when you pontificate
from a to
z,
i seem to agree
if tacit-
ly.
when you decide
uni
lateral-
ly,
it never bothers
no, never mind
me.
i'm not a wife
who nags or sighs;
but don't think i'm
some saintly mime--
the officer asked me,
were you
here?
perhaps in
bed?
or even
dead?
far be it from me
to bend his ear--
and so,
I haven't
exactly
said.
_____
for Kay's challenge at Real Toads
Ha! Quietly, behind that silent smile, someone knows something! The first stanza was my favorite because of its theatrical surprise,and then the not-so-compliant partner is no alibi. Thinly veiled threat here! Nicely played.
ReplyDeleteI love this, Shay, especially your use of hyphenation, and "perhaps in bed, or even dead?" cracked me up. I love your ability to come up with something completely different.
ReplyDeleteK
This is excellent, Shay. I think the inclusion of rhyme suits your subject matter and serves to underline the satirical tone. Like all your cautionary tales, I'm left with much to consider about how and what we project of ourselves.
ReplyDeleteI like the line about not being a nagging wife but nor some saintly mime.
ReplyDeleteI sometimes think that my tendency to be not a saintly mime is why love (or some approximation thereof) has never bloomed for me.
Fun to read. :)
ReplyDeleteVery clever
ReplyDeleteoh, i like this one!!! :)
ReplyDeleteyeah, love the rhyme and style of this. ain't saying nothin' no sir!
ReplyDeleteThis is just too cool!
ReplyDelete'and so,
ReplyDeleteI haven't
exactly
said.'
ha! I love that...you are quite clever.
I think you should consider entering this in some of those flash fiction contests.
ReplyDelete(I didn't count the words, but I imagine it's under 100 or 150.)
Very clever, Shay.
Wry and witty, and says exactly all that is need to be said, as I assume no subpoena is forthcoming.
ReplyDeleteSpeaks to the truths that some women endure when duty replaces sharing. I am of the opinion that it tastes better when you share...loved this Shay!!!
ReplyDeleteHaay! Nice use of pontificate! The first stanza is legendary.
ReplyDeleteThis was a joy to read. Very playfully written. Actually read it twice, pausing differently with each read, and managed to get a different vibe from each read.
ReplyDeleteLove, love, love it! The sing songy rhyme is a great juxtaposition to the meaning of the words. Gotta watch out for those quiet ones!
ReplyDeleteI like the way this is laid out--makes it clear and easy to read. I like the humor as well.
ReplyDelete"Perhaps in bed or even dead" Loved it!
ReplyDeleteLove it! Mums the word.. :)
ReplyDeletea day kate but it was perfect for St Pat's .. all it needed was a green beer
ReplyDeleteClever and so very good.
ReplyDeleteShay, first off, BOUGHT your book, the Gem/Scorp/Cap collection. So far, I'm in yours, which means I'm in heaven.
ReplyDeleteAbout this poem... so much more than the prompt required! Mystery, people not as forthcoming with info as officials would like... "in bed/even dead?" Took the wind out of me. GREAT write, honey, Amy
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