Monday, June 2, 2014

My Love and her particular language

Her smile cool dark and promising,
like the cap coming off a glass Coke bottle.
Her lips, oh mercy...
the sugar
and the bite...

yes.

ahhhhhhhhhhhh.

22 comments:

Kenia Cris said...

A week without Internet connection and the world is upside down - you're writing short! ^_^

I really like the mood of this piece. :)

I end with a kiss. <3

hedgewitch said...

Short and (dirty)sweet as your tag. Nothing like one of those glass-bottle cokes when one is killingly thirsty.

Sioux said...

And even in the labels, a little "Bang a Gong" brings back musical memories.

Your perfectly-captured comparison was sweet, satisfying and biting--all at the same time.

Susan said...

A laugh-out-loud comparison, followed by the sigh of memory. Yes.

Kerry O'Connor said...

The sugar and the bite!!

Aurora Hylton said...

I always did love those glass Coke bottles. Before meeting my husband, I had guys come into my life whose smiles promised something sweet but what they delivered was something else entirely.
I'm one of the members of Team Netherworld. Lily wanted me to let you know that it's absolutely fine for you to use the Flash 55 badge she created and displayed on her poem about her father on Poetry of the Netherworld. I think your admiration of the badge really made her happy. She's had kind of a rough few days.

TexWisGirl said...

sweet! :)

Björn Rudberg said...

That ahh.. so full of those bubbles rising from a newly opened coke bottle (usually too sweet for me though)

Susie Clevenger said...

Yes, love this dirty sweet piece, short and sensual :)

Helen said...

Smiles ~~ but make mine Pepsi please.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

Some sweetness is bad for us, but, often, irresistable.

Grandmother (Mary) said...

Her lips, the sugar and the bite. Killer line.

Cloudia said...

oh those small oldtimey cokes in bottles had SUCH bite!



ALOHA from Honolulu
ComfortSpiral
=^..^=

Stacy Lynn said...

really enjoyed this little read. i have a penchant for old bottles...but the poem reminded me of these desperately hot summer days.

stacy lynn mar
http://warningthestars.blogspot.com/

Kathryn Dyche Dechairo said...

Smiling at the sweetness and the bite.

Shadow said...

with these words, anyone will convert...

G-Man said...

What more does anyone need other than a Coke and a Smile?

Mama Zen said...

Yes!

LL Cool Joe said...

Can it be a cap off a beer bottle instead? :D

Lynn said...

Love that aaaah at the end!

myinnerchick.com said...

ahhhh, the bite.

--you bite w/ words. x

myheartslovesongs.com said...

damn! that's some hot cola!