Saturday, October 20, 2012

Girl

I am just some girl--
the leopards in the tangled garden know it;
they stalk and strut and do as they will--
respectful of the nasturtium,
but careless of the quiet jonquil.

I am someone with just one desire--
the crows in the glassless greenhouse know it;
they pose, clothed black as priests entire--
denying me the morning glory,
but free with the thorns my rose requires.
_______

Nasturtiums--victory in battle
Jonquils--returned affection, sympathy
Morning Glory--love, affection, mortality
Red Roses--deep romantic love, passion 

23 comments:

Mama Zen said...

That closing is breathtaking!

Sherry Blue Sky said...

"I am someone with just one desire".......love the crows, "clothed black as priests" and "free with the thorns my rose requires". Wow.

hedgewitch said...

You know I love the language of flowers--beautifully used here, interwoven with the warrior leopards and priestly crows. Every thorn has its rose, I like to think, and this poem might fall in that category.

Kerry O'Connor said...

I love the inclusion, intrusion of the animals in this garden: both killers, one with sleek efficiency, the others nasty and opportunistic, and yet each has an impact on this girl. Your use of flowers for their meanings added an intriguing layer of meaning to the piece.

PS: Sorry I went all Chinese on you again.


Sioux said...

"...clothed black as priests entire" is a gem of a phrase.

K9friend said...

I've had a book on my "to read" list called The Language of Flowers. This poem makes me look forward to it even more!

Pat
Critter Alley

flipside records said...

Fantastic. The ending is my favorite:

"denying me the morning glory,
but free with the thorns my rose requires"

Such intense pain.

Kimolisa said...

I loved the imagery and the use of the flowers as replacements for the true meanings. One can take this poem literally or look deeper for the other meaning. Loved this piece.

shawnacy said...

the crows! ... priests and black and this garden of significant life. ...
a potent place, i feel this trailing after the speaker like a cloak.

razzamadazzle said...

You have such depth to your writing. I always have to go back and re-read, and I'm always more impressed the second time around.

Audrey Howitt aka Divalounger said...

I love this, especially the second stanza--and I have to agree with what others have said--there is much depth to this piece--

Other Mary said...

Great images, deep symbols and beautiful, skillful language. I just love the sound of, 'they pose, clothed black as priests entire--' Oh, and thanks for the flower meanings after too!

hoofprintsinmygarden said...

This is beautiful. I loved its sound on the first read, and then read it again after reading the flower symbolism -- and loved it even more. THanks for providing that piece.

aprille said...

Such liberating as well as liberated usage of words and metaphors. Enviably freeflowing.

Kay L. Davies said...

So glad to see Ms Coal continues to write, somewhere. Beautifully done.
K

manicddaily said...

Lovely - I'm not sure one needs the definitions of the flowers - the associations are there even without the specificity I think - especially at the close. k.

myheartslovesongs.com said...

i love the extra layer of meaning with the flowers and i love... well, everything! another brilliant poem, SP!

Loredana Donovan said...

Intriguing! Lots of layers and meaning. I like all the animal and flowers metaphors :)

Margaret said...

Part of a rose's beauty are her thorns... I guess it makes one keep a distance, or makes one be very, very careful.

Susan said...

Seems unfair to be treated thus in such a lush and edible garden. How seductive the scents, how unfair the thorn without the prize.

Susie Clevenger said...

The flowers speak...a beautiful piece

Helen said...

.. 'clothed black as priests entire--
denying me the morning glory' ~~ as a priest might deny Holy Communion.

Marian said...

nasturtiums = victory in battle? who knew? hmmmmm.