Thursday, March 21, 2013

Another Of My Kind

I ran with another of my kind
until the earth split,
the chasm dividing us like a riven bone.

Below, the damned, more numerous than lunatics in April.
Above, angels with hooked talons, singing for a drunken god in the stunned hour.

Sister! I called.
She answered, but faintly,
our common language already corrupted, scattering.
_______

for G Man's Friday 55 and for Fireblossom Friday at Real Toads.

34 comments:

TexWisGirl said...

wow - neither heaven nor hell sounds exactly appealing... :)

Cloudia said...

That is lovely, powerful resonant!


" Life is only a dream
and we are
the imagination
of ourselves. "


Bill Hicks


ALOHA from Honolulu
Comfort Spiral
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Helen said...

Thank you for missing me ... I'm barely back to whatever normal was way back on March 3rd. SOOOOOO, tomorrow I sit down for a read of your poetry the last few weeks. Can't wait!!

(your book is now on my Kindle)

Mama Zen said...

"Below, the damned, more numerous than lunatics in April."

Lovin' that!

g-man said...

On my best day EVER
I couldn't come close to writing anything that poetic.
You operate on your own plane Lady!!
Your Indescribilbly Delicious
Loved your Haunting 55
Thanks for fitting me in your other prompt
I really appreciate it and am honored
Have a Kick Ass Week End

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Only you can write a line like "angels with hooked talons,singing for a drunken god in the stunned hour". Wow.

hedgewitch said...

No safety, even with one's own kind, since losing that is hardest...a Crane-ish feel indeed, but far from bargain bin, more like out of most people's price range.

Poet Laundry said...

Wow, Shay, this piece is so choice. The 'April' line reminded me of Edna St. Vincent Millay's 'Spring' poem, which is one of my favs of hers. You are so good at this poetry thing.

Opal Zushaquon said...

Very impressive!

Kerry O'Connor said...

Just superlative, Shay. You count words with amazing skill - not a one wasted - not a one out of place.

Sabio Lantz said...

Wow, that was fascinating. Cool, irreverent, stirring images.
How strange the transformation when a once passionate lover, to whom we felt so close, so similar, can suddenly see us as a mix of crazy, dangerous and repugnant. This, at times, exposes the lie of what we call "love". [if I am anywhere close to your intent.]

Loved (and learned) the word "riven" -- ya got to love Norse words (had to look it up)!

Speculation (note: I am a poetic buffoon):
"the chasm" --"a chasm" ?

Fantastic prompt, Shay. And very touching Cohen quote.

Mixi said...

A very Fireblossomy poem. Full of spirit and fire.

"Below, the damned, more numerous than lunatics in April.
Above, angels with hooked talons, singing for a drunken god in the stunned hour."

I don't know how you think of such lines. Awesome.

Brian Miller said...

nice...really interesting allusion to the break down of language/tower of Babel-ish, and the imagery as well of the damned and the angels...the angels seem just as menacing...

Daryl said...

on one level this reminds me of a recurring dream i have had for many years ... but then this 'more numerous than lunatics in April' cracked me up, new york city in april is the poster child for these words

Marcoantonio Arellano said...

One of these days I'm going to skeak into your storage closet and look in that 'golden fleece trunk' of yours that stores all those phrasiologic treasures.

By the way, I love your, Ms. Simpsons' and Jones' book: Gemini/Scorpio/Capricorn

Wonderful write

Vanessa V Kilmer said...

I love the phrase "stunned hour." Only two words but makes my mind think of all kinds of things.

Flash 55 - Witch Love

Lolamouse said...

Another stunner, Shay! I, too, love the "lunatics in April" line. I wish I could come up with lines like that!

Margaret said...

The last line is so haunting...

common language is so hard to find and then to lose it... Yes, you are good at this "poetry thing". :P

Peggy said...

I feel repetitive saying Wow, but that was my response! Can't even pick a favorite part--all very strong.

lapis said...

Flawless. This is unbelievable pain masked by a perfect poem.

Mary said...

This speaks loudly!

Truedessa said...

Another of my kind..power words in a powerful world..

Helen said...

... the lunatics in March are glued to their TVs drowning in basketball. I should know, I'm one of them.

Seriously, the poem is wonderful.

Vesper said...

Each line is a gem!
I keep reading the poem and I can't get enough...

Other Mary said...

You do so well with that language, corrupted as it is. Stellar write Shay.

kaykuala said...

It's such a tragedy when once together but now apart. What can one say of the gamble of love! Nicely Shay!

Hank

girlwiththepen1118 said...

magnificent hinting of the stark!

Siggi in Downeast Maine said...

Awesome and powerful words. Beyond what ever I could think of...WoW.
Peace
Siggi

Joanna Jenkins said...

You amazing me. Again.
jj

Sini Rachel said...

When you lose your closest friend there is nothing left to console yourself. Even the angels appear to be vultures.
I loved ->I ran with another of my kind
that portrayed the close ties which got separated and then everything darkened.

Lynn said...

Just wow!

Marian said...

argh, what's the point, then?

Jazzbumpa said...

you remind me of Gerard Manley Hopkins

words so wonderfully woven

that when read aloud jeté and pirouette off the tongue

and i have no idea what in the hell you are talking about

Cheers!
JzB

Heaven said...

A cool post, like a riven bone ~