,
and my coat grew shiny and thick, begging touch and praise.

Hungry teeth bite bigger than a lazy tongue,
that's what you told me, and it was the last thing you said to me for a month.
Step right, 
step left,
now down on one knee;
back up, head high-- 
I was taut and ready enough to make the rain come,
before you were satisfied with me.

By the time I had my heart back,
I was as jealous as the Moon, 
and as dangerous as a deferred desire.
When you jerk the lead, I sit at your feet like a perfect lady,
but lately, I forget my manners
when I'm with anybody but you.
_________

feelin' a little wild for the mini challenge at Real Toads.

33 comments:

Lolamouse said...

Wild Thing, I think I love you!

TexWisGirl said...

wow! loved this line: as dangerous as a deferred desire

hedgewitch said...

Just packed with dangerously explosive concepts and lines that carve a scrimshaw lesson on the bones...I really like the image of being dangled like a chandelier, morphing into a leashed beast, half-trained,but not really tamed, just pretending--and the opening stanza is such a deceptively smooth lead-in that the poem's uncoiling strikes like a snake. (And who could top Lolamouse's comment?) Fine, caustic work here, Shay.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Lolamouse's comment is Perfect! I so enjoyed this, Shay, am sitting here grinning like a fool. Oh, the poor critter snapped on a leash....."as dangerous as a deferred desire". How do you DO it? Loved it.

Anunoy Samanta said...

Awww I can sense the devil... I love gray tones :)

lapis said...

The scariest part is your first tag. Unleashed with sharpened teeth and in need of a gnawing bone.

This is gritty, raw deliciousness that makes me want a dog.

Stanza 4 has me slobbering like a canine. Dangerous as a deferred desire. That is some delectable alliteration.

"When you jerk the lead, I sit at your feet like a perfect lady" - My favorite line.

Gemma Wiseman said...

Sizzling with gnashing teeth, waiting for opportunities and even thinking of creating one or two! A werewolf and an Amazon cross, waiting for the curtains to open! Delicious sound effects create an ominous drumming rhythm in these wonderful images!

Kerry O'Connor said...

There are wild women, and then there are catlick girls on the loose. No one grasps the fierce nature of the feminine quite as well as you do, Shay.

Cloudia said...

Dangerous heat



ALOHA from Honolulu
Comfort Spiral
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Faycin A Croud said...

Sounds like a love gone wrong, been treated bad, finally breaking loose. Been there, done that.

Heaven said...

You got the wild heart ~

Sioux said...

Dark...but delicious, Shay.

Truedessa said...

Enjoyed this one a dangerous heart indeed.

Susan said...

First round I ached for the abuse, no matter how s/m sensual. Second round I basked in your original images--no one else could invent them (or even record them so artistically). I remember that the abused often turn and abuse in return and often call it keenly-tuned sensitivities. I am not convinced its a higher order of things. The poem, though, is hot and dregs up memories.

Mama Zen said...

This bristles and bares its teeth! Love it!

Ella said...

I love the passion in your poem~
These lines resonated with me:

"I was as jealous as the Moon,
and as dangerous as a deferred desire.
When you jerk the lead, I sit at your feet like a perfect lady,
but lately, I forget my manners
when I'm with anybody but you."

kaykuala said...

and my coat grew shiny and thick, begging touch and praise.
Hungry teeth bite bigger than a lazy tongue,

Some testing relationship this. Like the aggressive stance as a challenge. Nicely!

Hank

Mr Puddy said...

It's wicked ! She sound like a grumpy doggie to me !!!

sharplittlepencil.com said...

Shay, this is a wickedly fine piece of poetry. I love your sense of play and the way you wield your "leash" in this! You Wild Thing, you!! Love, Amy

Helen said...

You are wild ... crazy, wonderful wild. Petting your coat? Would be a privilege!

Lynn said...

Wonderful wildness!

Grandmother said...

When you say you're taut and ready enough to make the rain come, I believe you.

Kim Nelson said...

Sheathed in propriety. Right there I knew you were about to unleash the Fireblossom beast. And you did so with the power of the rapture. "Fearce" Mis-spelling intended.

Kay L. Davies said...

Whoa, doggie! When you ace a prompt, you go all out, don't you, girl? I have to dig 'way back in the recesses of my memory to relate to these feelings. Then the digging leaves me both exhausted and breathless.
K
(PS, I agree with Kim. When you use words like "propriety" we can guess the wild woman is going to come out to play.)

HermanTurnip said...

"but lately, I forget my manners
when I'm with anybody but you."

That's awesome! So much power at the end of a chain. So much emotion bouncing around inside a tough exterior.

Hannah said...

The extended metaphor works well for this and I enjoy the dark tone especially this section:

"pacing a groove in the floor,
and my coat grew shiny and thick, begging touch and praise."

Extremely visual piece...love it! :)

Poet Laundry said...

Ouch. This one bleeds. 'Soon, I was snapping at everything,
pacing a groove in the floor,
and my coat grew shiny and thick, begging touch and praise.' That is so perfect. Definitely a school to play hooky from. Go wild!

rashmi menon said...

wow, wild, wild woman! the whole poem's a beauty but i'm especially drawn to the last stanza and the last line. ooh, sizzling poem this!

Daryl said...

watch out ... hot stuff ...

K9friend said...

I was as jealous as the Moon
and as dangerous as a deferred desire...wow!

Pat
Critter Alley

Marian said...

argh, this strikes me very darkly and makes me wince a little. break those chains, woman!

goatman said...


ibid

Wish it were me!

Other Mary said...

Amazing...I can taste this one. You've got it spot on. This is so damn good.