Thursday, April 23, 2015

My Love Is Like

My love is like asphalt and loose gravel.
She's a fifty foot drop;
no guard rail, just a descanso.

My love is not straight,
and it's always been raining.
She is nothing but the tops of pine trees
reaching up for things that are not meant to fly, but suddenly, do.
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 The Perfect Love Poem, for Kenia at Real Toads. I have used comparison.

Note: a descanso is a roadside shrine.
 

10 comments:

Cloudia said...

God this is GREAT! The poetic life's blood of perfect gravity and balance!

You don't really own how good you are

Mama Zen said...

Girl, how do you do it? This is so fresh it makes love a new thing.

Kerry O'Connor said...

Your strong and unique comparisons elevate the love poem into a thing of beauty.

Outlawyer said...

Lovely and so fresh as MZ says. I love the switch on pining. K.

Mia Wallace said...

This is awesome.

grapeling said...

damn cool ~

Shadow said...

Immediately thought of the ending to Thelma and Louise here...

Lolamouse said...

Great first line and it gets better from there! Thanks for teaching me a new vocabulary word too!

my heart's love songs said...

you know your labels are almost as good as your poems! (okay, not even close but still...)

"first there is a mountain then there is no mountain"

ha!

Rosemary Nissen-Wade said...

Gorgeous — oh, mistress of metaphor!