Saturday, March 16, 2013

Mime

when you pontificate
from a to
z,
i seem to agree
if tacit-
ly.

when you decide
uni
lateral-
ly,
it never bothers
no, never mind
me.

i'm not a wife
who nags or sighs;
but don't think i'm
some saintly mime--

the officer asked me,
were you
here?
perhaps in
bed?
or even
dead?

far be it from me
to bend his ear--
and so,
I haven't 
exactly
said.
_____

for Kay's challenge at Real Toads
 
 

22 comments:

Susan said...

Ha! Quietly, behind that silent smile, someone knows something! The first stanza was my favorite because of its theatrical surprise,and then the not-so-compliant partner is no alibi. Thinly veiled threat here! Nicely played.

Kay L. Davies said...

I love this, Shay, especially your use of hyphenation, and "perhaps in bed, or even dead?" cracked me up. I love your ability to come up with something completely different.
K

Kerry O'Connor said...

This is excellent, Shay. I think the inclusion of rhyme suits your subject matter and serves to underline the satirical tone. Like all your cautionary tales, I'm left with much to consider about how and what we project of ourselves.

The Real Cie said...

I like the line about not being a nagging wife but nor some saintly mime.
I sometimes think that my tendency to be not a saintly mime is why love (or some approximation thereof) has never bloomed for me.

Lynn said...

Fun to read. :)

ellen abbott said...

Very clever

TexWisGirl said...

oh, i like this one!!! :)

Marian said...

yeah, love the rhyme and style of this. ain't saying nothin' no sir!

Mama Zen said...

This is just too cool!

Poet Laundry said...

'and so,
I haven't
exactly
said.'

ha! I love that...you are quite clever.

Sioux said...

I think you should consider entering this in some of those flash fiction contests.

(I didn't count the words, but I imagine it's under 100 or 150.)

Very clever, Shay.

wkkortas said...

Wry and witty, and says exactly all that is need to be said, as I assume no subpoena is forthcoming.

Herotomost said...

Speaks to the truths that some women endure when duty replaces sharing. I am of the opinion that it tastes better when you share...loved this Shay!!!

Sean said...

Haay! Nice use of pontificate! The first stanza is legendary.

HermanTurnip said...

This was a joy to read. Very playfully written. Actually read it twice, pausing differently with each read, and managed to get a different vibe from each read.

Lolamouse said...

Love, love, love it! The sing songy rhyme is a great juxtaposition to the meaning of the words. Gotta watch out for those quiet ones!

Peggy said...

I like the way this is laid out--makes it clear and easy to read. I like the humor as well.

Roselie said...

"Perhaps in bed or even dead" Loved it!

Susie Clevenger said...

Love it! Mums the word.. :)

Daryl said...

a day kate but it was perfect for St Pat's .. all it needed was a green beer

Mystic_Mom said...

Clever and so very good.

sharplittlepencil.com said...

Shay, first off, BOUGHT your book, the Gem/Scorp/Cap collection. So far, I'm in yours, which means I'm in heaven.

About this poem... so much more than the prompt required! Mystery, people not as forthcoming with info as officials would like... "in bed/even dead?" Took the wind out of me. GREAT write, honey, Amy
http://sharplittlepencil.com/2013/03/17/five-years-old-first-circus/