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Saturday, December 12, 2015

Rose

What a pretty pram, my dear, so fey and queer and quiet--
Emptiness so elegant I feel compelled to buy it

And fill it full of roses, dear, their heads cut clean and slanted
At each stem like diadems of royalty recanted.

I'll roll them 'neath a crescent moon, my dear to soothe your sorrow--
To plant again by Gypsy men I'll hire for gold tomorrow.
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For Kerry's micro-poetry challenge at Real Toads.

This is the first poem written in my gorgeous new journal given to me by Hedgewitch. 

21 comments:

  1. The empty pram is a powerful image... Roses sounds better than lilies.

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  2. The moon and gypies, how can you go wrong...

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  3. Really lovely and a delight to read.

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  4. The eerie quality of this is only reinforced by the neatness and perfection of the rhyme and meter--there is a very genuine classical feel to the language, even as it stabs with the intensity of a more modern emotion. The sense of things lost enshrined in emptiness, of memory and other hauntings for which a cure/exorcism is perhaps not so easily bought as the narrator would suggest, overpowers the logic it pretends to advance...I love the diadem line especially--that is masterful--all in all, not just a poem full of your always very striking visuals, but one that threads lingeringly through the ears like an unfortunate experiment in early psychiatry. Fine fine writing, Shay.

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  5. "An emptiness so elegant." I feel compelled to comment! Love the words and the image. The black to contrast with the rose.

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  6. Shay, you are on such a roll! Every poem I have read here in a good while just takes my breath away, and I ponder: How did she just do that?
    This is stupendous!

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  7. such rhythm and word power wed to your own unique vision......






    Warm ALOHA,
    ComfortSpiral
    ><3 3 3('>


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  8. Beautifully done and yay for a new journal. The gems your journals must contain! You must make sure they will be preserved forever.

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  9. 1, congrats on the new journal.

    2, what a lyric ~

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  10. What came first, the picture or the words? I love the perfect rhythm and rhyme, and of course the empty carriage packs a wallop.

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  11. I hear the little jewelry box music - Sisters Grimm, perhaps, with a twist. Enjoyed much! And what an image... wherever do you find such photos?

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  12. Nothing like getting off on the right cowgirl boot in a journal. ... "recanted" is the startling rhyme, I read it "decanted" the first reading. It's suffused with the bittersweet bluesy resolve of Queen of Swords.

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  13. Diadems of royalty recanted! Just flies off the tongue so perfectly... perfect.

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  14. What a way to start a journal! Wow!

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  15. Woohoo! Kerry got Shay to rhyme her best ever!!!

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