She's a fifty foot drop;
no guard rail, just a descanso.
My love is not straight,
and it's always been raining.
She is nothing but the tops of pine trees
reaching up for things that are not meant to fly, but suddenly, do.
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The Perfect Love Poem, for Kenia at Real Toads. I have used comparison.
Note: a descanso is a roadside shrine.
God this is GREAT! The poetic life's blood of perfect gravity and balance!
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Girl, how do you do it? This is so fresh it makes love a new thing.
ReplyDeleteYour strong and unique comparisons elevate the love poem into a thing of beauty.
ReplyDeleteLovely and so fresh as MZ says. I love the switch on pining. K.
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ReplyDeleteImmediately thought of the ending to Thelma and Louise here...
ReplyDeleteGreat first line and it gets better from there! Thanks for teaching me a new vocabulary word too!
ReplyDeleteyou know your labels are almost as good as your poems! (okay, not even close but still...)
ReplyDelete"first there is a mountain then there is no mountain"
ha!
♥
Gorgeous — oh, mistress of metaphor!
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