with your hair full of night,
the night full of crows,
the crows gone sorrowful and silent?
Is that you
with your black-step soft,
your moon-gone face,
and the dark coming loose behind it?
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this poem written by Fireblossom with invaluable help from Hedgewitch.
This is so finely shaped and balanced it's almost like the pure high note that can break a glass. Love what you did with the last line--and my help was a raindrop in this perfect storm, but thanks for mentioning it. Darkness visible, indeed.
ReplyDeletei'm not very astute on these things (as you know) but i love the opening.
ReplyDelete"...the dark coming loose behind it" is an incredible line, on a couple of different levels.
ReplyDeleteexquisite ending line! REALLY LOVE this poem!
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I love the cascading effect in the first stanza, with last words becoming first words in the next line.
ReplyDeleteA beautiful walk
ReplyDeleteRick
Sigh...this just takes my breath away I love it so much. Happy Full Blue Moon tonight. xoxo
ReplyDeleteYes!!! Happy Blue Moon ... your poem is breathtaking.
ReplyDeleteWOW! The hair, the night, the crows, the moon-gone face. A perfect poem.
ReplyDeleteHow you keep doing it all ways... I am astonished, delighted
ReplyDeleteAnd this is (ate to say it for there are better words) B E A U T I F U L.
Oh I'm posting this around!
ReplyDelete"Is that you
with your hair full of night,
the night full of crows,
the crows gone sorrowful and silent?"
Weekend Aloha from Honolulu
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Dear Shay , Love the detail in the abstraction. Great job.
ReplyDeleteThis is so beautifully crafted it soaks into your bones.
ReplyDelete"with your hair full of night" ... Gotta love black hair. This is gorgeous, girl.
ReplyDelete"black-step soft" ... Love it.
"the dark coming loose" ... What power, to unravel even darkness.
I read 'Still Alice' and look forward to her new novel!!!
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