Thursday, August 30, 2012

You

Is that you
with your hair full of night,
the night full of crows,
the crows gone sorrowful and silent?

Is that you
with your black-step soft,
your moon-gone face,
and the dark coming loose behind it?
_____

this poem written by Fireblossom with invaluable help from Hedgewitch.

15 comments:

hedgewitch said...

This is so finely shaped and balanced it's almost like the pure high note that can break a glass. Love what you did with the last line--and my help was a raindrop in this perfect storm, but thanks for mentioning it. Darkness visible, indeed.

TexWisGirl said...

i'm not very astute on these things (as you know) but i love the opening.

Sioux said...

"...the dark coming loose behind it" is an incredible line, on a couple of different levels.

myheartslovesongs.com said...

exquisite ending line! REALLY LOVE this poem!

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love the cascading effect in the first stanza, with last words becoming first words in the next line.

Far Beyond The Ridge said...

A beautiful walk
Rick

Marion said...

Sigh...this just takes my breath away I love it so much. Happy Full Blue Moon tonight. xoxo

Helen said...

Yes!!! Happy Blue Moon ... your poem is breathtaking.

Sherry Blue Sky said...

WOW! The hair, the night, the crows, the moon-gone face. A perfect poem.

Dulce said...

How you keep doing it all ways... I am astonished, delighted
And this is (ate to say it for there are better words) B E A U T I F U L.

Cloudia said...

Oh I'm posting this around!



"Is that you
with your hair full of night,
the night full of crows,
the crows gone sorrowful and silent?"


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Buddah Moskowitz said...

Dear Shay , Love the detail in the abstraction. Great job.

Mama Zen said...

This is so beautifully crafted it soaks into your bones.

flipside records said...

"with your hair full of night" ... Gotta love black hair. This is gorgeous, girl.

"black-step soft" ... Love it.

"the dark coming loose" ... What power, to unravel even darkness.

Helen said...

I read 'Still Alice' and look forward to her new novel!!!